Please Critique my Sales Page

gregszul · 07-11-2011, 04:06 AM

Hi I'm new in Internet Marketing, so I'm looking for opinions about my sales page and sales copy.
The product isn't available yet but I'm looking for some help before I run advertising campaign.

Please tell me your overall opinion about my site.

Thank You.

lovedbyladies.com

Mark Andrews · 07-11-2011, 05:55 AM

The product is still in the pipeline is it?

The Copy Nazi · 07-11-2011, 07:56 AM

There's nothing like succinct copy is there - "Get laid today" his Nav. bar says.

gregszul · 07-11-2011, 07:58 AM

Yes the product is not available yet, I'm just looking for some opinions before I get started.

jasondinner · 07-11-2011, 08:14 AM

I love the title for the course, but you have a lot of work to do

For starters, I would put this offer on a traditional direct response sales page.

And you are overusing that same pic of the 5 hot girls your customers will
never get to bang. lol

It's chicken-head overload.

And the skinny red table you're using for your call to action is going to get more people to leave your page than actually buy.

You want your call to action link to be hyperlink blue with no red behind it. Maybe some light light yellow or something.

Your copy seems like it could do the trick possibly with some tweaks that everyone else will probably suggest to you, but your layout alone will kill any chance you may have of selling with the copy you have at the moment.

Hope this helps

Jason

gregszul · 07-11-2011, 08:19 AM

Thank You I will Fix it. ;]

07-11-2011, 04:06 AM	#1
gregszul Warrior Member Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 5 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Please Critique my Sales Page Hi I'm new in Internet Marketing, so I'm looking for opinions about my sales page and sales copy. The product isn't available yet but I'm looking for some help before I run advertising campaign. Please tell me your overall opinion about my site. Thank You. lovedbyladies.com

07-11-2011, 05:55 AM	#2
Mark Andrews SmokingHotCopy@gmail.com War Room Member Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: In Somebody Else's Shoes Posts: 1,685 Blog Entries: 2 Thanks: 1,587 Thanked 1,332 Times in 722 Posts Contact Info	Re: Please Critique my Sales Page The product is still in the pipeline is it?
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07-11-2011, 07:56 AM	#3
The Copy Nazi Mal Lambe War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: The Bunker, Paris Posts: 2,490 Blog Entries: 2 Thanks: 791 Thanked 1,481 Times in 701 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Please Critique my Sales Page There's nothing like succinct copy is there - "Get laid today" his Nav. bar says.

07-11-2011, 07:58 AM	#4
gregszul Warrior Member Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 5 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Please Critique my Sales Page Yes the product is not available yet, I'm just looking for some opinions before I get started.

07-11-2011, 08:14 AM	#5
jasondinner Balla Ass Marketer :P War Room Member Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Long Island, NY USA. Posts: 1,524 Thanks: 233 Thanked 153 Times in 114 Posts Social Networking	Re: Please Critique my Sales Page I love the title for the course, but you have a lot of work to do For starters, I would put this offer on a traditional direct response sales page. And you are overusing that same pic of the 5 hot girls your customers will never get to bang. lol It's chicken-head overload. And the skinny red table you're using for your call to action is going to get more people to leave your page than actually buy. You want your call to action link to be hyperlink blue with no red behind it. Maybe some light light yellow or something. Your copy seems like it could do the trick possibly with some tweaks that everyone else will probably suggest to you, but your layout alone will kill any chance you may have of selling with the copy you have at the moment. Hope this helps Jason
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07-11-2011, 08:19 AM	#6
gregszul Warrior Member Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 5 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Please Critique my Sales Page Thank You I will Fix it. ;]