Need Your Opinions About My Ad Copies

10 years ago

Have you done some A/B testing?

Try without capitalizing each letter and see how it compares.

Also - change 'Loss' to 'Lose'.

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AlyseS

10 years ago

The wording is a bit awkward. The way you've phrased "how to build your body" doesn't really come across as a selling point or something that would get someone's interest. It actually confused me a little. I know what you're trying to say, but it doesn't clearly express a result, like transform your body, build muscle, get bigger biceps, lose cellulite, get a six pack etc.

(and yeah change "loss" to "lose" like they said)

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DavidLasry

10 years ago

Thank you very much guys. I would try to implement this ideas on my creatives and I'll keep you posted!

If anyone has another suggestions please share.

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DavidLasry

10 years ago

Edited...............

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DavidLasry

10 years ago

Originally Posted by DavidLasry

Also guys, I rephrased some of my descriptions and I come up with some better descriptions, in my opinion. What do you think of them?:

Anyone?...........

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TopTarget

10 years ago

Originally Posted by DavidLasry

Anyone?...........

Looks good. Test them out and let us know how you do. Play around with body type, bidding, log-in count, months since sign up, etc. if you're really successful, you might want to keep your stats close hold to keep people from stealing your ideas.

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DavidLasry

10 years ago

Originally Posted by TopTarget

Looks good. Test them out and let us know how you do. Play around with body type, bidding, log-in count, months since sign up, etc. if you're really successful, you might want to keep your stats close hold to keep people from stealing your ideas.

Thank you for the advice.

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inflameous

10 years ago

The photos don't really convince me, I would try some comparison pictures (body comparison) or some kind of food that you can eat while using this product, or something that people actually want, for example eating and loosing weight.

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sonixkid3000

10 years ago

Like they said, change "loss" to "lose". I'm sure you've fixed this already but that's a very important part in your ad copies, typos will keep away even its fluent to read.

In regards to your ad copies, I've had the most success in the weight loss niche on POF with actual models. Men are interested in weight loss but women are easier to convert, especially since there's way more angles that you can take with them. Try another 10-15 ad copies of women smiling, in workout gear, etc.

Another thing to try:

Take the frustration angle in your split tests on POF, you'd be surprised the kind of results you'll see.

Also, play around with the wording. Images do contribute a large portion to the viewers decision as to whether or not they want to click but you should definitely be testing with different words. Even if you just try a variation or two of one of your top performers it's always worth testing.

For me personally, the ads don't have anything spectacular. They're good but you need to convince the people why they should click YOUR ad. Why is your weight loss product better than others? Is it fast, are people satisfied, does it tone their midsection, their glutes, etc.

Always always run your split tests with at least 10 ad copies.

Hope that helps,

To your success
- Jon

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DavidLasry

10 years ago

Originally Posted by sonixkid3000

Like they said, change "loss" to "lose". I'm sure you've fixed this already but that's a very important part in your ad copies, typos will keep away even its fluent to read.

In regards to your ad copies, I've had the most success in the weight loss niche on POF with actual models. Men are interested in weight loss but women are easier to convert, especially since there's way more angles that you can take with them. Try another 10-15 ad copies of women smiling, in workout gear, etc.

Another thing to try:

Take the frustration angle in your split tests on POF, you'd be surprised the kind of results you'll see.

Also, play around with the wording. Images do contribute a large portion to the viewers decision as to whether or not they want to click but you should definitely be testing with different words. Even if you just try a variation or two of one of your top performers it's always worth testing.

For me personally, the ads don't have anything spectacular. They're good but you need to convince the people why they should click YOUR ad. Why is your weight loss product better than others? Is it fast, are people satisfied, does it tone their midsection, their glutes, etc.

Always always run your split tests with at least 10 ad copies.

Hope that helps,

To your success
- Jon

I tried to submit different images that include models, before-after images but PoF didn't approve that.
Can you give me an example of an image that you used?

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sonixkid3000

10 years ago

Originally Posted by DavidLasry

I tried to submit different images that include models, before-after images but PoF didn't approve that.
Can you give me an example of an image that you used?

You just can't show their mid section or behind. It's just a quality issue of how much skin is showing lol. There's plenty out there. I used plenty that just had a lady in workout gear standing there with a water bottle. Another one in a track suit with dumbbells, etc.