Story wanted: "Finding the hidden trick"/"Small guy beating the system by careful analysis"

leonardb · 08-18-2009, 02:16 AM

Hello fellows,

I'm a bit stuck here:

What I need for my sales letter is a small real-life story that demonstrates how, if you don't fall into the trap of pushing harder and harder and instead just step back for a while and analyze the situation, you will find out the "magic trick" behind a success -- and how, once you have that trick figured out, success becomes as easy as tieing your shoe laces.

An epiphany moment, where the "small guy" outfoxes the system by using his mind, so to speak.

Anyone have an idea what situation I could use for such a story?

The best example I found is from David DeAngelo's Mastery Program sales letter. I enclose it below.

Thank you for any ideas! Once I have found a story, I'll be happy to share it here.

Best,
Leo

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Excerpt from David DeAngelo's "Mastery Program" Sales Letter:

Have you ever been to a county fair or a carnival?

You know those games they have that you can play to win a HUGE stuffed animal?

When you walk by the booth, the guy with the raspy voice who's missing an upper front tooth says "Here, look how easy it is" and he shows you how easy it is to win the game...

It looks SO simple, right?

And he can do it EVERY TIME.

He says "Cummon, try it... it's easy".

Then he even gives you a FREE TRY, right?

And you get sooooo close. It was RIGHT THERE. You could see what you did "wrong", and you know on the next try you can do it right and win...

So you cough up the money, and you get ready to win.

And then it happens...

You try a few more times, and EVERY time you get "so close".

And then the no-front-tooth-havin' guy shows you how "easy" it is AGAIN... right there for you to see (and your girl too, of course).

Well GET THIS.

A few years back now, I went up to one of those booths and I said "OK, I'm going to figure this damn thing out".

But instead of falling for the trick of giving up my money right away, I stood there and WATCHED the guy as he tricked people into giving up their money.

I watched over and over.

As I watched, I began to realize that there was something going on that most people weren't seeing.

There was a "trick" to winning the game, but most people were so "in a hurry" and so "instant gratification minded" that they COULDN'T EVEN SEE IT.

Well I saw it.

Then I did one more thing that gave ME the edge...

I would watch the toothless guy show someone how "easy it was", then I'd CLOSE MY EYES and imagine myself going through the motions, and doing the "trick" in the sequence.

I actually stood in front of the booth for about three HOURS preparing myself to win one of those big stuffed animals.

As you can imagine, when I finally did play, I WON.

And you know what? I didn't care about the stuffed animal.

I only cared about the fact that I had "beaten the system".

I outfoxed the fox.

I had figured out the secret, and now I HAD THE POWER.

I went to another fair event a couple of months later, strolled right up to the booth, and walked away with the huge stuffed animal.

It felt so cool... (yeah, I realize that I'm kind of a dork, but roll with me here).

So what's this got to do with MASTERING this thing called "Women And Dating"?

A lot.

A helluva lot, actually...

What if you knew the "trick" to consistently attracting women?

What if you could attract women as consistently and predictably as that one-toothed guy at the fair can win the stuffed animal game?

Again, let me ask you: What if YOU KNEW THAT UNDERLYING "TRICK" to CONSISTENT success with women?

Well that's what this program is going to teach you.

I'm going to reveal and describe the single most powerful underlying "TRICK" to consistently and predictably attracting women... and, more importantly, KEEPING THEM ATTRACTED.

And the great thing about this "trick" is that once you get it, you'll never lose it. Once you understand this one SIMPLE thing, it will forever change your interactions with women... GUARANTEED.

dorothydot · 08-18-2009, 07:53 AM

Why do you have to stick to "true?" Just come up with believable fiction characters [using a common first name is a great give-away for not-true] in believable situations.

[edited to delete story - please pm me and I'll be glad to email it to you.]

Dot

[2nd edit: how about a story of the victim of a playground bully who figured out a way to methodically put the bully in his/her place by thinking hard and tricking the kid? Surely someone has already been-there-done-that.]

leonardb · 08-19-2009, 02:05 PM

@dorohydot,

thank you for sharing your story. (I got it before you deleted it.)

I don't necessarily need a true story. What I'm looking for are just some ideas for stories... some settings with a different content but the same framework as the example.

That idea of yours about the schoolyard bully is good. I'm looking for more "brainstorm material" like this.

Thanks to everybody who contributes!

Leo

Mona · 08-26-2009, 11:52 AM

Do you know the story of the Brer Rabbit and the briar patch?

The rabbit outsmarts the fox and gets him to throw him into the briar patch by saying he's super afraid of it, when it in actuality, he's really familiar with the briar patch and knows it will help him escape.

You can read the story here and see if it's what you're looking for or gives you some ideas.

Oops - tried to post a link to the story and I don't have enough posting cred. to do that yet, so just go to Google and type: "don't throw me into the briar patch"

The story is the first result that shows up. Hope it helps!

