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Old 02-02-2010, 11:41 AM   #1
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Hi guys,

I just have a thing for asking questions all the time regarding a topic. Even, if I were a high authority in a field, I would still ask questions... With the many copywriting talents that differentiate throughout this forum, I would like to know, if anyone can offer suggestions to my salespage.

It would be mostly appreciated.

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-Ludovic

Version 1 ==> Click Here to View Salespage>>
Version 2 ==> Click Here to View Salespage>>

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Old 02-02-2010, 12:08 PM   #2
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Hi Ludovic,

Just so you know, when you click on Version 1, it gets forwarded automatically to Download New Private Label Rights eBooks & PLR Products Risk Free

With regards to your page, for starters, I really like the look of it - it is "visually appealing".

I'll only comment on the beginning...

- Headline: Instantly Profit 100% --> What does this mean? (Sounds weird to me...)
- The highlighting - Don't highlight "From"
- The pre-head, headline and deck copy all work pretty good, good job (make it look easy, big reward, benefits...) The intro is decent as well.

One thing I might touch upon is: people might think there's no more money to be made in PLR or it's old, etc. - is there something unique or almost foolproof about what you're offering (?)


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Old 02-02-2010, 01:07 PM   #3
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Here is what I don't like, after clicking your links to come back here I'm not able to, I have to click some more to finally get back to this part, to type this review. Everything looked ok, acceptable by affiliate marketing standards, but the inability to not be able to click away really annoyed me.

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True the Instantly Profit 100% is confusing
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Old 02-17-2010, 06:25 AM   #5
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Well, in the first link your headline is way too long.

And then the visitor has to go through two exit pops to get off the page. That really sucks and will work against you.

If I remember right, you came here for a critique of your opt-in page a while back. I actually opted in for some free PLR and was presented with not one, but three One Time Offer pages. And the link to refuse the offer was so small and hidden it took forever to find it.

And when I did finally find it I got another and then another OTO offer. I immediately opted out of your mailings because I, and almost everyone else has better things to do than experience the aggravation of such aggressive marketing.

So... If you feel that pissing people off is a good marketing strategy, you're doing great.

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Old 02-17-2010, 06:38 AM   #6
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I THINK Version-2 is more appealing as far as my knowledge is concerned.

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