Some advice from the pros?

Kiriakos22 · 07-16-2011, 12:00 PM

Hallo to everyone

My name is Kiriakos and I've been in IM for only 1-2 months.

I have just created my first squeeze page and would really need some advice from the pros in here.

If I can have 2 minutes of your time-I know you are busy-plz visit the site in my signature and tell me your opinion.

Thanks a lot

Kiriakos

Ken_Caudill · 07-16-2011, 12:05 PM

I like it. Simple and direct. There's a typo in beginners.

Kiriakos22 · 07-16-2011, 12:22 PM

Thanks a lot Ken

I am glad u saw the typo cause I would never notice it :P(i have a small issue with my english)

corrected allready

Thanks again

Kiriakos

P.S. Is it good or is it against me that in a way I'm forcing visitors to click the like button to get the free gift?

Alex Cohen · 07-16-2011, 01:13 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kiriakos22

Hallo to everyone

My name is Kiriakos and I've been in IM for only 1-2 months.

I have just created my first squeeze page and would really need some advice from the pros in here.

If I can have 2 minutes of your time-I know you are busy-plz visit the site in my signature and tell me your opinion.

Thanks a lot

Kiriakos

The headline is single-benefit-how-to. That type usually doesn't work very well in today's modern age. Especially when saying the same thing thousands of other headlines say.

Also, "Warning"? The text on the right is not warning your reader of anything. "Revealed" or even "Attention" would be better.

I predict a poor opt-in rate if you leave the page as-is.

Alex

Spinna · 07-16-2011, 01:29 PM

I personally wouldn't click on that "Like" button if I'd have to give my email address too; that's asking for too much. The "like" button is for my free gift, and the email request is for instant access. Instant access to what? Coz I'll have my free gift already.

You could change the "And" to "and" at the top.

Kiriakos22 · 07-16-2011, 01:41 PM

Spinna and Alex.

Thank you for your advice.

I'm afraid you saw the wrong squeeze page.I accidently had that uploaded but i corrected it now.

If you want check it out again.Its quit similar but with different body copy.

Thanks again

Kiriakos

max5ty · 07-17-2011, 12:57 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kiriakos22

Hallo to everyone

My name is Kiriakos and I've been in IM for only 1-2 months.

I have just created my first squeeze page and would really need some advice from the pros in here.

If I can have 2 minutes of your time-I know you are busy-plz visit the site in my signature and tell me your opinion.

Thanks a lot

Kiriakos

Just a couple things:

I was wondering if most would understand what the warning was about - you have the big word WARNING, then don't really address it.

Also, not everyone has a Facebook account - there are quite a few who can't stand Facebook at all...You may alienate some.

Some who do have a Facebook account may get upset that they're forced to like something without knowing what it is.

Overall it looks pretty good - just be sure to test.

Anthony Phillips · 07-17-2011, 01:54 AM

I think as a squeeze page it definitely works. Simple with a strong call to action.

However, Where do I place my email to to grab the free gifts? I think your page is broken.

Anthony

Seleyna · 07-17-2011, 09:12 PM

It is short and direct, good copy!

ewenmack · 07-17-2011, 10:05 PM

Hi Kiriakos,

As Alex said, I also predict with a great deal of certainty your opt-in's will be less than what could be.

Here's why...

You haven't blocked off their exits.

Those exits are...

#1 You haven't given readers reason to believe you...bad assumption that they will

#2 You haven't blocked off the alternatives they have...those alternatives are; using another method and not doing anything at all

#3 You haven't blocked the reasons why they won't be capable of using your method...
as in "I'm hopeless at tech. stuff, "I'm new to this and haven't done this before".

All this can go into a short, to the point name capture page.

Best,
Ewen

wpsolution · 07-18-2011, 02:41 AM

Nice concept, nice concept, interesting, however the images on the left center part seems to be small and a bit blurry. If you ca make it more clear and a bit bigger, it will be more nice

Kiriakos22 · 07-25-2011, 06:57 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Anthony Phillips

However, Where do I place my email to to grab the free gifts? I think your page is broken.

Anthony

Hey Anthony

The opt-in form shows up as soon as you click the like button.
Its not broken I just thought I would get more likes this way.

Thank you for your time

Kiriakos

JustFelix · 07-25-2011, 11:05 PM

Very awesome.

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Kiriakos22 Specialty:Newbies Teacher Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 33 Thanks: 1 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Some advice from the pros? Hallo to everyone My name is Kiriakos and I've been in IM for only 1-2 months. I have just created my first squeeze page and would really need some advice from the pros in here. If I can have 2 minutes of your time-I know you are busy-plz visit the site in my signature and tell me your opinion. Thanks a lot Kiriakos
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Kiriakos22 Specialty:Newbies Teacher Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 33 Thanks: 1 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Some advice from the pros? Thanks a lot Ken I am glad u saw the typo cause I would never notice it :P(i have a small issue with my english) corrected allready Thanks again Kiriakos P.S. Is it good or is it against me that in a way I'm forcing visitors to click the like button to get the free gift?
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Spinna Warrior Member Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 23 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Some advice from the pros? I personally wouldn't click on that "Like" button if I'd have to give my email address too; that's asking for too much. The "like" button is for my free gift, and the email request is for instant access. Instant access to what? Coz I'll have my free gift already. You could change the "And" to "and" at the top.

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Kiriakos22 Specialty:Newbies Teacher Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 33 Thanks: 1 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Some advice from the pros? Spinna and Alex. Thank you for your advice. I'm afraid you saw the wrong squeeze page.I accidently had that uploaded but i corrected it now. If you want check it out again.Its quit similar but with different body copy. Thanks again Kiriakos
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