Fat Burning Soup Diet Headline Suggestions.

[link8]

Hi I need alternative headlines to split test my new website.

Here's the current headline:


Lose 1 Pant Size Every 15 Days Just By Eating Delicious Fat Burning Soups.

No Exercise. No ridiculous diet rules, don't even change your eating habits! Just replace one meal per day with a delicious fat burning soup and start shrinking!


Any suggestions?

Thanks

[ewenmack]

"Weird , But Yummy Soup Shrinks Bellies

How many of these bulge beating soup ingredients have you got
sitting around your kitchen?"
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"Weird" fires up the imagination when combined with big desire.

Even more curiosity with the question which subtly implies they have the ingredients
and therefore knocks out the thought that if it's weird, then it must be hard to find the ingredients.

Best,
Ewen

Originally Posted by link8

Hi I need alternative headlines to split test my new website.

Here's the current headline:


Lose 1 Pant Size Every 15 Days Just By Eating Delicious Fat Burning Soups.

No Exercise. No ridiculous diet rules, don't even change your eating habits! Just replace one meal per day with a delicious fat burning soup and start shrinking!


Any suggestions?

Thanks

[dreamlife789]

I like this:

New study reveals special soup makes you lose weight.

Special soup zaps off pounds if eaten once daily.

[link8]

Nice headline!

Any more suggestions? =)

[Ken_Caudill]

Stunning Fat Burning Soup Miracle Achieves Near Magical Results

IMPORTANT: For best results run at least one mile to the store to buy it every day.

[max5ty]

Originally Posted by Ken_Caudill

Stunning Fat Burning Soup Miracle Achieves Near Magical Results

IMPORTANT: For best results run at least one mile to the store to buy it every day.

Guess I was half awake when I read your response...it took a couple seconds for the subtitle to sink in -- then I couldn't stop laughing.

[copyassassin]

Originally Posted by link8

Any suggestions?

Thanks

link8,

So I woke up this morning and tweaked my neck really bad. So bad that that I'm stuck in bed, and bored out of my mind.

So, I cruised over to the WF, saw your post, and came up with a few headlines. (If they are crazy, its the pain meds.)

Not sure these are FTC approved. Please check with Harlan.

#1

Formerly Obese Mother of 4
Reveals Her Diet Secret:
Homemade Soup!

But not just any soup. A specific soup recipe that, SHOCKINGLY, you can find the ingredients at your local market. And better yet, you can prepare during a commercial break!

#2

10-Year Reunion Classmates SHOCKED When
Formerly Obese "Loser" Arrives in
Slim, Revealing Dress.

After Several Drinks her secret comes out:
"This Weird Soup Diet"

#3

Lose 1 Dress Size A Month
With "Weird" Soup Diet

#4 (ok, a bad Halbert rip-off)

Wife of Famous Fitness Guru Swears Under Oath
Her Amazing Weight Loss Soup Does
NOT contain ANY illegal ingredients

Authorities are no longer questioning how women are losing 2 dress sizes a month after scientist concludes, "this recipes just plain works".

[dreamlife789]

Science discovers miracle soup to lose weight.

Miracle soup reduces waist size by half every 15 days.

[Daniel Scott]

I've been hanging out at the Clickbank Exchange and Affiliate Summit in NYC recently... and once people find out you're a copywriter they want to know your "secrets" to writing killer headlines.

Sad thing is... there aren't any.

Writing killer copy is part inspiration, part experience, and part intuition.

But one thing I like to do in all my headlines is try - if at all possible - to promote the big idea that makes it interesting, different, and worth looking at.

I like the "miracle soup" thing someone else came up with. Maybe you can take that further and draw a parallel to alchemy or some kind of elixir.

Maybe there's a juicy hook in your story that needs to be up there (think "one legged golfer").

Or perhaps there's something else I'm missing entirely. Without knowing the whole story, it's hard to say.

If you've ever wondered why good copywriters charge what they do... this is why. Not only is this stuff very difficult... it's also pretty time-consuming.

The one tip I'd say is paramount is you want to position yourself as different and better to your competitors. And IMHO... your headline should usually communicate that.

-Daniel

[The Copy Nazi]

Uh oh!

The GOOD NEWS about eating these fat-burning soups is you'll lose A LOT of weight fast

The BAD NEWS is ... you're gonna need a whole new wardrobe

[link8]

I personally love this =)

Formerly Obese Mother of 4
Reveals Her Diet Secret:
Homemade Soup!

But not just any soup. A specific soup recipe that, SHOCKINGLY, you can find the ingredients at your local market. And better yet, you can prepare during a commercial break!

[CopyMonster]

How a Former-Frumpy Mother of Five Got Mistaken for a Hollywood Celeb After Dropping 6 Pant Sizes in 90 Days...

Drop 1 Pant Size Every 15 Days... Takes Just 3 Minutes a Day... No Crazy Dieting, No Insane Workouts, No Radical Supplements...

How Jane Peters Drops 1 Pant Size Every 15 Days Without Crazy Dieting, Without Sweaty Exercise, Without Weird Supplements...

Why Jane's Husband is Wide-Eyed Shocked and Mad as Hell After She Lost 6 Pant Sizes in 90 Days... Without Dieting, Without Exercise, Without Taking Pills!

Why You Don't Need to Go on a Crazy Diet, Workout Like a Maniac or Swallow Weird Pills And Still Drop 1 Pant Size Every 15 Days...

Just some thoughts for ya

[link8]

How about this headline?

“Soup Recipes That Burn More Fat Compared to 2 Hours of High Intensity Cardio Exercises!”

No Exercise. No ridiculous diet rules,
don't even change your eating habits!
Just replace one meal per day with a delicious
fat burning soup and start shrinking!

[sanjaypande]

Shrinking Soup?


"Adding These Simple Ingredients
Available in 97.8% Of Kitchens
Burns The Fat In The Soup
And Even Off Your Waist"

*******

Soup Makes Man Disappear

"Doctor Advises Anorexic To
Stop Drinking This Soup To
Prevent Further Weight Loss?"

[Jacko]

I'd go for "Miracle Soup" and "High Intensity Cardio Exercises".
Very creative!