Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines

gregw · 02-26-2009, 03:10 PM

I have four headlines for a new software package and I would appreciate it if you could give me your opinion, or vote for the one you think is best...

If you have a better idea I'd like to hear it also.

I appreciate any help you can offer...

Headline #1
"Generate An Avalanche Of Free Traffic To Your Website In A Matter Of Minutes"

Headline #2
“Discover How To Instantly Attract Thousands of New Visitors To Your Web Site And Explode Your Profits By 377% Virtually Overnight With The Use Of Web 2.0 Promotion”

Headline #3
“Discover How A Struggling Web Site Owner Stumbled Upon Web 2.0 Traffic Secrets That Took Him From The Bottom Of The Search Engines To The Top In Days…. Now You Can TOO!

Headline #4
“Finally, A Blazing-FAST, New, Revolutionary Web 2.0 Submission Program That Instantly Floods Your Web Site With Targeted Traffic, Increases Your Online Visibility, Improves Your Search Engine Rankings, And Helps You Reel In Profits Like A Top Marketing Guru”

The webpage is here: Social Buzz Master - Social Media Optimization Productivity Tool

and I'll be running a wso soon before I launch.

Thanks,

gregw

Loren Woirhaye · 02-26-2009, 03:24 PM

#1. - it's less than ideal but at least it's not a dissertation like the
others.

Woody C · 02-26-2009, 03:26 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by gregw

Headline #2
“Discover How To Instantly Attract Thousands of New Visitors To Your Web Site And Explode Your Profits By 377% Virtually Overnight With The Use Of Web 2.0 Promotion”

This is my favorite of the bunch. I would go straight to the point, and keep it short. Show only benefits in the headline, then explain how and why in the copy (ie Web 2.0 and Social Bookmarking). Leave them wanting more after the headline

When I hear the word "Discover" I feel that I am about to purchase something to read. You have software.

So I'd shorten it to "Instantly Attract Thousands of Visitors To Your Web Site And Explode Your Profits by 377% Virtually Overnight..."

travlinguy · 02-26-2009, 04:57 PM

Most long headlines bog the reader down but these actually flow pretty well considering their length. I like #2 and #4 with #4 slightly edging the other.

Sarah Johnson · 02-26-2009, 06:07 PM

I like #2 mostly because it uses an exact figure the reader can grasp onto. (As long as you prove that number in the copy. If you don't the reader may feel tricked and therefore not trust you.)

But I would also try and shorten it. Make it a bit more concise.

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DerrickLamont · 02-26-2009, 06:17 PM

i think i will go with number one.
and sometimes you don't wanna make it to long

yes i would go with #1 that's my choice

SEOSteve · 02-27-2009, 05:16 AM

Tough call

- I like #2 but I'd shorten it to:
Instantly Attract Thousands of New Visitors To Your Site And Explode Your Profits By 377% Virtually Overnight

And then mention Web 2.0 in a sub-head like this:
Discover How To Unleash the Awesome Power of Web 2.0 Traffic On Your Site Now With Social Buzz Master 2.0!

Or re-phrase as a question:
Who Else Wants To Learn How To Instantly Attract Thousands of New Visitors To Your Site And Explode Profits By 377% Virtually Overnight?

Hope this helps!

Steve

nata_sha · 02-27-2009, 05:30 AM

#2 but probably a shorter version like

Attract Thousands of New Visitors To your website Overnight & Explode Your Profits By 377%

Besides, #4 ??? that's not a heading, it can qualify for a paragraph thou

gregw · 02-27-2009, 07:37 AM

Thank you all kindly... I wasn't able to respond because I was between airports traveling and arrived at my destination late last night. At which time I promptly fell asleep.

So far it looks like:

#1 - 3 votes
#2 - 6 votes (some mods)
#3 - 0 votes
#4 - 2 votes

and then some new suggestions based on modifications...

drewanderson · 02-27-2009, 03:08 PM

"Flood Your Website With 100% Free Traffic In A Matter Of Minutes With Simple Web 2.0 System" Possibly?

IRON_STRONG · 02-27-2009, 06:51 PM

Get more traffic. Guaranteed.

IRON_STRONG · 03-01-2009, 02:05 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Hugh Thyer

Too short Josh. Its got to be at least 50 words.

I Know Right? what whas i thinking. lol What customer would want to get straight to the point.

MaskedMarketer · 03-01-2009, 02:22 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Hugh Thyer

Too short Josh. Its got to be at least 50 words.

I think im on to something here...

