Working on a sales page, need critique

[pizzlemynizzle]

I have a client who needs this sales page rewritten

sellbeatsformula(dot)com

IMO it's pretty awful, so I thought I'd do a draft first and ask for additional info when showing it.

Here's what I've got so far

As a DJ with years of experience and tracks on many mix tapes, I know just how difficult the life of a music producer can be. You could make the best beat in the world, but if nobody buys or even hears it, then all those hours of hard work are wasted and your bills don't get paid. With how competitive the music industry is, this kind of letdown happens a lot.

Getting online is a great way to find potential clients for your beats. Before you can do that though, there's some tough questions you have to ask yourself

Where do I start?

How much should I charge?

Who will my style of music be popular with?

Where do I find those people?

All these questions are answered in the Sell Beats Formula.

Believe me when I say every track on your hard drive could be a hit. People's tastes in music are very diverse, so finding somebody who will like and buy your beat is only a matter of time, but unfortunately that time could be very long by normal means.

The Sell Beats formula will will drastically reduce the searching time for an outlet of your unique talents and allow you to finally focus on doing what you love and converting it into cash.

The methods in this guide have been proven to work and are used by many successful DJs who started out from nothing and are making thousands today. Following the Sell Beats Formula will place you among them and will finally give you the financial success that you deserve.

-DJ VictoryDance

Additional info I think I'll need: Examples of mixtapes that the author's beats appear on, screenshots of the profits if applicable, testimonials. Suggestions for anything else are welcome.