Please review 2 of my landing pages

jimmy12 · 16th Sep 2015, 01:02 AM

Hi I recently design 2 landing pages for 2 different websites, i would request to all you guys out there to take look at the landing pages and let me know as which page is better or what else i can do to make it better for more and more conversions, I thank you all in advance for your professional comments..Below are the url for both of my website:-
Affiliate Software | Affiliate Tracking Software | Affiliate Marketing program Software

Affiliate Tracking Software| Affiliate Marketing Program Software Demo

tonylebrotti · 17th Sep 2015, 03:10 AM

too many information
try to use bold titles before articles, also infographic is good fo LPs
on the first LP you have too many points in "package" block) nobody wants to read a lot

AyiamDigital · 17th Sep 2015, 08:25 PM

As tonylebrotti stated, you have too many words on your pages. Both of them are the same of course, so the same changes should be made to both.

For example:

Affiliate Software

Generate more leads
More traffic
More ROI
More Sales

..WHAT affiliate software? What's the name of it? Having no name is bad for branding, and doesn't help bring credibility to your offer.

The subheadings are okay because they show benefits. And the call to action "click for the live demo" is cool too, but your benefits aren't believable if credibility hasn't been established.

The layout of the "click for the live demo" should be changed to something that grabs attention more; bigger and bolder with a more eye-pleasing layout.

When I scroll down the page(s), there are far too many words and the formatting shows too many columns. It's difficult to know what to read, and can confuse and distract your visitors. Confusion and distractions are among the biggest conversion killers out there.

Another example:

"Dont worry...! We hate spam as well as you do..."

Try instead: "We will never send spam! We hate it more than you do!"

Next, change the layout/theme of your website and have someone who is knowledgeable in conversions and copywriting work with you. It will also help to make sure the person has an excellent command of the English language, to improve the appeal of your product on a worldwide scale.

Hope that helps!

RolandNR · 3rd Oct 2015, 09:43 AM

I agree with tonylebrotti

The Cypher · 3rd Oct 2015, 05:39 PM

You also realize there is about a dozen call to actions on that LP.

16th Sep 2015, 01:02 AM	#1
jimmy12 New Warrior Member Join Date: 2012 Posts: 25 Thanks: 1 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Please review 2 of my landing pages Share on: Hi I recently design 2 landing pages for 2 different websites, i would request to all you guys out there to take look at the landing pages and let me know as which page is better or what else i can do to make it better for more and more conversions, I thank you all in advance for your professional comments..Below are the url for both of my website:- Affiliate Software \| Affiliate Tracking Software \| Affiliate Marketing program Software Affiliate Tracking Software\| Affiliate Marketing Program Software Demo
	MLM Software \| Affiliate Software \| Direct Selling Software

17th Sep 2015, 03:10 AM	#2
tonylebrotti Warrior Member Join Date: 2015 Posts: 10 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Please review 2 of my landing pages Share on: too many information try to use bold titles before articles, also infographic is good fo LPs on the first LP you have too many points in "package" block) nobody wants to read a lot

17th Sep 2015, 08:25 PM	#3
AyiamDigital Active Warrior Join Date: 2015 Location: Los Angeles, California Posts: 41 Thanks: 1 Thanked 9 Times in 8 Posts	Re: Please review 2 of my landing pages Share on: As tonylebrotti stated, you have too many words on your pages. Both of them are the same of course, so the same changes should be made to both. For example: *Affiliate Software* Generate more leads More traffic More ROI More Sales ..WHAT affiliate software? What's the name of it? Having no name is bad for branding, and doesn't help bring credibility to your offer. The subheadings are okay because they show benefits. And the call to action "click for the live demo" is cool too, but your benefits aren't believable if credibility hasn't been established. The layout of the "click for the live demo" should be changed to something that grabs attention more; bigger and bolder with a more eye-pleasing layout. When I scroll down the page(s), there are far too many words and the formatting shows too many columns. It's difficult to know what to read, and can confuse and distract your visitors. Confusion and distractions are among the biggest conversion killers out there. Another example: *"Dont worry...! We hate spam as well as you do..."* Try instead: "We will never send spam! We hate it more than you do!" Next, change the layout/theme of your website and have someone who is knowledgeable in conversions and copywriting work with you. It will also help to make sure the person has an excellent command of the English language, to improve the appeal of your product on a worldwide scale. Hope that helps!

3rd Oct 2015, 09:43 AM	#4
RolandNR Warrior Member Join Date: 2015 Posts: 17 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Please review 2 of my landing pages Share on: I agree with tonylebrotti

3rd Oct 2015, 05:39 PM	#5
The Cypher HyperActive Warrior Join Date: 2015 Posts: 110 Thanks: 3 Thanked 67 Times in 40 Posts	Re: Please review 2 of my landing pages Share on: You also realize there is about a dozen call to actions on that LP.