****ty conversions on my review page!!! Plz critique

true_promote · 07-09-2009, 12:01 PM

I am promoting a physical product. Its in the male enhancement niche. The company is "fastsize extenders"
Now i have created a new website just dedicated to this company. i am also getting some clicks from the search engines for the tradename keywords. I guess that is pretty very very very targetted buying traffic. But my review site is converting ****ty. I have changed the review copy but still no benefit
one of the reason why this may not be converting for me may be due to the high price of the product($250)
I am willing to change the entire landing page(the entire review copy, site design,etc). A little(much....) help is required from you guys. I spent several hours in doing SEO for this site and am very sad to find the bull**** conversion(I got only 1 sale in 2 full months with all 1000 super-targeted organic traffic! )
Plz review my page below and offer me some suggestions. Anybody having experience in affiliate marketing of physical products online/ men's products may be better able to help me...

Thanks in advance
my site is fastsizeextenders. net

redfc · 07-10-2009, 10:56 AM

Hi

Option 1: If you are doing yourself:

the way I look at it, is that perhaps you may try convert your landing page to review site.

Check spelling mistake due to typo error. e.g Attatchment methods - Attachment methods?

Be specific, "We spent countless hours analyzing these devices from a variety of perspectives including cost, success rates, user experience, etc".

consider revise to this:

"We spent countless hours analyzing these devices from a variety of perspectives including cost, success rates and user experience"

In my opinion, your order now button give me the impression your are sending me to your payment gateway but instead you are sending me to your affiliate's sales page again, its rather confusing.

overall impression after reading the landing page is that is more like reading a report.

option 2: Would suggest getting professional help to re-write the whole landing page again.

good luck.

cheers

Loren Woirhaye · 07-10-2009, 11:17 AM

Maybe a video showing your before and after results would help.

JK

What you are doing is, I expect, highly competitive.

Your review site is totally transparent. I'll bet you're just pushing
the product that pays you the highest commission.

People are skeptical. You page reads like nothing but a veiled
sales pitch.

07-09-2009, 12:01 PM	#1
true_promote Warrior Member Join Date: May 2008 Location: , , . Posts: 1 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	**ty conversions on my review page!!! Plz critique I am promoting a physical product. Its in the male enhancement niche. The company is "fastsize extenders" Now i have created a new website just dedicated to this company. i am also getting some clicks from the search engines for the tradename keywords. I guess that is pretty very very very targetted buying traffic. But my review site is converting ty. I have changed the review copy but still no benefit one of the reason why this may not be converting for me may be due to the high price of the product($250) I am willing to change the entire landing page(the entire review copy, site design,etc). A little(much....) help is required from you guys. I spent several hours in doing SEO for this site and am very sad to find the bull** conversion(I got only 1 sale in 2 full months with all 1000 super-targeted organic traffic! ) Plz review my page below and offer me some suggestions. Anybody having experience in affiliate marketing of physical products online/ men's products may be better able to help me... Thanks in advance my site is fastsizeextenders. net

07-10-2009, 10:56 AM	#2
redfc Active Warrior Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 51 Thanks: 3 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts	Re: ty conversions on my review page!!! Plz critique Hi Option 1: If you are doing yourself: the way I look at it, is that perhaps you may try convert your landing page to review site. Check spelling mistake due to typo error. e.g Attatchment methods - Attachment methods? Be specific, "We spent countless hours analyzing these devices from a variety of perspectives including cost, success rates, user experience, etc". consider revise to this: "We spent countless hours analyzing these devices from a variety of perspectives including cost, success rates and user experience" In my opinion, your order now button give me the impression your are sending me to your payment gateway but instead you are sending me to your affiliate's sales page again, its rather confusing. overall impression after reading the landing page is that is more like reading a report. option 2: Would suggest getting professional help to re-write the whole landing page again. good luck. cheers

07-10-2009, 11:17 AM	#3
Loren Woirhaye gypsy accordion menace War Room Member Join Date: May 2006 Location: Amherst, Massachusetts Posts: 3,159 Blog Entries: 11 Thanks: 75 Thanked 490 Times in 354 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: ty conversions on my review page!!! Plz critique Maybe a video showing your before and after results would help. JK What you are doing is, I expect, highly competitive. Your review site is totally transparent. I'll bet you're just pushing the product that pays you the highest commission. People are skeptical. You page reads like nothing but a veiled sales pitch.
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