Please Review my squeeze page

matty123 · 15th Aug 2014, 05:31 AM

Hi All,
Can you please ask for your feedback/comments on my squeeze page and what you would improve on or change about the current design?. i am new to affiliate marketing so still learning to put things together properly.

Thanks

Matty

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lerozk · 15th Aug 2014, 07:41 AM

I think it is quite good. The only thing, it doesn't fits my browser window, I have to scroll, it a little bit annoying. My screen resolution is 1366x768
Also CTA button is too large, it really doesn't look like a button, make it smaller

munstersg01 · 15th Aug 2014, 07:50 AM

I feel that the white arrow should be red.

I also feel that the background picture was rather distracting; when the lady at the background is enlarge it does not give the sense that the lady in the picture is slim although there is a tape measure to suggest so.

You did not include a privacy policy and disclaimer. You may also wish to include some "as seen on" icons such as tweeter, facebook, Youtube etc. This is to make your offer look "legit" and more desirable.

You may also wish to emphasize on the "free".

Also you may want to A/B split test your squeeze page

Hope my suggestions are welcomed and useful

Best of luck

Danny

Benung · 15th Aug 2014, 02:36 PM

I want to add that if possible you can put the cover of the book because people want to perceive things.
You can also add some key notes whats inside your free report.

Hope this helps.

peekay · 15th Aug 2014, 02:37 PM

To be brutally honest,

Your offer -
"Discover The Secrets To LOSING A MINIMUM OF 10 POUNDS IN 30 - 60 DAYS!"

will not cut it, trust me.
- It is too general.
- It sounds hypey
- People have seen it before, been there, done that and got burnt.

You have to seriously rethink
- your specific target audience
- your offer to that target audience (one which is more specific, believable, valuable and sounds convincing).

Hope you take this positively.

LuckyIMer · 15th Aug 2014, 02:59 PM

I like how the design/website looks like, it is simple and with good combination of colors. You need to work on content and SEO.

Ghoster · 15th Aug 2014, 04:32 PM

Definitely make the button smaller. I like it overall, though.

savidge4 · 15th Aug 2014, 10:54 PM

I would test the button... there is such thing as to small maybe not so much to large. the arrow I would go Blue to match your color scheme and would pull it off the background that you have ( it now gets a bit lost )

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coluden · 16th Aug 2014, 05:37 AM

You got some good suggestions already. I agree that a smal ecover for your report/book would be helpful. Keep fine-tuning your main header until it SNAPS!

Best,
coluden

jamesfreddyc · 16th Aug 2014, 08:27 AM

Originally Posted by peekay

To be brutally honest,

Your offer -
"Discover The Secrets To LOSING A MINIMUM OF 10 POUNDS IN 30 - 60 DAYS!"

will not cut it, trust me.
- It is too general.
- It sounds hypey
- People have seen it before, been there, done that and got burnt.

You have to seriously rethink
- your specific target audience
- your offer to that target audience (one which is more specific, believable, valuable and sounds convincing).

Hope you take this positively.

Totally agree. This marketplace has a much higher level of sophistication now and has simply heard it all. Most know that what the OP is offering is no secret whatsoever.

matty123 · 18th Aug 2014, 09:21 AM

thanks for the feedback guys

matty123 · 18th Aug 2014, 09:27 AM

anymore feedback from anyone else?

longseo · 19th Aug 2014, 08:47 PM

Your design is quite simple, but good.
One comment: I think you should choose another background. The current background makes viewers hard to see the sentences in the opt-in section.

723Media · 20th Aug 2014, 05:47 AM

Some good suggestions so far.

I would make the "For Women Only" line less important. Right now it stands out too much. I get what you're going for but it competes with the headline.

As @peekay and @jamesfreddyc pointed out, the headline needs a different focus. I wouldn't go with the the secret discovery approach.Try some emotive headlines.

"Do your favorite jeans not fit anymore?"

Something like that makes it more personal. Asking a painful question can help in this niche.

Follow up with something that lets them know that you as the writer have gone through the same thing. Then let them know that you are offering a free report to help them lose those 10lbs.

For the button copy: "Get Instant Access Now" doesn't really convey that they are downloading a free report. It's usually used for memberships.

I would test the button copy as something like "Email Me My Free Report". That way you tell the user exactly what they are getting and how they should expect to receive it.

I would keep the button size but it's definitely something that you can test.

Last, I would test removing the privacy notice. They are used with good intention but can also introduce hesitancy. For some people, the fact that you mention that you won't spam them or sell their information, makes them question why you need to say that in the first place. If you feel you have to have that disclaimer, I would put it elsewhere in the funnel.

prbarton · 20th Aug 2014, 09:08 AM

Peekay is right on. The message is to general. Have to have a unique "Hook". No problem with the graphics except the white arrow is hard to see.

xojads22 · 20th Aug 2014, 12:42 PM

make the women in the body looks slim and fit well with you main content, add more color variation to your ad copy to make it easy for visitors to see. Just my point.

matty123 · 22nd Aug 2014, 10:28 AM

thanks all. made some amendments ,let me know what you think.

