can anyone critic my sales page? I have been sending offers but not getting conversion....

fated82 · 02-20-2011, 04:13 AM

Hi all,

I have been sending some offers to my list lately and there are click thru....However, there are no sales and I am becoming worried. I am wonder if there is anything wrong with the sales page. Can all of you critic my sales page and tell me why it is not converting? Thanks!

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Thanks!

The Copy Nazi · 02-20-2011, 04:44 AM

Just looked at the FB one. Your English needs improving for starters. Dud headline. Unexciting layout. Ordinary copy...and two lousy video "testimonials" that look like they came from Fiverr (am I right?). The second girl has an Australian accent and yet you're claiming she's from Illinois?

No hardcore facts and figures and no credibility. Smells off and is turning people off. Fail.

maximus242 · 02-20-2011, 05:04 AM

Ill critic the other one then

In a word, it sucks. This just reaks of BS but how stupid do you really think these people are. Your prospects are not idiots, even you dont believe this crap

You failed to address the number one objection to buying PLR products, namely most of the products that are PLR - SUCK!

bestrendz · 02-20-2011, 05:17 AM

people want proof these days. testimonies from someone people dont know... question of credibility.

The Copy Nazi · 02-20-2011, 05:28 AM

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Originally Posted by bestrendz

people want proof these days. testimonies from someone people dont know... question of credibility.

Worlds Worst Video Testimonials weren't they? Notice the way their eyes wander to the script. "And its all thanks to PLR Cash Machine". LOL. Yeah - right.

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The Copy Nazi Mal Lambe War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: The Bunker, Paris Posts: 2,484 Blog Entries: 2 Thanks: 791 Thanked 1,479 Times in 700 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: can anyone critic my sales page? I have been sending offers but not getting conversion.... Just looked at the FB one. Your English needs improving for starters. Dud headline. Unexciting layout. Ordinary copy...and two lousy video "testimonials" that look like they came from Fiverr (am I right?). The second girl has an Australian accent and yet you're claiming she's from Illinois? No hardcore facts and figures and no credibility. Smells off and is turning people off. Fail.

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maximus242 HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: , , . Posts: 447 Thanks: 23 Thanked 155 Times in 101 Posts	Re: can anyone critic my sales page? I have been sending offers but not getting conversion.... Ill critic the other one then In a word, it sucks. This just reaks of BS but how stupid do you really think these people are. Your prospects are not idiots, even you dont believe this crap You failed to address the number one objection to buying PLR products, namely most of the products that are PLR - SUCK!

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bestrendz Active Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: Adelaide Posts: 69 Thanks: 16 Thanked 15 Times in 11 Posts	Re: can anyone critic my sales page? I have been sending offers but not getting conversion.... people want proof these days. testimonies from someone people dont know... question of credibility.