Can someone test my sales letter for me?

Daniel Brock · 11-15-2009, 01:14 PM

Hello Warriors!

I am in need of assistance. I added some video to my sales letter, but I am not 100% that it is working for all browsers(IE is what I am most concerned about).

Can someone test out of my sales letter at:
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and tell me if you can view the video(it's just below the top fold)?

Also, feel free to critique my sales letter, I could use some improvements.

Thank you for your time. I have no idea who else to ask!

Ken Strong · 11-15-2009, 01:23 PM

Just heading out the door, but I do see the video in Firefox. Maybe you should consider moving it above the fold?

Daniel Brock · 11-15-2009, 01:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by KenStrong

Just heading out the door, but I do see the video in Firefox. Maybe you should consider moving it above the fold?

FireFox is the one I know that works.

Internet explorer is the one I am most concerned about.

And yes, you are right about moving the video up. That's on my list of my next improvements.

Thank you,
Daniel

Daniel Brock · 11-15-2009, 01:28 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Paul McQuillan

Works for me

Did you write the sales page?

Yes, I wrote it. Took me freaking forever like 2 straight days.

I had no idea sales letters were so time consuming.

Daniel Brock · 11-15-2009, 06:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Paul McQuillan

2 days? That is pretty damned good for 2 days

Good for you!

Thank you sir

Tina Golden · 11-15-2009, 06:37 PM

Video worked fine for me in IE, Daniel. Honestly, I didn't read the sales letter as I'm not nearly qualified to give an opinion on copywriting. I do like the audio part of the video though - quite professional sounding.

Tina

Mike Anthony · 11-15-2009, 06:54 PM

Paul's right. thats pretty nice work for two days (even for a week). Don't know if you want to fall in with the new FTC rules as to claims of earnings (web hosting is much more competitive that even four years ago so that will probably not be an average result) and I don't think its really fair to claim running a lucrative hosting company is something that takes little work. I take it you outsourced support? Which can still leave you with headaches.

Nice market though with plenty of upsells. Ton loads of people looking to get into web hosting ever week over on Webhostingtalk alone

Daniel Brock · 11-15-2009, 08:20 PM

Tina and Mike,

Thanks for the compliments! It's interesting to see how much I have improved with my copywriting even after only writing 3 sales letters so far.

My first one was atrocious. Looking back, my third letter isn't even in the same league as my first one.

Mike,
Web Hosting can be pretty easy work ONCE you have your system in place.

I guess that is something I need to address better in my sales letter, that while it is really easy and automated once you get it to a certain point, getting it to that point does require work on your end.

I will write up something to address that aspect.

Thanks again!

Mike Anthony · 11-15-2009, 08:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Daniel Brock

Mike,
Web Hosting can be pretty easy work ONCE you have your system in place.

I guess that is something I need to address better in my sales letter, that while it is really easy and automated once you get it to a certain point

HI Daniel,

As part of web programming I did a bit of hosting and you can never automate it fully. All you can do is hire support staff (which is outsourcing not automation), Hosting clients have questions, issues and problems which is why every good host I know has a ticketing system help desk.

So watch where you may be overstating besides that i think you have a winner.

11-15-2009, 01:14 PM	#1
Daniel Brock Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Posts: 1,628 Thanks: 169 Thanked 934 Times in 254 Posts Contact Info	Can someone test my sales letter for me? Hello Warriors! I am in need of assistance. I added some video to my sales letter, but I am not 100% that it is working for all browsers(IE is what I am most concerned about). Can someone test out of my sales letter at: HostLauncher - A complete step by step blueprint to starting your own web host. and tell me if you can view the video(it's just below the top fold)? Also, feel free to critique my sales letter, I could use some improvements. Thank you for your time. I have no idea who else to ask!
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Ken Strong Marxist (Groucho) War Room Member Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Seattle, WA, USA. Posts: 4,644 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 759 Thanked 1,492 Times in 707 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Can someone test my sales letter for me? Just heading out the door, but I do see the video in Firefox. Maybe you should consider moving it above the fold?
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Tina Golden Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Massachusetts, USA Posts: 3,050 Blog Entries: 2 Thanks: 4,300 Thanked 3,096 Times in 1,556 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Can someone test my sales letter for me? Video worked fine for me in IE, Daniel. Honestly, I didn't read the sales letter as I'm not nearly qualified to give an opinion on copywriting. I do like the audio part of the video though - quite professional sounding. Tina

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Mike Anthony SEO D'Artagnan War Room Member Join Date: Aug 2009 Posts: 4,302 Thanks: 398 Thanked 799 Times in 542 Posts	Re: Can someone test my sales letter for me? Paul's right. thats pretty nice work for two days (even for a week). Don't know if you want to fall in with the new FTC rules as to claims of earnings (web hosting is much more competitive that even four years ago so that will probably not be an average result) and I don't think its really fair to claim running a lucrative hosting company is something that takes little work. I take it you outsourced support? Which can still leave you with headaches. Nice market though with plenty of upsells. Ton loads of people looking to get into web hosting ever week over on Webhostingtalk alone
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11-15-2009, 08:20 PM	#8
Daniel Brock Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Posts: 1,628 Thanks: 169 Thanked 934 Times in 254 Posts Contact Info	Re: Can someone test my sales letter for me? Tina and Mike, Thanks for the compliments! It's interesting to see how much I have improved with my copywriting even after only writing 3 sales letters so far. My first one was atrocious. Looking back, my third letter isn't even in the same league as my first one. Mike, Web Hosting can be pretty easy work ONCE you have your system in place. I guess that is something I need to address better in my sales letter, that while it is really easy and automated once you get it to a certain point, getting it to that point does require work on your end. I will write up something to address that aspect. Thanks again!
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