I need some serious feedback about my blog

[Joshua Houghton]

Hey Everyone,

My name is Josh and I'm pretty new to these forums. I came to the copywrting forum as I have a situation which I'm sure talking to all of you could help. Here is my situation

I run a very popular hypnosis blog designed to provide quality hypnosis information, articles, training, reviews and recommended products. Well I have had my site for about a year now and I get around 100 hits a daym but I haven't made one affiliate sale yet.

Now I don't have my own product or anything like that. I have always just worked on provided good content like most people say to do and than I would put my affiliate links within the post. Well I got a good discussion going on the I'm making a killing at clickbank post and got some good advice to people about my overall website.

Some of the advice I got was that my copy needed serious work. People claimed I wasn't selling my recommended product or reviews enough. Technically I wouldn't know how as Im new to this field. I have always just made my reviews the best I could and hoped they would sell but nothing.

So the more I talk to people the more it appears its my copy. I would really love some feedback from everyone about my site as far as copy goes. I have plenty of great content, but no one is buying and I know hypnosis has a solid market. I should as Im a hypnotist.

My biggest question is how do i make a quality review into good copy without sounding like a sales page. My readers know me for my credibility. I have recently rewritten the following pages, but I feel they still need help. Any feedback or suggestions would be so helpful as I'm dying here to make my first sell.

Most of my copy are on the following pages, but the main site is www.whatsonmybrain.com
Speed Trance: Instant Hypnotic Inductions | Whats on my Brain Hypnosis Blog

Review: The Power of Conversational Hypnosis | Whats on my Brain Hypnosis Blog

http://www.whatsonmybrain.com/recommended-books/

Once again thank you in advance and I look forward to learning form all of you.

Joshua Houghton

[kkchoon]

Problems I found on your site:

1. You like to write lengthy articles, no problem. But you must write for scan, just by scanning it I don't know what are you talking about.

Solution:
a) You can improve your article with **more** BOLD and slightly bigger title for your paragraphs.
b) you can use list instead of lengthy text.

2. You need to do a proper keyword research, try to target more buying keywords => Purchase, buy, discount, coupon...

3. You properly are not targeting your audience... Join Hypnotic forums and see what is the problem people facing, write it down, look for solutions as well and write them down. Use the keywords you found on the forums and perform detail keyword research to find more keywords and modifier.

4. Write good advise on your blog about the problems found it the forums, use your signature to draw them back to your site. Depends on the forum regulation, you can place a link back to your post as well.

5. You need to offer opt-in report to collect emails, use your autoresponder power to build relationship with your readers, write email with problems => solution that you found in the forum.

Each of the problems requires more practice and research...frequently ask and visit this forum will accelerate your learning process.

[travlinguy]

Presently, your copy is decent and could be a lot better.

Consider these concepts:

Economy of words
Proofing and editing

Good Luck