Help! Review my landing page please!

derek_thomas · 01-16-2009, 02:55 PM

Hello fellow warriors.

I have asked this question for a couple different sites, and you all have been so very helpful. I have a few finishing touches to put on it, but I just created a new landing page. As always, I would love your opinions and your critiques.

Here is the link: http://quickandeasydiets.com

Do you think it converts? Of course, I have to test, test, test, but maybe you all could help with my learning curve?

Should the page be more vertically focused less horizontially?

It is very basic copy, but is it any good?

Just any thoughts you have would be so great. Thanks a lot!

maximus242 · 01-16-2009, 03:14 PM

Its better than most.

You need a USP, what sets you apart from the other 100,000 websites selling weightloss?

BENEFITS

Get pictures of hot sexy women being chased after men, make sure they understand...

Buy Berries == Being Persued By Men

And MORE PROOF.

Put the testimonials and make them more visible.

The video is better than the copy.

Harlan Kilstien did a copywriting contest a while ago where he criqued weightloss copy, Youtube for Harlan Kilstien

winy925 · 01-17-2009, 11:16 AM

very nice landing page. but how do you make one like this one

thefallofwork · 01-18-2009, 07:23 PM

I found the copy and layout quite appropriate for the market...

The only thing I noticed I would personal change is "who Else Is Ready To Loose..." To "Are You Ready To Lose..."

Maybe consider hidding aff link...

Great Ad Though!

Keep Testing and Good Luck!

denniston · 01-18-2009, 07:32 PM

A good landing page MUST HAVE an opt-in form on it to collect visitor data. Offer them a free report, free ebook or something else with a perceived value. Ask them for only their first name and email address so they are most likely to opt-in and be sure to put the opt-in form above the fold of your site in the right column of the page... this precise opt-in form location will result in the most opt-ins.

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angelstrong · 01-19-2009, 07:55 AM

you need to put the opt-in form on the first page. you may be loosing a lot of potential subscribers with this page. I saw the TRY button but it was a bit below the fold...page seemed a little crowded also

otherwise its good. good job having video on there.

just my opinion.

acktiv8 · 01-19-2009, 08:30 AM

Looks good and has the right messages; but I would repeat other warning about copyright images.
Also, I would add some extra info re 'Increases Metabolism' as this is a big plus in using your bodies own ability to burn fat.

angelstrong · 01-19-2009, 02:34 PM

yes copyrighted images

01-16-2009, 02:55 PM	#1
derek_thomas Active Warrior Join Date: Jan 2009 Posts: 39 Thanks: 6 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Help! Review my landing page please! Hello fellow warriors. I have asked this question for a couple different sites, and you all have been so very helpful. I have a few finishing touches to put on it, but I just created a new landing page. As always, I would love your opinions and your critiques. Here is the link: http://quickandeasydiets.com Do you think it converts? Of course, I have to test, test, test, but maybe you all could help with my learning curve? Should the page be more vertically focused less horizontially? It is very basic copy, but is it any good? Just any thoughts you have would be so great. Thanks a lot!
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01-16-2009, 03:14 PM	#2
maximus242 HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: , , . Posts: 396 Thanks: 4 Thanked 119 Times in 82 Posts	Re: Help! Review my landing page please! Its better than most. You need a USP, what sets you apart from the other 100,000 websites selling weightloss? BENEFITS Get pictures of hot sexy women being chased after men, make sure they understand... Buy Berries == Being Persued By Men And MORE PROOF. Put the testimonials and make them more visible. The video is better than the copy. Harlan Kilstien did a copywriting contest a while ago where he criqued weightloss copy, Youtube for Harlan Kilstien

01-17-2009, 11:16 AM	#3
winy925 Warrior Member Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: , , . Posts: 29 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Help! Review my landing page please! very nice landing page. but how do you make one like this one

01-18-2009, 07:23 PM	#4
thefallofwork Warrior Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Posts: 1 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Help! Review my landing page please! I found the copy and layout quite appropriate for the market... The only thing I noticed I would personal change is "who Else Is Ready To Loose..." To "Are You Ready To Lose..." Maybe consider hidding aff link... Great Ad Though! Keep Testing and Good Luck!

01-18-2009, 07:32 PM	#5
denniston Email Software Creator Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: Mt. Sterling, KY Posts: 33 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Help! Review my landing page please! A good landing page MUST HAVE an opt-in form on it to collect visitor data. Offer them a free report, free ebook or something else with a perceived value. Ask them for only their first name and email address so they are most likely to opt-in and be sure to put the opt-in form above the fold of your site in the right column of the page... this precise opt-in form location will result in the most opt-ins. I can help you add an opt-in form to your web site for free if you'd like, here's the autoresponder service I recommend you use: IncomeBuddy.com - Autoresponders, Ad Tracking, E-Mail Broadcasting, and More! It's the only autoresponder service that guarantees total deliverability and it costs 60% less than the other solutions available. Let me know how I can help!
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01-19-2009, 07:55 AM	#6
angelstrong Angel Warrior Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Los Angeles Posts: 21 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Help! Review my landing page please! you need to put the opt-in form on the first page. you may be loosing a lot of potential subscribers with this page. I saw the TRY button but it was a bit below the fold...page seemed a little crowded also otherwise its good. good job having video on there. just my opinion.
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01-19-2009, 08:30 AM	#7
acktiv8 Warrior Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: , , United Kingdom. Posts: 7 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Help! Review my landing page please! Looks good and has the right messages; but I would repeat other warning about copyright images. Also, I would add some extra info re 'Increases Metabolism' as this is a big plus in using your bodies own ability to burn fat.
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01-19-2009, 02:34 PM	#8
angelstrong Angel Warrior Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Los Angeles Posts: 21 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Help! Review my landing page please! yes copyrighted images
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