15th Aug 2014, 05:31 AM	#1
matty123 Active Warrior Join Date: 2014 Posts: 74 Thanks: 0 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts	Please Review my squeeze page Share on: Hi All, Can you please ask for your feedback/comments on my squeeze page and what you would improve on or change about the current design?. i am new to affiliate marketing so still learning to put things together properly. Thanks Matty Free Gift

15th Aug 2014, 07:41 AM	#2
lerozk Warrior Member Registered Member Join Date: 2013 Posts: 11 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Please Review my squeeze page Share on: I think it is quite good. The only thing, it doesn't fits my browser window, I have to scroll, it a little bit annoying. My screen resolution is 1366x768 Also CTA button is too large, it really doesn't look like a button, make it smaller

15th Aug 2014, 07:50 AM	#3
munstersg01 Danny Ng War Room Member Join Date: 2008 Posts: 1,612 Thanks: 169 Thanked 453 Times in 331 Posts	Re: Please Review my squeeze page Share on: I feel that the white arrow should be red. I also feel that the background picture was rather distracting; when the lady at the background is enlarge it does not give the sense that the lady in the picture is slim although there is a tape measure to suggest so. You did not include a privacy policy and disclaimer. You may also wish to include some "as seen on" icons such as tweeter, facebook, Youtube etc. This is to make your offer look "legit" and more desirable. You may also wish to emphasize on the "free". Also you may want to A/B split test your squeeze page Hope my suggestions are welcomed and useful Best of luck Danny
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15th Aug 2014, 02:36 PM	#4
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15th Aug 2014, 02:37 PM	#5
peekay HyperActive Warrior Join Date: 2010 Posts: 106 Thanks: 0 Thanked 31 Times in 19 Posts	Re: Please Review my squeeze page Share on: To be brutally honest, Your offer - "Discover The Secrets To LOSING A MINIMUM OF 10 POUNDS IN 30 - 60 DAYS!" will not cut it, trust me. - It is too general. - It sounds hypey - People have seen it before, been there, done that and got burnt. You have to seriously rethink - your specific target audience - your offer to that target audience (one which is more specific, believable, valuable and sounds convincing). Hope you take this positively.
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LuckyIMer Doing IM since 1999 Join Date: 2011 Location: London Posts: 714 Thanks: 12 Thanked 65 Times in 62 Posts	Re: Please Review my squeeze page Share on: I like how the design/website looks like, it is simple and with good combination of colors. You need to work on content and SEO.
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15th Aug 2014, 04:32 PM	#7
Ghoster Advanced Warrior Join Date: 2012 Location: North Carolina, US Posts: 935 Thanks: 283 Thanked 301 Times in 192 Posts	Re: Please Review my squeeze page Share on: Definitely make the button smaller. I like it overall, though.
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15th Aug 2014, 10:54 PM	#8
savidge4 Midnight Oil Warrior Join Date: 2013 Location: Bridgeport, WV. Posts: 6,736 Thanks: 3,531 Thanked 6,519 Times in 3,460 Posts	Re: Please Review my squeeze page Share on: I would test the button... there is such thing as to small maybe not so much to large. the arrow I would go Blue to match your color scheme and would pull it off the background that you have ( it now gets a bit lost ) "The secrets to Loosing 10 pounds in 30 - 60 days EASY!" a Instant Access to the 100% Free Secrets to Loosing Weight Easy Report Enter your Email for Instant Access

16th Aug 2014, 05:37 AM	#9
coluden HyperActive Warrior Registered Member Join Date: 2004 Location: Kingston, Posts: 211 Thanks: 19 Thanked 31 Times in 29 Posts	Re: Please Review my squeeze page Share on: You got some good suggestions already. I agree that a smal ecover for your report/book would be helpful. Keep fine-tuning your main header until it SNAPS! Best, coluden

18th Aug 2014, 09:21 AM	#11
matty123 Active Warrior Join Date: 2014 Posts: 74 Thanks: 0 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts	Re: Please Review my squeeze page Share on: thanks for the feedback guys

18th Aug 2014, 09:27 AM	#12
matty123 Active Warrior Join Date: 2014 Posts: 74 Thanks: 0 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts	Re: Please Review my squeeze page Share on: anymore feedback from anyone else?

19th Aug 2014, 08:47 PM	#13
longseo Active Warrior Join Date: 2014 Posts: 49 Thanks: 4 Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts	Re: Please Review my squeeze page Share on: Your design is quite simple, but good. One comment: I think you should choose another background. The current background makes viewers hard to see the sentences in the opt-in section.
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20th Aug 2014, 05:47 AM	#14
723Media HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: 2009 Posts: 145 Thanks: 3 Thanked 48 Times in 24 Posts	Re: Please Review my squeeze page Share on: Some good suggestions so far. I would make the "For Women Only" line less important. Right now it stands out too much. I get what you're going for but it competes with the headline. As @peekay and @jamesfreddyc pointed out, the headline needs a different focus. I wouldn't go with the the secret discovery approach.Try some emotive headlines. "Do your favorite jeans not fit anymore?" Something like that makes it more personal. Asking a painful question can help in this niche. Follow up with something that lets them know that you as the writer have gone through the same thing. Then let them know that you are offering a free report to help them lose those 10lbs. For the button copy: "Get Instant Access Now" doesn't really convey that they are downloading a free report. It's usually used for memberships. I would test the button copy as something like "Email Me My Free Report". That way you tell the user exactly what they are getting and how they should expect to receive it. I would keep the button size but it's definitely something that you can test. Last, I would test removing the privacy notice. They are used with good intention but can also introduce hesitancy. For some people, the fact that you mention that you won't spam them or sell their information, makes them question why you need to say that in the first place. If you feel you have to have that disclaimer, I would put it elsewhere in the funnel.
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22nd Aug 2014, 10:28 AM	#17
matty123 Active Warrior Join Date: 2014 Posts: 74 Thanks: 0 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts	Re: Please Review my squeeze page Share on: thanks all. made some amendments ,let me know what you think.