Oh my god...this copy blows

nontemplates · 08-12-2009, 07:18 AM

Onslaught you claimed a discussion was stupid and I referenced it. thats it. No apologies . No regrets. There are three of you - all friends - in just about every thread I am in baiting. please move on.

P.S. I do not accept on a public board any "hierarchy clicks" (I take it you mean cliques?). Outside of mods and admins. I've laid out some of my background in several threads both in sales and in writing. I see only where you reference a history in window washing and "devouring marketing material" but it doesn't matter. Internet forums are about the exchange of ideas and the strength of those ideas should stand on their own. Everything else can be fudged, exaggerated and downright lied about [especially on a board where work is being solicited).

nontemplates · 08-12-2009, 07:39 AM

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Originally Posted by secretssovaluable

Again, thank you all for your suggestions. I am going to split test. If you are curious...here is the updated version based on suggestions here:

myworkathomesolution.com/myworkathomesolution/

Good Job! You've certainly solved most of the layout issues. Great idea to do the split testing if you can. Practical beats theory every time. You will learn so much more.

Collette · 08-12-2009, 01:34 PM

Susan - MUCH better, easier to read layout.

Suggestions:

- Change your font to something sans serif, such as Arial or Verdana.

Serif fonts (the ones with little hooks, such as Times Roman or Chicago), slow down reading speed online. You want your readers to read quickly, as they would devour a good book.

- Center your sub-heads and bump up the font size a tad. Make your initial caps consistent (some of your sub-heads use initial caps and some don't. Makes it difficult to skim effectively).

- Check for typos. I caught a few. Not major, but would be nice

.

- Use a Johnson Box for your guarantee, and a recognizable "Buy Now" type button for your payment clickthru. Make it easy for your readers to take action. They're used to seeing a certain 'format' when they buy online. Don't make them have to 'interpret' a new format (see "slows down" above).

- Start Selling!

08-12-2009, 07:18 AM	#51
nontemplates HyperActive Warrior Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Sunny Florida Posts: 214 Thanks: 10 Thanked 22 Times in 19 Posts	Re: Oh my god...this copy blows Onslaught you claimed a discussion was stupid and I referenced it. thats it. No apologies . No regrets. There are three of you - all friends - in just about every thread I am in baiting. please move on. P.S. I do not accept on a public board any "hierarchy clicks" (I take it you mean cliques?). Outside of mods and admins. I've laid out some of my background in several threads both in sales and in writing. I see only where you reference a history in window washing and "devouring marketing material" but it doesn't matter. Internet forums are about the exchange of ideas and the strength of those ideas should stand on their own. Everything else can be fudged, exaggerated and downright lied about [especially on a board where work is being solicited).

08-12-2009, 01:34 PM	#53
Collette Advanced Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: alicubi super pluvia Posts: 780 Thanks: 236 Thanked 511 Times in 259 Posts	Re: Oh my god...this copy blows Susan - MUCH better, easier to read layout. Suggestions: - Change your font to something sans serif, such as Arial or Verdana. Serif fonts (the ones with little hooks, such as Times Roman or Chicago), slow down reading speed online. You want your readers to read quickly, as they would devour a good book. - Center your sub-heads and bump up the font size a tad. Make your initial caps consistent (some of your sub-heads use initial caps and some don't. Makes it difficult to skim effectively). - Check for typos. I caught a few. Not major, but would be nice . - Use a Johnson Box for your guarantee, and a recognizable "Buy Now" type button for your payment clickthru. Make it easy for your readers to take action. They're used to seeing a certain 'format' when they buy online. Don't make them have to 'interpret' a new format (see "slows down" above). - Start Selling!