Tips to improve the text on the site

ButterflyIS · 07-22-2011, 06:34 PM

Hello guys,
This site (easytraffic.biz) was upgraded recently and I'm not sure the text is written well enough.

See the headlines and text
is there something that needs to be written differently??

Thanks

Elle Davies · 07-23-2011, 04:04 AM

It seems well written to me! It's kept short and simple, and the bullet points mean that people can quickly scan the page without getting bored (as they may have done with the use of chunky paragraphs).
One tiny note: In the 'Targeted Visitors' bullet point after "FREE CONTROL!", the 'Y' in 'You' needs to be capitalised as it is in lower case at the moment.
Other than that, it is very well written!

ButterflyIS · 07-23-2011, 04:52 AM

Thank you!!
Did you mean like this:
"FREE CONTROL. you can change any target / preferences at any time." ?

What about the title?
Get TARGETED visitors to your website
Guaranteed 100% REAL HUMAN visitors!

alphadesign · 07-23-2011, 05:10 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ButterflyIS

Get TARGETED visitors to your website
Guaranteed 100% REAL HUMAN visitors!

It's quite nice one, but try to make it more outstanding on your header!

Tiptopcat · 07-23-2011, 08:47 AM

The site looks good to me. I would maybe make the font a little bigger but that could be cos I am a little blind.

Good luck with it.

Tiptopcat

ButterflyIS · 07-23-2011, 04:49 PM

Thanks

I'm glad to hear you like it

ButterflyIS · 07-24-2011, 02:21 AM

What do you think about the text on the "How It Works" page?

Raiel Schwartz · 07-24-2011, 02:40 AM

A little bit stronger bullets. Maybe viewers
can benefit by you adding the element
of video to explain the back-end of
your system.

Also, a strong call to action to the
sign-up button.

Other than that it looks good to go
although your site does seem a little
hard to believe so a testimonial page
with proof may help increase conversions.

ButterflyIS · 07-24-2011, 02:49 AM

Hi Raiel,
Thank you for the great suggestions.

There is a "What our customers are saying" at the bottom.
What more proofs should I add?

07-22-2011, 06:34 PM	#1
ButterflyIS Warrior Member Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 27 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Tips to improve the text on the site Hello guys, This site (easytraffic.biz) was upgraded recently and I'm not sure the text is written well enough. See the headlines and text is there something that needs to be written differently?? Thanks
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07-23-2011, 04:04 AM	#2
Elle Davies Active Warrior Join Date: May 2011 Location: London, UK Posts: 57 Thanks: 4 Thanked 8 Times in 8 Posts	Re: Tips to improve the text on the site It seems well written to me! It's kept short and simple, and the bullet points mean that people can quickly scan the page without getting bored (as they may have done with the use of chunky paragraphs). One tiny note: In the 'Targeted Visitors' bullet point after "FREE CONTROL!", the 'Y' in 'You' needs to be capitalised as it is in lower case at the moment. Other than that, it is very well written!

07-23-2011, 04:52 AM	#3
ButterflyIS Warrior Member Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 27 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Tips to improve the text on the site Thank you!! Did you mean like this: "FREE CONTROL. you can change any target / preferences at any time." ? What about the title? Get TARGETED visitors to your website Guaranteed 100% REAL HUMAN visitors!
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07-23-2011, 08:47 AM	#5
Tiptopcat HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: London Posts: 143 Thanks: 62 Thanked 54 Times in 36 Posts	Re: Tips to improve the text on the site The site looks good to me. I would maybe make the font a little bigger but that could be cos I am a little blind. Good luck with it. Tiptopcat
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07-23-2011, 04:49 PM	#6
ButterflyIS Warrior Member Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 27 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Tips to improve the text on the site Thanks I'm glad to hear you like it
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07-24-2011, 02:21 AM	#7
ButterflyIS Warrior Member Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 27 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Tips to improve the text on the site What do you think about the text on the "How It Works" page?
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07-24-2011, 02:40 AM	#8
Raiel Schwartz Online Marketing Expert War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: New York City Posts: 441 Thanks: 51 Thanked 51 Times in 38 Posts Contact Info	Re: Tips to improve the text on the site A little bit stronger bullets. Maybe viewers can benefit by you adding the element of video to explain the back-end of your system. Also, a strong call to action to the sign-up button. Other than that it looks good to go although your site does seem a little hard to believe so a testimonial page with proof may help increase conversions.
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07-24-2011, 02:49 AM	#9
ButterflyIS Warrior Member Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 27 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Tips to improve the text on the site Hi Raiel, Thank you for the great suggestions. There is a "What our customers are saying" at the bottom. What more proofs should I add?
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