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11-09-2009, 03:38 PM
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|  Question: Is this Copy any good?
I am not a copywriter, and i never claimed to be ................so be brutally honest please. -------------------------------------------------------------------- New Jobs Available Now Work From Home or Office Establishing Marketing Millionaire Shows You How To Do It For Less Than A Trip To The Movies With Your Kids And You Get a 100% 90 Day Money Back Guarantee No Risk Involved Limited Time Offer Visit: www. xxxxxx.com NOW Before Time Runs Out Learn How Thousands of People From Corona to California Are Changing Their Lives For the Better ************************************************** ****** Do You Want To Generate A LifeTime of Great Income? Sure You Do!!!! But Do You Have What It Takes? If You Think You Do, Then This Course Will Teach You EveryThing You Need To Accomplish Your Goal All For Less Than The Price of Tank Of Gas Plus an Unheard of 365 Day, No Questions Asked Money Back Guarantee ***Go Now To*** www. xyz123. com You’ll Never Succeed Unless You Try ************************************************** ******** ************************************************** ******** Make Money Giving Your Opinion Thousands of People are Earning Hundreds of $$$ Per DAY Completing Surveys Online www bbbbbb.com Learn How You Can Too!!! ************************************************** ************ ************************************************** ************* Like said , I hardly ever write copy, so please brutal honesty!! Oh and forget about the spacing thats just how it formatted for the post. Thanks in advance Frank |
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11-09-2009, 03:57 PM
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| Advanced Offline Warrior War Room Member  Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: St. Louis Area
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| Re: Question: Is this Copy any good?
You have grammatical errors...
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11-10-2009, 05:22 PM
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| Re: Question: Is this Copy any good?
Anybody else want to weigh in on my "monstrosity" , aka, my copy from the first post. Really need opinions........even if you think its crap. thanks and peace |
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11-10-2009, 05:43 PM
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| Re: Question: Is this Copy any good? Quote:
@FrankBowman: It looks ok to me, unless there's a mistake I'm not seeing. | |
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11-10-2009, 05:46 PM
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| Re: Question: Is this Copy any good? Quote:
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11-10-2009, 06:04 PM
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| Re: Question: Is this Copy any good?
Are you promoting a cpa offer?
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11-10-2009, 06:09 PM
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| Re: Question: Is this Copy any good?
What are you using the copy for? Zach |
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11-10-2009, 06:38 PM
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| Re: Question: Is this Copy any good?
Its an offline postcard. First two are CPA, last one is clickbank. I'll be adding graphics and colors..... |
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11-10-2009, 06:49 PM
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| Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Missouri U.S.
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| Re: Question: Is this Copy any good? Quote:
Line 3. Established | |
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11-10-2009, 06:55 PM
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| Re: Question: Is this Copy any good?
Line 1: Work at home Line 3: I know, its a first draft |
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11-10-2009, 06:58 PM
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| Re: Question: Is this Copy any good?
I think I should change it to: Work at home jobs available now I dont wanna be totally dishonest |
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11-19-2009, 09:14 AM
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| Re: Question: Is this Copy any good? Quote:
NOW YOU CAN EARN FROM HOME OR NOW YOU CAN WORK FROM HOME Quote:
So Many People are Earning Hundreds of $$$ Per DAY Completing Surveys Online ONLY SOME SUGGESTIONS. | ||
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11-19-2009, 01:37 PM
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