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Old 07-29-2011, 09:07 AM   #1
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Default Copywriting Game - Sell It in 250 Words or Less

The game rules...

Sell the audience on obscure products - in 250 words or less.

I'll post up an image every now and then and you come up with the engaging and unique sales copy to sell this to market in 250 words or less.

Your first product is a...



As engaging or witty or clever with words as you like...

Who would like to take the plunge by going first?

Mal? Grilled chicken ass? You go boy!...

Show them how it's done...

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The game rules...

Sell the audience on obscure products - in 250 words or less.

I'll post up an image every now and then and you come up with the engaging and unique sales copy to sell this to market in 250 words or less.

Your first product is a...



As engaging or witty or clever with words as you like...

Who would like to take the plunge by going first?

Mal? Grilled chicken ass? You go boy!...

Show them how it's done...

Do you want a pet that's so adorable, you could just eat it right up?

"I am the happiest man alive. I have that in me that can
convert poverty to riches, adversity to prosperity,
and I am more invulnerable than Archilles; Fortune hath not one place to hit me."
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Old 07-29-2011, 10:42 AM   #3
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Think of this image next time you're in the voting booth and after you puke, leave without voting because they're all just like this bird.

18 words. Persuasive? Not sure. But it works for me.

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Think of this image next time you're in the voting booth and after you puke, leave without voting because they're all just like this bird.

18 words. Persuasive? Not sure. But it works for me.
Don't put the bird down. He's smarter than the idiots in congress.

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Don't put the bird down. He's smarter than the idiots in congress.
What a corker Medreth - I LOVE IT!

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"Grow your own Thanksgiving Dinner in a few minutes! Just add water and worthless plant matter!"
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You're supposed to be showcasing your copywriting skills here damn it!

Blimey, you can lead a horse to water but you can't... yes, yes, yes, we know the rest.

Benefits, sell the audience on the blinkin' benefits. Why'd ya think I said 250 words or less?

Copywriters! Nothing but pains in the neck the lot of 'em.

Now, where's the story?...

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Old 07-29-2011, 02:22 PM   #9
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Earn $17,158.21 in 1 Week --Guaranteed!
Hot New Opportunity Has Crowds Gawking for Hours


Rake in thousands of dollars each week as you electrify the public with with astounding turkey feats.

The Turkey in the Straw Kit comes complete with electric hot plate, 6 pounds of straw, an 18 pound turkey, and a high-definition recording of everyone's favorite song, Turkey in the Straw.

Here's How it Works:

  • Cover plate with straw.
  • Place turkey on plate
  • Plug the hot plate in.
  • Start recording.
  • Turkey will dance as plate heats up.

Thousands of people will pay $5 to watch this amazing display of poultry in motion.

Only 100 of these money-making monsters will be sold.

Grab yours now for only $197 before they're gone forever.

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Old 07-29-2011, 02:24 PM   #10
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I love you Ken. You've got the idea. (115 words)

Now the rest of you, follow suit...

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Old 07-29-2011, 04:28 PM   #11
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Earn $17,158.21 in 1 Week --Guaranteed!
Hot New Opportunity Has Crowds Gawking for Hours


Rake in thousands of dollars each week as you electrify the public with with astounding turkey feats.

The Turkey in the Straw Kit comes complete with electric hot plate, 6 pounds of straw, an 18 pound turkey, and a high-definition recording of everyone's favorite song, Turkey in the Straw.

Here's How it Works:

  • Cover plate with straw.
  • Place turkey on plate
  • Plug the hot plate in.
  • Start recording.
  • Turkey will dance as plate heats up.

Thousands of people will pay $5 to watch this amazing display of poultry in motion.

Only 100 of these money-making monsters will be sold.

Grab yours now for only $197 before they're gone forever.
AWESOME!!! I'll pop by later and have a go...but thanks for the laugh Ken!!!

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Old 07-31-2011, 10:01 AM   #12
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Ha...great!

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Earn $17,158.21 in 1 Week --Guaranteed!
Hot New Opportunity Has Crowds Gawking for Hours


Rake in thousands of dollars each week as you electrify the public with with astounding turkey feats.

The Turkey in the Straw Kit comes complete with electric hot plate, 6 pounds of straw, an 18 pound turkey, and a high-definition recording of everyone's favorite song, Turkey in the Straw.

Here's How it Works:

  • Cover plate with straw.
  • Place turkey on plate
  • Plug the hot plate in.
  • Start recording.
  • Turkey will dance as plate heats up.

Thousands of people will pay $5 to watch this amazing display of poultry in motion.

Only 100 of these money-making monsters will be sold.

Grab yours now for only $197 before they're gone forever.
May I hire you as my copy writer ;D

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The game rules...

Sell the audience on obscure products - in 250 words or less.

I'll post up an image every now and then and you come up with the engaging and unique sales copy to sell this to market in 250 words or less.

Your first product is a...



As engaging or witty or clever with words as you like...

Who would like to take the plunge by going first?