How Would You Like To Instantly Discover a Proven Method That Generates an Avalanche of Free Traiffic to your Websites in a Matter of Minutes, Attract Thousands of New Leads, Explode Website Sales and Profits , by ATLEAST 377% Virtually Overnight Using Web 2.0 Promotion- Better Yet, Would You Like to Learn How A Struggling Website Owner Stumbled Upon These Web 2.0 traffic Serects That Took Him From The bottom of the Search Engines to the VERY TOP - Only in the Matter of Days? Its Blazing Fast, New, Revolutionary Web 2.0 Submission Program, That Instantly Improves Your Search Visibility by 679% By Tomorrow- Gauranteed!
(or I PAY YOU Double Your Money Back)

Read on...

(what.. you never read a 100+ word headline before?

IRON_STRONG · 03-01-2009, 02:46 PM

LMAO wow that is insane im sold. Butseriously not to ruin your thread bro, ijust think short and to the point would be better. im fining it works better for all of my sites.

dannycapri · 03-01-2009, 04:19 PM

Option 2 gets my vote, shortened to:

“Discover How To Instantly Attract Thousands of New Visitors
To Your Web Site And Explode Your Profits By 377% ?”

ZelimirGraf · 03-01-2009, 07:43 PM

I`d work on the number one, it`s the pithiest one in the bunch, tweak it a little, other ones make me yawn, to loooooong.

bigcullie · 03-09-2009, 07:51 PM

Headline #1
"Generate An Avalanche Of Free Traffic To Your Website In A Matter Of Minutes"
Great but not much detail as to how.

Headline #2
“Discover How To Instantly Attract Thousands of New Visitors To Your Web Site And Explode Your Profits By 377% Virtually Overnight With The Use Of Web 2.0 Promotion”

I feel 377% is to specific, as an engineer I would question how you came up with that figure. Because of my strong Scottish accent, I run when is see Web 2.0.

Headline #3
“Discover How A Struggling Web Site Owner Stumbled Upon Web 2.0 Traffic Secrets That Took Him From The Bottom Of The Search Engines To The Top In Days…. Now You Can TOO!

Better submbled upon could be replaced by "used"

“Discover Exactly How A Struggling Web Site Owner used Web 2.0 Traffic Secrets That Took Him From The Bottom Of The Search Engines To The Top In Days.

Headline #4
“Finally, A Blazing-FAST, New, Revolutionary Web 2.0 Submission Program That Instantly Floods Your Web Site With Targeted Traffic, Increases Your Online Visibility, Improves Your Search Engine Rankings, And Helps You Reel In Profits Like A Top Marketing Guru”

The best. however #3 suggests more humititly in teaching how you achieved this. Some times dramatic head like really grab you attension, then fall flat when you buy the product.

The title is so important, but you already know that. I hope this helps.

Gordon

Raydal · 03-09-2009, 07:59 PM

You have my permission to swipe the one from this site,
it did a whopping 15% conversion!!

Free Traffic - The No-Click Traffic Secret Revealed!

-Ray Edwards

02-26-2009, 03:10 PM	#1
gregw Advanced Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: Houston, TX , USA. Posts: 630 Thanks: 15 Thanked 8 Times in 7 Posts Social Networking	Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines I have four headlines for a new software package and I would appreciate it if you could give me your opinion, or vote for the one you think is best... If you have a better idea I'd like to hear it also. I appreciate any help you can offer... Headline #1 "Generate An Avalanche Of Free Traffic To Your Website In A Matter Of Minutes" Headline #2 “Discover How To Instantly Attract Thousands of New Visitors To Your Web Site And Explode Your Profits By 377% Virtually Overnight With The Use Of Web 2.0 Promotion” Headline #3 “Discover How A Struggling Web Site Owner Stumbled Upon Web 2.0 Traffic Secrets That Took Him From The Bottom Of The Search Engines To The Top In Days…. Now You Can TOO! Headline #4 “Finally, A Blazing-FAST, New, Revolutionary Web 2.0 Submission Program That Instantly Floods Your Web Site With Targeted Traffic, Increases Your Online Visibility, Improves Your Search Engine Rankings, And Helps You Reel In Profits Like A Top Marketing Guru” The webpage is here: Social Buzz Master - Social Media Optimization Productivity Tool and I'll be running a wso soon before I launch. Thanks, gregw
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02-26-2009, 03:24 PM	#2
Loren Woirhaye Who'm I kidding? War Room Member Join Date: May 2006 Location: Easthampton, Massachusetts Posts: 4,542 Blog Entries: 15 Thanks: 117 Thanked 904 Times in 651 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines #1. - it's less than ideal but at least it's not a dissertation like the others.
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02-26-2009, 04:57 PM	#4
travlinguy Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Northern Hemisphere, for now. Posts: 2,441 Thanks: 980 Thanked 1,233 Times in 737 Posts Contact Info	Re: Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines Most long headlines bog the reader down but these actually flow pretty well considering their length. I like #2 and #4 with #4 slightly edging the other.
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02-26-2009, 06:07 PM	#5
Sarah Johnson Active Warrior Join Date: Jan 2009 Posts: 94 Thanks: 5 Thanked 14 Times in 8 Posts Social Networking	Re: Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines I like #2 mostly because it uses an exact figure the reader can grasp onto. (As long as you prove that number in the copy. If you don't the reader may feel tricked and therefore not trust you.) But I would also try and shorten it. Make it a bit more concise. ~Sarah Johnson
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02-26-2009, 06:17 PM	#6
DerrickLamont Active Warrior Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 58 Thanks: 0 Thanked 6 Times in 5 Posts	Re: Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines i think i will go with number one. and sometimes you don't wanna make it to long yes i would go with #1 that's my choice
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02-27-2009, 05:16 AM	#7
SEOSteve Fulltime IMer War Room Member Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: Melbourne, Australia. Posts: 19 Thanks: 5 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines Tough call - I like #2 but I'd shorten it to: Instantly Attract Thousands of New Visitors To Your Site And Explode Your Profits By 377% Virtually Overnight And then mention Web 2.0 in a sub-head like this: Discover How To Unleash the Awesome Power of Web 2.0 Traffic On Your Site Now With Social Buzz Master 2.0! Or re-phrase as a question: Who Else Wants To Learn How To Instantly Attract Thousands of New Visitors To Your Site And Explode Profits By 377% Virtually Overnight? Hope this helps! Steve

