Alex Antoniazzi

So I just had this made on Fiver, could I get some feedback? Do you think I need to change anything? I'm afraid the whole background image being white looks weird and then it's just my opt in form. What do you think?

http://i.imgur.com/HFzafk1.png

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Alaister

This is a good starting point where you can run a/b tests and change different components to see what increases conversions.

My initial feedback would be to change the benefit bullet points to a different color. The yellow is difficult to read on the white.

Another variation which you could test, could feature a clip showcasing and previewing the videos that people will receive.

Bryan Harkins

You know, for a Fiverr gig that is actually a pretty solid squeeze page. I could be wrong but I think it will convert well because the people looking for dog training information probably aren't used to seeing squeeze pages so they won't have much to compare to. So in this niche I would say your headline is much more important than the design.

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Lance K

What are these videos going to help me train my dog to do? Wash dishes? Take out the trash? It's pretty vague. Your copy needs to be more compelling.

Design wise, I'd say it's good start.

I also agree with the yellow on a white background being difficult to read.

Alex Antoniazzi

Here is my 2nd version, I think the red stands out a little better.

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pnglifesolutions

Looks great for me. Now to A/B testing phase. all the best!

GlenH

IMHO your bullets still are not specific enough. They are way to generalize and in no way spark my interest.

I own 4 dogs, and even though you're offering free videos, I would still want to know exactly what I'm going to learn in your videos.

If you're going to offer the prospect 8 specific strategies, make sure you deliver on those specific strategies.

Make sure the 'training' strategies you give in your video are the ones dog owners always have the biggest problem solving. And make the copy in your bullets more intriguing

A few quick ideas off the top of my head....

Video 1: How to make your dog come and sit on command (even if everything you're tried so far has failed)

Video 2: The secret to eliminating food aggression in 10 minutes (once you know how to do this, you'll be the boss)

Video 3: How to stop your dog from chewing the clothes, the furniture, and destroying the backyard.


Another couple of thoughts

1...The dog training niche is seriously competitive, and there are some cleaver big time player who have been there a long time.

You should check out the 'dog training' niche on Clickbank to see what you're up against

2...If I were you I'd bring on board a good copywriter to write all your sales materiel, otherwise you won't have a chance of getting a toehold in the market to start with

Audrey Harvey

Well said, Glen, I agree with you totally. I like the look of the squeeze page. I own four dogs too (don't they take up a lot of space on the couch!!) and there's not enough specific information on that squeeze page to make me sign up. I'd possibly do it out of curiosity to see if I could learn something from your techniques, but that's not going to turn me into a buyer.

I'd want to see something that spells out a bit more about what I'll learn. Will I learn how to make dog walking more enjoyable or will I learn how to easily potty train a dog or will I learn why and how to crate train a dog? What are the top 8 issues people have with their dog's behavior and manners? A big one in my experience is people struggle with their dog jumping up on them and their friends. I think you need to show how you'll solve a problem because that's what people will spend money on.

DavidAllenNeron

Red text on bullets, yellow doesn't seem to suit it.

I like it actually... could use one more bullet, something to add to... no clickers, no training collars, ... ? ?? no barking? .. I dunno, .. something like that.. but red.. the yellow is like ugh to me.. but I like it man.

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Alex Antoniazzi

Interesting about clickbank. I tried searching through google for my competitors and never found any of those...

I feel like every niche now days has high competition though, I would think that means there is a big market then.

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hermonk9

Hey Alex,
on the last 14 years i did deal as dog training, i have a famous cane corso kennel (one of the main male sutde dog in the US is from my breeding), i did International projects for working dogs.
you are welcome to visit my youtube
https://www.youtube.com/user/gidi1979/videos

with your Dog Training Squeeze Page, I personally would add a video... i do like your brightdog.com video.

I do not know your market (i'm not from the US) but here pepole want to connect with you if you are good for them and the dog's.

You are welcome to PM me if you need help

Good luck
Gidi Ben Dor

Anshar

hello, Alexbrightdog,
just wanted to ask, how is everything going with your squeeze page? Are emails floating in? Are you making enough money with this?

Best of luck!
Thanks!

RahulNag

Hi,

Looking at your second squeeze page, I would recommend doing split testing like people are saying.

And to try one version with a video there and also a version where there is an introduction of who you are, your experience with dogs etc.

And you can also try things like asking for people's first name and seeing what kinds of conversions these add upto.

But not bad for a Fiverr gig.

RafaelThaGreat

I would say this looks great, Fiverr gig or not it looks nice.

A/B testing would be the smartest thing to do, Video's are always nice to watch instead of reading text.

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