Critique my WSO Copy

P.Sharma · 08-02-2011, 06:33 AM

Hey there, I've been working hard to get my conversion rates over 13-15% which is what I get usually.

I want to improve the $/visitor value and also the conversion rates a bit so I am looking for suggestions

Thread in the test forum :

Code:

http://www.warriorforum.com/test-forum/425390-test.html

Looking forward to some great tips

AdwordsMogul · 08-02-2011, 06:43 AM

The first thing I would to would be to put your own picture instead of Obama's - I could be wrong but political affiliation could affect response rates.

Then I would split test over 300 - 700 views to see the difference -without making any other changes.

Your copy doesn't say much about who you are and why anyone should listen to you.

The names of the first two modules - make them more sound more benefit oriented like the other module names you've got.

P.Sharma · 08-02-2011, 06:47 AM

I will include a picture of mine and probably a video too.

The $25 bill will be replaced

Thanks

travlinguy · 08-02-2011, 08:18 AM

I scrolled down and saw that ridiculous image and clicked away immediately.

sandrasims · 08-02-2011, 10:22 AM

I agree, use your own picture or an image related to PLR instead of the Obama/dollar.

I just scanned it... so didn't read the big blocks of text. How about adding some bullet points?

08-02-2011, 06:33 AM	#1
P.Sharma www.WSOTube.com War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2008 Posts: 972 Thanks: 175 Thanked 270 Times in 112 Posts Contact Info	Critique my WSO Copy Hey there, I've been working hard to get my conversion rates over 13-15% which is what I get usually. I want to improve the $/visitor value and also the conversion rates a bit so I am looking for suggestions Thread in the test forum : Code: http://www.warriorforum.com/test-forum/425390-test.html Looking forward to some great tips
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08-02-2011, 06:43 AM	#2
AdwordsMogul Still... War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2011 Location: United Kingdom Posts: 1,007 Thanks: 379 Thanked 421 Times in 206 Posts	Re: Critique my WSO Copy The first thing I would to would be to put your own picture instead of Obama's - I could be wrong but political affiliation could affect response rates. Then I would split test over 300 - 700 views to see the difference -without making any other changes. Your copy doesn't say much about who you are and why anyone should listen to you. The names of the first two modules - make them more sound more benefit oriented like the other module names you've got.
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08-02-2011, 06:47 AM	#3
P.Sharma www.WSOTube.com War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2008 Posts: 972 Thanks: 175 Thanked 270 Times in 112 Posts Contact Info	Re: Critique my WSO Copy I will include a picture of mine and probably a video too. The $25 bill will be replaced Thanks
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08-02-2011, 08:18 AM	#4
travlinguy Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Northern Hemisphere, for now. Posts: 2,938 Thanks: 1,316 Thanked 1,634 Times in 955 Posts Contact Info	Re: Critique my WSO Copy I scrolled down and saw that ridiculous image and clicked away immediately.
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08-02-2011, 10:22 AM	#5
sandrasims HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: DC with a Texas accent Posts: 168 Thanks: 50 Thanked 51 Times in 30 Posts Social Networking	Re: Critique my WSO Copy I agree, use your own picture or an image related to PLR instead of the Obama/dollar. I just scanned it... so didn't read the big blocks of text. How about adding some bullet points?
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