Please review my sales letter

[Lucas Adamski]

I want to launch it as WSO soon and would love to get some feedback. I'm not experienced in copywriting, so here you go:

http://flippingcashrockstar.com/sales-letter-page-1-2/

Any feedback will be appreciated. Thank You!

[Gijsbertus]

Haha ! Trying to build your list at the same time ! Great ...

Since there is a pop-up to opt-in I can not see/view your page other then joining your list ??

[Lucas Adamski]

let me turn off the opt in, sorry for that, that was not my goal lol

[Palooo]

Impressive...Go ahead..

[wvcopywriter]

This sentence is a little confusing " I knew it’s done. I DID IT.".

I can go through this sales page sometime this week and email you of any mistakes or sentences that need polising if you wish. Can't do it tonight but I'll send it sometime this week.

[tim_benedict]

For what it's worth, I would change your profile picture. The image your face picture portrays is not necessarily one that induces people to buy from you. I like the site, I like the idea, I like the process, and am even interested in your product, but when I see your pic (a very young man whose face is too close to the camera and with orange background colors that clash), it leaves a less-than-professional impression in my mind. Back up a little from the camera, get a better background (preferably light colored or neutral, or like maybe hang a sheet behind you) , put a collared shirt on (no t-shirts), look AT the camera, and smile nicely (without trying to impress the queen of England, so to speak). You have to look professional if you want people to accept you as professional, and if you want them to buy from you (because you are a professional). No personal picture at all is better than the one you have up right now, from a professional marketers standpoint. Sorry.
Sincerely,
-tim

[tim_benedict]

Of course, I am changing my own profile picture soon enough to for the same reason... *chuckle*
-tim