Help me choose a title..

[Vibrant Warrior]

Hi

I am running a WSO promoting an article spin and submit service to 14 blog networks. And I am trying to come up with the right title for it:

1. the MOST comprehensive backlinking package on offer in the Warrior Forum
2. $690+ worth of QUALITY backlinks to bring in more visitors
3. SEO like never before! $690 worth of QUALITY backlinks every month..
4. Article Marketing like never before. [INSANE OFFER]
5. AMAZING - 5000+ Quality Backlinks for $7.47 [NO xRumer, NO BS] - QUALITY Backlinks [Crazy Offer]
6. 20,000+ Superior Backlinks for $27
   
7. [INSANE OFFER] 20K Quality Contextual backlinks to boost your rankings [No BS xRumer, Scrapebox links]
8. The NO WORK WSO to get you more visitors to your website [100% BS FREE!]

All of the above titles are an accurate depiction of what I am offering. So what do you think?

[kayshaw]

I personally and drawn to #3 and #5 only because they give attractive information in a really concise way.
Frith,
kayla

[robchapman]

I believe I like number five the best; it is the one I would click on if I saw it in the WSO. Like Kay said, it is concise and to the point. It also is interesting enough to click on to find out more.

[Vibrant Warrior]

Do you think that title would still be just as appealing if the price was $27 and not $7.47?

AMAZING - 20000+ Quality Backlinks for $27 [NO xRumer, NO BS] - QUALITY Backlinks [Crazy Offer]


Also am I within Forum rules if I get my WSO salespage critiqued?

[kayshaw]

I think that you could probably bump it up to $27 (if thats what it is worth). Sorry I've never dealt in backlinks so I'm not sure what a good price is when I see one

If I'm not mistaken, you can post a classifieds ad asking people to contact you to critique/review your WSO BEFORE you post the WSO. But I could be totally wrong.
Frith,
Kayla

[robchapman]

The more reviews and feedback you get for the service the higher you could raise your price, in my opinion. If this is a brand new WSO, you may want to keep a lower price for the first few people so you can start generating reviews.

But yes, I would still check it out at $27.00. That is still a good price for a SEO service.

[watermelon]

I will go with number 4

[Steve The Copywriter]

I like No 6.

No hype, no shouting, no buzzwords - you're telling it like it is.

Great to take out words like "insane", "crazy" and "amazing"

They're used so often - now you can differentiate yourself from the mob.

"Superior" says it all.

I would be specific on the number - not 20,000 plus - maybe 20,079.

Steve

[Quahas]

I like 5 the most but I also think 6 could be a good choice to use on WF.

[Mark Earle]

I think #5 is probably best.

In answer to your question on pricing, $7 will pull more buyers in, and also get you more feedback and testimonials from happy customers.

A strategy you could perhaps use is to find out the common WSO price for 3-5000 backlinks. If $7 is cheaper than most then have an $20 OTO upsell to 20,000 backlinks.

Again, provided you are pricing below most other WSO's it should still be a no brainer.

Good luck,
Mark

[Vibrant Warrior]

Hi,

Thanks guys. Really appreciate it. I want to toss in a few more titles and see what you think:

9) AMAZING -20,050 Quality Backlinks for $17 [NO xRumer, NO BS] - Legit $690 Value [Crazy Offer]

10) POWERFUL BACKLINKS worth $690.. 20,050 Backlinks, Crazy prices [No xrumer, No BS]

Do you think the above 2 are any better than the ones initially mentioned or does your preference still weigh towards 5 and 6?

Thanks.

[Studio13]

Personally — my eyes have grown dry of seeing headlines like 871283649269 backlinks for 1¢ + FREE PAGERANK 13 one-way dofollow lifetime links.

...there's nothing to separate a title like that from the 10,000 others like it. Remember the word contrast. Is it possible that you can create a headline that contrasts the the normal back link offers?

"I'd Rather Crawl on My Naked Knees Across Broken Glass Before Paying For a Back Link Again..."

"If Satan Sells 666 Back Links for $13 — Would I Be God if I Gave You..."

...or hell, something different for a clicking-change!

[ECTally]

Originally Posted by Studio13

Personally — my eyes have grown dry of seeing headlines like 871283649269 backlinks for 1¢ + FREE PAGERANK 13 one-way dofollow lifetime links.

...there's nothing to separate a title like that from the 10,000 others like it. Remember the word contrast. Is it possible that you can create a headline that contrasts the the normal back link offers?

"I'd Rather Crawl on My Naked Knees Across Broken Glass Before Paying For a Back Link Again..."

"If Satan Sells 666 Back Links for $13 — Would I Be God if I Gave You..."

...or hell, something different for a clicking-change!

You speak much sense...
Oh, and OP, you should really give his views some thought.

[CayenneGTS]

I like the third one!
Good Luck Bro

[Grain]

Hi Vibrant Warrior,

What does it mean for you to have a good
headline?

Here's what I want you to do before writing
your headline, or even your copy...

... In fact, it's so important, you can even
think of your own headline after this.

The thing you can't do without...

Saturate yourself. Become the customer,
step into the shoes of the customer. What
are their daily activities, their daily
occurrences, what are their daily needs and
wants, their jargon...

Assuming you're going for a spin service...

People are looking for a variety of things. I
know a bit of SEO, and I know there are
different people who lean on different factors
as being important.

... Are they going to look for something that
beats Copyscape 100% of the time?

... Are they going to want a manually spun,
completely rephrased by a human kind of
service?

... What is so special about your service that
your customers can't do without you?
(Why can't the customers go to someone else?)

... What is the experience that you, if you
were a customer, would want to get from
a service provider like you? A detailed report?
A 1-on-1 support service? A continuity program?
A future discount? A bold guarantee? Trust?
Social proof?

I know, you want a headline, that's it. But no,
don't do it that way. You want to saturate yourself
so much that you know your target market like
the back of your hand.

People don't like to be told that they are wrong...
But you might have to give a little changes to your
approach if you want a bustling service.

Don't tailor-fit your service to force-feed your
customers.

Instead, find what your customers desire, then
provide it to them.

Don't force what you can do into what they *must*
have.

No... You know them like your siblings, if you have
one. You know them like places you always visit.

You know what they value, what they see and
hear everyday.

... If you can't crush competition by features or
quantity, crush the competition from the side by
providing a NOVEL service.

... Once you reel them in, you're going to build
rapport, familiarity. Tell them the obvious things
they expect to hear. Tell them about the SEO
service they always see...

Tell them about the Panda and how your
competitors are always using them to boost their
sales in a newly packaged way... and why you're
not.

Tell them about the confusion people have in
choosing services. Tell them about their own
pain in selecting services.

I'm not a good copywriter, because I don't claim
to have beaten any great controls. But I have
beaten a dozen. I'm a greenhorn to copywriting.

But the answer you're looking for is...

... You want to "sell" them into opening the
*envelope*. Since this is not direct mail, you want
the *correct* target audience to click in.

That's when you reel them in, suffocate them with
the sinfully massive delight of your services...

... And let them choose you over your competitor.

I'd advise for you to find something out of the norm
to promote. People might be looking for a simple
solution like yours, but prefer it to cheaper price
points like on Fiverr.

Good Luck,
Grain

[queen bee]

I would vote for the third one