08-18-2009, 02:16 AM	#1
leonardb Warrior Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 6 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Story wanted: "Finding the hidden trick"/"Small guy beating the system by careful analysis" Hello fellows, I'm a bit stuck here: What I need for my sales letter is a small real-life story that demonstrates how, if you don't fall into the trap of pushing harder and harder and instead just step back for a while and analyze the situation, you will find out the "magic trick" behind a success -- and how, once you have that trick figured out, success becomes as easy as tieing your shoe laces. An epiphany moment, where the "small guy" outfoxes the system by using his mind, so to speak. Anyone have an idea what situation I could use for such a story? The best example I found is from David DeAngelo's Mastery Program sales letter. I enclose it below. Thank you for any ideas! Once I have found a story, I'll be happy to share it here. Best, Leo --- Excerpt from David DeAngelo's "Mastery Program" Sales Letter: Have you ever been to a county fair or a carnival? You know those games they have that you can play to win a HUGE stuffed animal? When you walk by the booth, the guy with the raspy voice who's missing an upper front tooth says "Here, look how easy it is" and he shows you how easy it is to win the game... It looks SO simple, right? And he can do it EVERY TIME. He says "Cummon, try it... it's easy". Then he even gives you a FREE TRY, right? And you get sooooo close. It was RIGHT THERE. You could see what you did "wrong", and you know on the next try you can do it right and win... So you cough up the money, and you get ready to win. And then it happens... You try a few more times, and EVERY time you get "so close". And then the no-front-tooth-havin' guy shows you how "easy" it is AGAIN... right there for you to see (and your girl too, of course). Well GET THIS. A few years back now, I went up to one of those booths and I said "OK, I'm going to figure this damn thing out". But instead of falling for the trick of giving up my money right away, I stood there and WATCHED the guy as he tricked people into giving up their money. I watched over and over. As I watched, I began to realize that there was something going on that most people weren't seeing. There was a "trick" to winning the game, but most people were so "in a hurry" and so "instant gratification minded" that they COULDN'T EVEN SEE IT. Well I saw it. Then I did one more thing that gave ME the edge... I would watch the toothless guy show someone how "easy it was", then I'd CLOSE MY EYES and imagine myself going through the motions, and doing the "trick" in the sequence. I actually stood in front of the booth for about three HOURS preparing myself to win one of those big stuffed animals. As you can imagine, when I finally did play, I WON. And you know what? I didn't care about the stuffed animal. I only cared about the fact that I had "beaten the system". I outfoxed the fox. I had figured out the secret, and now I HAD THE POWER. I went to another fair event a couple of months later, strolled right up to the booth, and walked away with the huge stuffed animal. It felt so cool... (yeah, I realize that I'm kind of a dork, but roll with me here). So what's this got to do with MASTERING this thing called "Women And Dating"? A lot. A helluva lot, actually... What if you knew the "trick" to consistently attracting women? What if you could attract women as consistently and predictably as that one-toothed guy at the fair can win the stuffed animal game? Again, let me ask you: What if YOU KNEW THAT UNDERLYING "TRICK" to CONSISTENT success with women? Well that's what this program is going to teach you. I'm going to reveal and describe the single most powerful underlying "TRICK" to consistently and predictably attracting women... and, more importantly, KEEPING THEM ATTRACTED. And the great thing about this "trick" is that once you get it, you'll never lose it. Once you understand this one SIMPLE thing, it will forever change your interactions with women... GUARANTEED.

08-18-2009, 07:53 AM	#2
dorothydot Selling with Stories War Room Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Southern Maryland Posts: 497 Thanks: 289 Thanked 120 Times in 102 Posts	Re: Story wanted: "Finding the hidden trick"/"Small guy beating the system by careful analysis" Why do you have to stick to "true?" Just come up with believable fiction characters [using a common first name is a great give-away for not-true] in believable situations. [edited to delete story - please pm me and I'll be glad to email it to you.] Dot [2nd edit: how about a story of the victim of a playground bully who figured out a way to methodically put the bully in his/her place by thinking hard and tricking the kid? Surely someone has already been-there-done-that.]
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08-19-2009, 02:05 PM	#3
leonardb Warrior Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 6 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Story wanted: "Finding the hidden trick"/"Small guy beating the system by careful analysis" @dorohydot, thank you for sharing your story. (I got it before you deleted it.) I don't necessarily need a true story. What I'm looking for are just some ideas for stories... some settings with a different content but the same framework as the example. That idea of yours about the schoolyard bully is good. I'm looking for more "brainstorm material" like this. Thanks to everybody who contributes! Leo

08-26-2009, 11:52 AM	#4
Mona Warrior Member Join Date: Aug 2009 Posts: 9 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Story wanted: "Finding the hidden trick"/"Small guy beating the system by careful analysis" Do you know the story of the Brer Rabbit and the briar patch? The rabbit outsmarts the fox and gets him to throw him into the briar patch by saying he's super afraid of it, when it in actuality, he's really familiar with the briar patch and knows it will help him escape. You can read the story here and see if it's what you're looking for or gives you some ideas. Oops - tried to post a link to the story and I don't have enough posting cred. to do that yet, so just go to Google and type: "don't throw me into the briar patch" The story is the first result that shows up. Hope it helps!