02-27-2009, 05:30 AM	#8
nata_sha Active Warrior Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 41 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts	Re: Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines #2 but probably a shorter version like Attract Thousands of New Visitors To your website Overnight & Explode Your Profits By 377% Besides, #4 ??? that's not a heading, it can qualify for a paragraph thou

02-27-2009, 07:37 AM	#9
gregw Advanced Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: Houston, TX , USA. Posts: 630 Thanks: 15 Thanked 8 Times in 7 Posts Social Networking	Re: Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines Thank you all kindly... I wasn't able to respond because I was between airports traveling and arrived at my destination late last night. At which time I promptly fell asleep. So far it looks like: #1 - 3 votes #2 - 6 votes (some mods) #3 - 0 votes #4 - 2 votes and then some new suggestions based on modifications...
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02-27-2009, 03:08 PM	#10
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02-27-2009, 06:51 PM	#11
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03-01-2009, 02:46 PM	#14
IRON_STRONG Joshua D. Morris Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Gulf Coast of Florida Posts: 145 Thanks: 35 Thanked 15 Times in 7 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines LMAO wow that is insane im sold. Butseriously not to ruin your thread bro, ijust think short and to the point would be better. im fining it works better for all of my sites.
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03-01-2009, 04:19 PM	#15
dannycapri Active Warrior Join Date: Jan 2009 Posts: 90 Thanks: 3 Thanked 13 Times in 12 Posts	Re: Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines Option 2 gets my vote, shortened to: “Discover How To Instantly Attract Thousands of New Visitors To Your Web Site And Explode Your Profits By 377% ?”

03-01-2009, 07:43 PM	#16
ZelimirGraf Copywriter Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Zagreb, Croatia Posts: 48 Thanks: 3 Thanked 8 Times in 8 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines I`d work on the number one, it`s the pithiest one in the bunch, tweak it a little, other ones make me yawn, to loooooong.
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03-09-2009, 07:51 PM	#17
bigcullie HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Ayr, Scotland Posts: 102 Thanks: 14 Thanked 8 Times in 8 Posts Social Networking	Re: Vote or Opinion on 4 Headlines Headline #1 "Generate An Avalanche Of Free Traffic To Your Website In A Matter Of Minutes" Great but not much detail as to how. Headline #2 “Discover How To Instantly Attract Thousands of New Visitors To Your Web Site And Explode Your Profits By 377% Virtually Overnight With The Use Of Web 2.0 Promotion” I feel 377% is to specific, as an engineer I would question how you came up with that figure. Because of my strong Scottish accent, I run when is see Web 2.0. Headline #3 “Discover How A Struggling Web Site Owner Stumbled Upon Web 2.0 Traffic Secrets That Took Him From The Bottom Of The Search Engines To The Top In Days…. Now You Can TOO! Better submbled upon could be replaced by "used" “Discover Exactly How A Struggling Web Site Owner used Web 2.0 Traffic Secrets That Took Him From The Bottom Of The Search Engines To The Top In Days. Headline #4 “Finally, A Blazing-FAST, New, Revolutionary Web 2.0 Submission Program That Instantly Floods Your Web Site With Targeted Traffic, Increases Your Online Visibility, Improves Your Search Engine Rankings, And Helps You Reel In Profits Like A Top Marketing Guru” The best. however #3 suggests more humititly in teaching how you achieved this. Some times dramatic head like really grab you attension, then fall flat when you buy the product. The title is so important, but you already know that. I hope this helps. Gordon
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03-09-2009, 07:59 PM	#18
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