Who can CRUSH this sales letter?

marlon · 02-01-2009, 11:14 AM

Hey,

Marlon here.

Here's a sales letter I have no energy to work on:

Push Button Channel

Who can crush the copy on it?

PM your quote and your general approach. Or do you think this product has an angle that will sell?

It's not a big seller right now. I didn't hit the angle quite right. But with all the people doing streaming video stuff now, I believe it CAN sell if we found a better angle.

Marlon Sanders

Mark McClure · 02-01-2009, 09:34 PM

Vin,

IMHO Long, wrong, gone :-)

I deleted my post because I just saw OP's request to PM him.
My bad.
Thx for the reply.

RareGoodStuff · 02-05-2009, 04:25 PM

Hi Marlon,
You have a great product but a poor sales copy.

First, it's so long without a proper focus. Next, it lacks a DEMO video or Sampling.

Most importantly, you have no testimonials. No Demo and no Testimonials will lack a punch needed to convert visitors to buyers.

Personally, I like your product and may end buying it but I need to see it in action somehow.

02-01-2009, 11:14 AM	#1
marlon HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: , , . Posts: 414 Thanks: 29 Thanked 229 Times in 85 Posts	Who can CRUSH this sales letter? Hey, Marlon here. Here's a sales letter I have no energy to work on: Push Button Channel Who can crush the copy on it? PM your quote and your general approach. Or do you think this product has an angle that will sell? It's not a big seller right now. I didn't hit the angle quite right. But with all the people doing streaming video stuff now, I believe it CAN sell if we found a better angle. Marlon Sanders

02-01-2009, 09:34 PM	#2
Mark McClure HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2006 Posts: 299 Thanks: 19 Thanked 44 Times in 34 Posts	Re: Who can CRUSH this sales letter? Vin, IMHO Long, wrong, gone :-) I deleted my post because I just saw OP's request to PM him. My bad. Thx for the reply.

02-05-2009, 04:25 PM	#3
RareGoodStuff Nicholas Okonkwo War Room Member Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: Stamford, Connecticut , USA. Posts: 85 Thanks: 51 Thanked 16 Times in 15 Posts Social Networking	Re: Who can CRUSH this sales letter? Hi Marlon, You have a great product but a poor sales copy. First, it's so long without a proper focus. Next, it lacks a DEMO video or Sampling. Most importantly, you have no testimonials. No Demo and no Testimonials will lack a punch needed to convert visitors to buyers. Personally, I like your product and may end buying it but I need to see it in action somehow.