24th Oct 2014, 01:18 PM | #1 |
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I am not good at landing pages and have rewritten pages several times to try to improve them. I tried some copy writing techniques but still new at this. Please give me some feedback as to how I can improve my conversion rate. This is my page : http://www.warriorforum.com/warrior-...y-hackers.html Its an anti hacking software for WordPress and other websites. |
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27th Oct 2014, 11:58 AM | #2 |
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Some pointers here: 1. All the large blue fonts are not necessary. It look overdone. 2. Your REAL challenge though is that you are selling something that people only worry about AFTER it has happened. People generally don't buy prevention, they buy cures. So sell your software as a CURE 3. There are free tools that [supposedly] do the same think so you have to show what EXTRA your product has over these free solution. -Ray Edwards |
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27th Oct 2014, 06:11 PM | #3 | |
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Hi Complex,
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27th Oct 2014, 06:43 PM | #4 | |
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Hi Raydal,
I never thought of that when I spent the last one and half years developing the product. Actually, I did not think that selling a cure was much easier than protection. I had always thought that selling prevention was easier then a cure. ... Probably that is why we have doctors making a lot of money and nutritionist lower down the income scale. ...On the other hand, the anti-aging and anti-oxidant market is a multi-billion dollar industry. ... Probably I should sell it as an anti-aging anti-oxidant 'cream' for websites . Tough. Tough. I have to think of something quickly. I know about the free tools and I have seen one complaint where the free WordPress plugin could not block hackers and the website got corrupted. After that Google search engine read the corrupted website to rank it in their search engine results. This complaint came from an SEO specialist while pushing his website to number 1 position in Google SERP. I don't think he made it to the number spot. Since that incident I began to doubt whether the free plugins are good at recovery (cure) too, as they claimed to be. No use trying to recover, its better to prevent. I guess I have to point this out in my page. Thanks for the different points of view as I never thought of them. Thanks, Peter | |
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27th Oct 2014, 11:00 PM | #5 |
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I personally would consider changing the name of the product. I have an engineering degree I get it, but you are speaking to 1% when you want to reach 99%. Something like "Bot Stop" or "Access Denied" or "Bot Dominator" ( you get the idea ) You are very consistent with your writing, and unfortunately that is a bad thing. "I found out the hard way... Internet directories, top page listings, press releases " you are upfront saying these are bad things, THEN coming back and suggesting your product will help. Flip the language a bit... "Do you have successful site that you have listed with a directory? Do you have a successful site that has page 1 SERP listing? Do you use Press releases? These are all positions and places that Bots attack!" "Installing Bot Dominator allows you to focus on further success of your site, and not having to worry about the influx of bot traffic from being successful." It turns it from a mistake to an ego pet... Your customers are doing right, and you and your product are there to protect them. Black text, your headlines can be blue if you like at that point. it creates the contrast in color and makes them pop. You have a great product plain and simple. It would be worth your time and money to hire a copywriter. you should be making a killing with this offer and future affiliate sales. ( Yes your product is that good ) |
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Hi savidge4, Thanks for your comments.
So you can see I have very little copy writing experience as I spent most of my life hunched in front of a computer. Any idea how much a copy writer may charge? Thanks, Peter | |||
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28th Oct 2014, 06:31 AM | #7 | |
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But anyways.. a decent copy writer on something like this you are looking to pay a couple to $400 would be my guess. You have all the data there, tho I would say in some cases it is in the wrong order, and the idea of the wording is there, so it should be a simple process. You really are looking to have someone take the engineering sound out of it, and put the demand and urgency to buy into it. It really wouldn't hurt to have the back story in the copy either. "Hi my name is Peter and I am the author / coder of Bot Dominator. This product came out of necessity, and a need to stop bad traffic from affecting my online business. I was continually dealing with my sites being hacked and my hosting providers questioning my server CPU usage. It got to the point that my 2 primary sites ( an Economics Blog and a Bread Baking Blog ) where rendered useless by Denial of Service Attacks. In February 2013 I had finally had enough! It was going to be them or me, and being an Engineer and a Programmer I decided it was going to be them. Bot Dominator is the product of that drive and determination to level the playing field once and for all." The above humanizes the geek in you... you have a bread blog. it also reinforces the likeness between you and your potential buyers. Your not some big company, you are a person just like they are. The other piece of information that I would make pretty close to the top is what this will work with Wordpress, Joomla and CS-Cart sites. Hope that Helps, And really best of luck with this project. | |
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Hi savidge4,
I like your rewording of the paragraphs. Thanks a lot for the help - Peter | |
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