emptee

Hi Guys,

I'd love some feedback on this from some more seasoned marketers

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Kind Regards,
Michael Thomas

markeeter

I can't call myself a seasoned marketer, but as a customer. I think I'll like to see more pictures, and maybe a few more pictures. How about reducing the sales pitch a bit. That's just how I see it

Others may have a different opinion

ewenmack

Show examples of trades you did.

Paid this much for x.
Sold it for $ x in x days.

Show lots of those examples and with pictures.

Demonstration is much more powerful
than telling.

Headline is weak so there's a big opportunity
for more sales.

Best,
Doctor E. Vile

emptee

Thanks guys - I'll definitely take that on board

joshsiaw

Hi, maybe you want to separate the bonus and highlight the value? The way it is right now it's kind of lost in the sentence just before the buy button.

I noticed you also used a bit of scarcity in saying the price will go up soon. Perhaps you want to add a timer as well? I hear it works wonders.

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emptee

Hi Guys,

I've updated the page a bit now - I'd love to hear your feedback

markeeter

The rest seems good, I just found a small typo , you have wrote I have been a money in the first para.

Your story was pretty interesting,and It was good to read. I liked the changes I saw

ewenmack

Good to see you've put in buy sell examples with images.

Move them up to the top to grab the readers attention
and set their greed on fire!

Leave out your struggle story as it doesn't add to the
sale build up.

If you can demonstrate how long it took to find and
sell the lots of items would be great.

Did you have to haul them and store them?

Can you show opportunities waiting right now
because the reader might be thinking that they are no longer available?

Do that and you are building a strong case for what you have.

Best,
Doctor E. Vile

emptee

Thanks for the feedback guys - I'll see about applying some of that to a split test soon!

Cheers,
Michael

RogozRazvan

#1 - The headline is straight to the point so I can see this working. Explaining arbitrage is also a good idea.

#2 - Is the Craiglist market the same as the IM field? If not, otherwise you may explain what selling ClickBank products & AdSense means.

#3 - Your story is unbelievable, at least. Give some examples. Dramatize it. Why have you’ve failed? What have you’ve learned from it?

#4 - PROOF. Since this is biz op territory, saying that you make $20.000/month by spending only one hour a day on your computer is a very competitive claim. Therefore, back it up with massive amounts of proof and explain why this is different from the other one click type of software(s).

#5 - Results based testimonials.

#6 - Why are you giving this for such a low price - main objection.

#7 - Why will this work when similar type of programs failed for me? main objection.

#8 - What type of skills do I need to have to use this software? objection.

There are many other things to improve but I’d start with these.

Best regards,
Razvan