Copy Writing Feedback Please?

marga · 08-03-2011, 08:04 AM

Hi

I hope your doing well.
I'm very new to copy writing being mainly a designer.
I've still alot to learn and, I'd be very grateful for your help please?

I am making a template selling website and, this text below is my copy from one of the landing pages

Many Thanks for your help and Kind Regards

Charles

Quote:

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Terry Heath · 08-03-2011, 10:26 AM

Hi Charles,

Here are a few things that came to mind as I read your copy:

1. What's in it for the potential buyer? Tell me the benefits of your service, not the features. What's going to happen for me if I buy your template?

2. A useful formula for writing sales copy is "AIDA." The letters spell out the sections you need. A = Attention: Get your buyer's attention. I = Interest: Pique the buyer's interest in your product. D = Details: Give the buyers the details they need to support their interest in buying your product. A = Action: Call the buyer to take action, and right now!

3. Your English is not fluid. Find a friend who is a native English speaker and ask them to proof read your sales copy for awkward and missing words.

08-03-2011, 10:26 AM	#2
Terry Heath Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,084 Thanks: 15 Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts	Re: Copy Writing Feedback Please? Hi Charles, Here are a few things that came to mind as I read your copy: 1. What's in it for the potential buyer? Tell me the benefits of your service, not the features. What's going to happen for me if I buy your template? 2. A useful formula for writing sales copy is "AIDA." The letters spell out the sections you need. A = Attention: Get your buyer's attention. I = Interest: Pique the buyer's interest in your product. D = Details: Give the buyers the details they need to support their interest in buying your product. A = Action: Call the buyer to take action, and right now! 3. Your English is not fluid. Find a friend who is a native English speaker and ask them to proof read your sales copy for awkward and missing words.