need sales critique for twitter marketing product

Wage Mills · 07-01-2011, 03:51 PM

ewenmack · 07-01-2011, 04:06 PM

Wage, we gotta read it first man...do away with that blue background and replace it with white, then come back

Best,
Ewen

adamlantelme · 07-08-2011, 04:09 PM

Right in the beginning the copy starts off with a big bit of misinformation. Twitter is not the biggest social media site.

Additionally, you never really get into the benefits, and your letter just dumps the offer on them at the very end, without actually providing them with any incentive to buy.

It needs some serious work, PM if you'd like be to a rewrite, or more in depth review for you.

Ken_Caudill · 07-08-2011, 04:15 PM

The next time is see an offer to turn my computer into my personal ATM machine, I'm going to puke.

adamlantelme · 07-08-2011, 04:26 PM

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Originally Posted by Ken_Caudill

The next time is see an offer to turn my computer into my personal ATM machine, I'm going to puke.

That and Cash sucking whatever.

Scott Murdaugh · 07-09-2011, 04:34 AM

Every example account on your page is suspended...

Cam Connor · 07-09-2011, 06:54 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ken_Caudill

The next time is see an offer to turn my computer into my personal ATM machine, I'm going to puke.

Don't read my sig.

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