Mal? Grilled chicken ass? You go boy!...

Show them how it's done...
Elegance, Beauty, Such Majesty..The Queen of the Farm, a Pet, a Special Treat. Bring Her Home And Enjoy The Highlight of Thanksgiving With The Family!

Got the headline in..Will come back later to finish the short copy. For the meantime gotta run..

Raul Omar Diaz
Cooking Up Something Big!
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HONEY I TOLD YOU NOT TO EAT THAT CHICK!


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I think you might want to get some more practice in son lol. Not a bad attempt but not brilliant. And 250 words max not 327!

Okay, one or two good tries above... time to switch out the product.

Your next product is a...

Wingsuit.



What is a wingsuit?

Here...


Now, sell it in 250 words or less!

After you...

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Think that video sells itself Pete.

"I am the happiest man alive. I have that in me that can
convert poverty to riches, adversity to prosperity,
and I am more invulnerable than Archilles; Fortune hath not one place to hit me."
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Wingsuit- It lets you @#$%ing fly.

Please send your check or money order to:

Daedalus Clothing
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Awesometown, US 12345

Occasionally Relevant.
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  • ...and our exclusive ebook, "25 Reasons Turkeys Want You To Kill Them"

hahaha... that line alone beats everything. Clever, John

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Ha...great!
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Your next product is a...

Wingsuit.


How about a little Google Adwords copy:


"No, the CEO is over there. I'm just the guy who pays him."
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Going on the Chicken Coop Clickbank Theme...

Build Your Own Turkey Coop!

Turkeys are one of the most profitable poultry birds on the market. Or perhaps you just need a friend. Turkeys are great companions too.

Either way, your turkey is going to need a great Turkey Coop.

And you don't want to hire some so-called professional when you can...Build it YOURSELF.

SAVE THOUSANDS of Dollars.

After you have mastered building your own backyard Turkey Coop, turn around and apply those skills building Turkey Coops for your Friends and future Customers.

There Are BIG $$ in Turkey Coops.

Click Here to Get Your Turkey Coop Plans (Only $27)...
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Would not bother with this one.
Not many people BUYING live turkeys
so that makes it a waste of time.

Even those who are buying live ones
intend to have it become a meal,
so this is simply the wrong photo.

But you guys can have fun wondering
why even the best copy won't actually
perform for you.

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Going on the Chicken Coop Clickbank Theme...

Build Your Own Turkey Coop!

Turkeys are one of the most profitable poultry birds on the market. Or perhaps you just need a friend. Turkeys are great companions too.

Either way, your turkey is going to need a great Turkey Coop.

And you don't want to hire some so-called professional when you can...Build it YOURSELF.

SAVE THOUSANDS of Dollars.

After you have mastered building your own backyard Turkey Coop, turn around and apply those skills building Turkey Coops for your Friends and future Customers.

There Are BIG $$ in Turkey Coops.

Click Here to Get Your Turkey Coop Plans (Only $27)...
My advice? Don't take up copywriting as a career.

Quote:
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...time to switch out the product.

Your next product is a...

Wingsuit.



What is a wingsuit?

Here...

‪Flying human‬‏ - YouTube

Now, sell it in 250 words or less!

After you...

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Would not bother with this one.
Not many people BUYING live turkeys
so that makes it a waste of time.

Even those who are buying live ones
intend to have it become a meal,
so this is simply the wrong photo.

But you guys can have fun wondering
why even the best copy won't actually
perform for you.

Always good to hear from experts on the turkey market.

I am awed.

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Always good to hear from experts on the turkey market.

I am awed.
Anything that people are not buying is "a live turkey".
That's a very old expression to describe something people don't want.

Most of the people here don't understand and need to be told about 100 times before they truly understand the essence of sales success.

Only you know for sure whether or not you are one of them
but I know you missed the essence of my post
and I would not be surprised if that is the essence ( and punchline )
of this thread - "don't waste time on live turkeys"

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Anything that people are not buying is "a live turkey".
That's a very old expression to describe something people don't want.

Most of the people here don't understand and need to be told about 100 times before they truly understand the essence of sales success.

Only you know for sure whether or not you are one of them
but I know you missed the essence of my post
and I would not be surprised if that is the essence ( and punchline )
of this thread - "don't waste time on live turkeys"
No, you're wrong. Doesn't matter, no big deal.

Let's just switch out the product again...

Remember folks you can have fun on this forum - although there is a serious bent to this thread too.

Right, here you go you motley lot...

A tin of...


250 words or less please...

...(and no more bloody turkeys!)

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You know Tina, I've just been watching the news here in the UK for the past couple of hours and I feel really, really sad.

What's happening right now all over London with countless huge arson attacks as I write this, it's really depressing. And not just London but now Birmingham, Liverpool and Bristol too.

But you did make me smile. Thanks for the laugh.

You are golden.

Thank you so much.

Keep 'em coming...

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Well THAT ONE you'd need to only sell to people in Australia
where Heinz has the #1 selling baked bean and sells less than
10,000 bottles of ketchup per year and because in North America
Heinz means Ketchup.

