Need critique on twitter software product

[Wage Mills]

need suggestions for this website
tweetdominator.com

[Wage Mills]

Originally Posted by rsseosolution

it seems to be a cool software to me

thanks
so i shouldnt change anything?

[Mark Andrews]

Originally Posted by Wage Mills

need suggestions for this website
tweetdominator.com

A simple 'please' will go a long way towards helping you to receive high quality copywriting critiques.

A Wacky Idea For Those Wanting Critiques

[John_S]

Traffic is nice. Conversions are better.

Traffic only boosts your bandwidth costs. It's not the benefit the non-narcissist wants. You can get huge numbers of poorly converting traffic, that's not the point. Sales beats traffic. Profitable sales beats any sale at any cost.

Given the twitterpated mindset, I may be talking to the wrong crowd.

[Mark Andrews]

Originally Posted by John_S

Traffic is nice. Conversions are better.

Traffic only boosts your bandwidth costs. It's not the benefit the non-narcissist wants. You can get huge numbers of poorly converting traffic, that's not the point. Sales beats traffic. Profitable sales beats any sale at any cost.

Given the twitterpated mindset, I may be talking to the wrong crowd.

And very simple 'on topic' language works best in sales copy.

Non-narcissistic wants?

Twitterpated mindset?

[John_S]

Okay, two simple sentences.

Traffic is nice. Conversions are better.

[Mark Andrews]

Originally Posted by John_S

Okay, two simple sentences.

Traffic is nice. Conversions are better.

Much better, thanks.

[Wage Mills]

uploaded a new video
need feedback

[Cam Connor]

Originally Posted by Wage Mills

uploaded a new video
need feedback

Looks good, though I wouldn't offer the "whole kitchen sink" on the sales page... leave a little bit to the imagination...

A little mystery, goes a long way.

[Mark Andrews]

Originally Posted by Wage Mills

uploaded a new video
need feedback

A kid can scream blue murder demanding this, that and the other but if they don't say please, they don't get it.

6 Reasons Why I Seldom Critique Copy Here

[max5ty]

Originally Posted by Wage Mills

need suggestions for this website
tweetdominator.com

A couple of quick ideas:

I'm not sure why your headline is a link - but I would make the headline much bigger.

I would switch the video and the proof element around.

I don't know what your resources are, but I think your video would be much more appealing if you were talking the viewer through the steps. If you're not good at speaking, you could probably find someone on fiverr that would do it for 5 bucks.

Are you using the comment section for testimonials? If you are, I'd have someone start the ball rolling by giving you one.

Just a couple quick thoughts - hope you do well with your sales.

[Wage Mills]

Originally Posted by rsseosolution

it seems to be a cool software to me

Originally Posted by max5ty

A couple of quick ideas:

I'm not sure why your headline is a link - but I would make the headline much bigger.

I would switch the video and the proof element that you have around.

I don't know what your resources are, but I think your video would be much more appealing if you were talking the viewer through the steps. If you're not good at speaking, you could probably find someone on fiverr that would do it for 5 bucks.

Are you using the comment section for testimonials? If you are, I'd have someone start the ball rolling by giving you one.

Just a couple quick thoughts - hope you do well with your sales.

thanks for the feedback