12th May 2015, 09:13 PM | #1 |
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Hi guys, I just wanted to share my squeeze page that I have been working on and I want to know your thoughts on it. I went through many different ways of creating this and I think I finally got the right one (in my opinion of course). I want to get your thoughts, is it good or is it bad? what can I change to make it better? I want to start driving traffic REALLY soon. (bing ads, Facebook ppc, etc.) youtubemoney4noobs.com made some changes to my squeeze page changed the headline up many times, I feel like I got a better understanding of what my headline should be at first it was: "Find out how newbies are easily making 100/day on YouTube with this exact method." Now I am using. "FREE REPORT: shows how you can use free traffic sources to easily make $100 to $200 per day on YouTube making these super simple and short videos..." is it somewhat better or still broad? |
12th May 2015, 09:45 PM | #2 |
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Too broad.
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12th May 2015, 09:53 PM | #3 |
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13th May 2015, 01:37 PM | #4 |
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Everyone and their mother uses a squeeze page headline like that. The market is getting too sophisticated and when you have a headline like that you are attracting un-targeted subscribers who are low quality. I would do something like: "Free Report Reveals The Top 2 Unknown Methods to Driving Cheap Laser Targeted Traffic with YouTube and Increasing Your Profits by 1,346%" Again, that was off the top of my head real quick but come up with a headline that fits your offer that is more specific like the example above. |
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13th May 2015, 03:52 PM | #5 |
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Just like the above, this is too broad, read few books about copywriting. I would suggest Cashvertising. Best regards, CPA Beyond |
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14th May 2015, 09:39 AM | #7 |
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Your headline is a mouthful and should be simplified and more specific. Maybe something more like: How To Make Money On YouTube By Posting Simple Videos That Take Less Than 5 Minutes To Make Enter your email below to get your free step-by-step YouTube profits ebook Not sure what you're teaching in your ebook so that headline may not be relevant, but the idea is to get people to think "hey, I can do that..." And it has to get that across in that 2-3 seconds you have their attention. Also, if you're giving away an ebook, why not add more value by putting a nice cover graphic on there with a title like "5 Minute YouTube Profits" or something along those lines that reinforces your headline. I'd also lose the red arrows, not needed with that gigantic button and makes the page look a bit desperate. And make sure you are split testing different headlines. Sign up for Optimizely (not an affiliate link) for a free account that will let you split test up to 50,000 unique visits/month. |
14th May 2015, 07:18 PM | #8 |
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You need to hint at differentiation or specialization: "How I used Youtube's lesser-known channel optimization tactics to get an extra 5,000 daily views, and make an extra $87 per day" ---------- Can you see how my above example helps people see part of the picture you're trying to paint? Do you think they'd want to see more if they were interested in making money, especially from youtube? |
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14th May 2015, 10:19 PM | #9 |
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I applaud your ability to take action good job. Take a step back, and ask who is your market? Yes Im, yes mmo, but I need you to narrow that down even more. Video marketers? Ok the ones looking to rank locally? What about the ones who want more like web shows? Now where do those people hang out? What do they complain about, what's their biggest problem( or problem in general) Now that you have the information you can better target your market with the buzz words that affect them. Now they have to know what you are offering. Hope this helps - research is your friend. |
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15th May 2015, 12:40 AM | #10 |
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Your page is too broad and a large area of the page is looking blank.
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15th May 2015, 01:27 AM | #11 |
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I find your page to be too simple, too empty, it doesn't stand out, it's just like any other generic "how to make money fast" squeeze page. o, chances are people won't subscribe. I suggest you change your headline into something more catchy, more interesting, and maybe give a few details about what the free ebook contains, so people will be intrigued.
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16th May 2015, 05:11 AM | #12 |
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Hi rick323, As has been said, you could possibly add a good quality cover image which can add a bit of feel to the page. You could use the Content Builder from Thrive Themes. Take a look here at the included templates. You can then just fill in your own info. https://thrivethemes.com/landingpages/ cheers, Mal. |
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24th May 2015, 05:42 PM | #13 |
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Thanks for all the replies I've been getting I took everything into consideration and now I think I improved my squeeze page, I just want to know what more can I do? or does it need more work?
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25th May 2015, 01:51 PM | #14 |
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29th May 2015, 09:24 AM | #15 |
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Hi, ask yourself wich is the value you are giving to your customers?How are you answering to their problems?Review layout and graphics they are too ordinary, it can be improved |
29th May 2015, 10:12 AM | #16 |
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Remember to be original and always ask yourself: as a customer, would I buy it? Would it interest me in the first place? Best of luck buddy
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29th May 2015, 03:29 PM | #17 |
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Your homepage doesn't build credibility. Neither does your link lol.
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30th May 2015, 05:52 AM | #18 |
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As about told, it is too broad and the fonts are too bold to convince people.
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30th May 2015, 09:16 AM | #19 |
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Looks pretty good to me. You could probably get away with removing: "Enter your email below so you can receive your free report and learn the secrets I use to making money on YT" But as long as it's functioning properly, I'd go ahead and send some traffic to it. |
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