My competency in sales and copy extends to my awareness that
I probably could not write localized copy for Australians because
I do not know the local lingo and expressions well enough to be
sure my words are effective and won't insult anyone.

wut i'm sayin' is ..... I would not be as stupid as the Harvard Grads
at Chevrolet who took the #1 selling car in North America ( Chevy Nova )
and spent a billion dollars to launch it in South America where everyone
spoke Spanish.

Unfortunately, they did not sell a single car after about 6 months of TV ads.

As it turns out, in Spanish, "Nova" means "No go" "Doesn't Work" "Crappy" etc.

So - anyone selling Heinz baked beans and who is not in Australia - good luck to you.
Anyone writing the copy who is not Australian will also have difficulty and possibly
cause LOSS of sales.

Sorry to rain on the parade - but - there are a few pretty important points to it all:

1 Good copy begins with understanding the target.
and
2 Fight battles you can win. ( don't sell what nobody is buying (here))
and
3 Do no harm. ( Advertising this in North America would actually COST Heinz money
through LOSS from depositioning them as the #1 Ketchup with brand confusion )

ANY "copywriter" who bothered to post copy failed at at least one of the above
and perhaps that is why they have time to post so often here on WF ( ?? )
Something to think about.

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What a great funny thread. Thanks for the laughs.

I am the author of Heptagrama, and these are some sites I want to promote.
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Tina:
That's some funny stuff girl

Attention: All Campers who have woken up cold

"Breakthrough Innovation now saves you from that freezing night air, allowing you to wake up refreshed and invigorated"

Dear camper.

I got so tired and ticked off with going camping with the family and waking up just freezing. I would sleep terribly and wake up like a bear that got his canine busted off.

If you are anything like me you know how frustrating that can be. Well I have good news! Through months of investigation ,and trials We have found the secret to that camping experience we all long for. Nice warm cuddly restful sleep you could be in a blizzard and not even feel it. Now that is powerful!

Introducing....


HEINZ BAKED BEANS

It'll keep ya warm and keep the bears away


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@Refund
do you understand this is for fun?

Lighten up pal life is short

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LOL, Will - love this line:

Quote:
It'll keep ya warm and keep the bears away

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Alright, Walker, you're up.

Let's see what you got.

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Can You Make Dinner From This Turkey?


What if it meant your survival?


Only 1 in 87 people answered yes when asked if they could clean a live turkey.

Why Am I sharing this with you?

Because after years of living surrounded by grocery stores and expensive appliances...

I didn't know squat when it came to living off the land at my uncles wilderness acreage.

None of my fancy education or even years of "being a camper" showed me how to truly live off the land.

Now you might think this was no big deal...

But once you discover how to live off the land -

The anxiety...the insecurity and fear of not being able to get through life's tough times dissolves overnight.

You feel free, stronger and capable of taking on any challenge. Your life becomes more meaningful.

My great uncle - a life long farmer, professional animal tracker and backwoods survival expert put together the greatest wilderness survival / self-reliance program in the world.

He'll share with you:

  • How to survive on any wilderness terrain without ANYTHING ON YOU (Even without clothes!)
  • 100% Foolproof ways to track, catch and clean any animal from squirrel to bear any time of the year
  • PLUS your complete guide to living off the land - from building your own house to growing your own food.

And so much more!

You'll get 32 DVDs and 578 pg manual
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Ad done. 250 on the dot.

See if you can spot all of the copywriting / persuasion elements in this post.
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I guess my first contribution was too racy... Judge for yourself... See it here...

Following is my new contribution:





Memories

Of A Time When Life Was
Full Of Hope And Promise...

...When You Were A Baby, Your
Mother Dreamed Of Your Potential
To Do Great Things In The World...





When you finally grew to adulthood and got your first job, "Hope" had left her vocabulary, as the only word she could substitute was "Relief" that you had finally moved out of her basement....





Having heard rumors that you had found a girlfriend and got engaged, your mother felt more "Relief" that someone else would finally take responsibility for you and your wasted life...

Do you remember your mom's surprise and despair when you gave her a grandbaby of her own?





Then your mom was never told why your wife left you...





Or why you and your mom received Christmas cards for the last 25 years that charted the growth of your son, with images like this:





Ah The Memories...

Your mom passed on a couple years ago...

The nurse had said it was strange... Your mom was heard to say as she passed on, "D-E-A-T-H, Oh what a 'relief' it is..."

Then you lost your job, and now you make peanuts "writing code" for customers on Fiverr...


We Know Times Are Tight, But May We Recommend...

Stepping up to:




Not only does it taste better, but it is also cheaper than what you have been eating for the last two years...





Heinz Baked Beans
Make Dinner Half-Enjoyable Again!!



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LOL Bill, you've got a good one here. Convert it to video and it might go viral.

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Not Just For Breakfast Anymore!
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Not Just For Breakfast Anymore!
For calls too!



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