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Wage, we gotta read it first man...do away with that blue background and replace it with white, then come back Best, Ewen |
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| Creative genius. War Room Member Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: Denver
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Right in the beginning the copy starts off with a big bit of misinformation. Twitter is not the biggest social media site. Additionally, you never really get into the benefits, and your letter just dumps the offer on them at the very end, without actually providing them with any incentive to buy. It needs some serious work, PM if you'd like be to a rewrite, or more in depth review for you. |
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The next time is see an offer to turn my computer into my personal ATM machine, I'm going to puke.
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Every example account on your page is suspended...
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