Rate (or Pimp) My Bullets:

[The Niche Man]

Rate (Score) my bullets from 1 to 12. One being best.
Any additional advice, criticism or rips (in love) welcome as always.

-Thanks in advance. Peace!
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(A) "3 Unique Discoveries That Make Any Product or Service Easier To Buy In Today's Competitive Market! (See Page 88)"
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(B) "Discover How To Apply The Magical "Less is More" Principle and -- Sell More in Less Time! Right? ... Wrong! Not Unless You Do This First!(See Page 139)"
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(C) "Find Out Why The Quickest Way To Succeed Is To Do What Your Competitors Don't Do. Here's 5 Competition Killing Techniques! (See Page 170)"
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(D) "A Quick and Easy Way to Combine 2 or more Successful Ideas, Products or Services ... and Legally Create Your Own Niche Idea, Product or Service! (See Page 68)"
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(E) "Simple Idea-Generating Exercises That Will Turn You Into A 'Niche Idea' Creating Machine!" (See Page 24)!
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(F) "Shocking Facts Most Niche Marketers Overlook ... That Could Give You an Almost Unfair Sales Advantage, Especially in Competitive Markets! (See Page 8)"
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(G) "Discover 7 Fun But Powerful Ways To Force Your Brain To Produce More Money-Making Niche Products and Services - And They're Totally FREE! (See Page 29)"
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(H) "Sell Affiliate Products? ... Here's 10 Ways To Add a Simple Twist or Tweak to Your Niche Marketing Strategy ... To Instantly Boost Sales and Stand Out From The Crowd! (See Page 59)"
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(I) "3 Clever Tricks That Make It Easier For Your Prospects to Buy, Enjoy and Recommend Your Product or Service! (See Page 88)"
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(J) "5 Ways Skeptical, Lazy or Demanding Prospects Can Make You Richer When You Apply This Simple 3-Step Technique. (See Page 93)"
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(K) "6 Sneaky Ways To Catch Your Competition, Napping, Slipping or Coasting and Legally Steal Sells From Under Their Nose! (See Page 170)"
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(L) "8 Guaranteed Ways to F.O.C.U.S (Follow One Course Until Successful) and Avoid Bouncing From One Niche Opportunity to the Next Without Benefiting! (See Page 15)"

[webalfie]

They're good. I would try being more specific as to what you're talking about. You want your bullets to be very specific and yet ambiguous. Instead of saying "money making niche products" be specific. What money making niche products? Clickbank? Affiliate? eBooks?

The more specific you are the better

[travlinguy]

They're pretty good. I'm not going to rate them though. My one criticism would be most of them are too long. It wouldn't be hard to fix that though. For example, "A Quick and Easy Way to..."

How about:

An Ultra-Fast Strategy Blending Method For Unique, Original & Super-Profitable Niche Product Creation (You won't find this nugget anywhere else)

Not saying that's the answer but make the actual bullet brief and let the after comment pique their interest.

[ThomasOMalley]

I like your bullets.

Mix in some questions as well eg. What are the five niche areas you want to avoid at all cost or you'll end up keeping your day job?

Study Ray Edwards' book, Writing Riches. It has some of the best info. on bullets I have seen.

[ThomasOMalley]

Model the bullets in Halbert and Carlton's sales letters as well. I have always found that very beneficial.

[IMNomad]

I like your use of numbers - which are quantifiable results. But some of the transitions need to be ironed out.

before:
"3 Unique Discoveries That Make Any Product or Service Easier To Buy In Today's Competitive Market! (See Page 88)"

after:
"3 Unique Discoveries To Increase Buying Power In Today's Competitive Market! (See Page 88)"

before:
Find Out Why The Quickest Way To Succeed Is To Do What Your Competitors Don't Do. Here's 5 Competition Killing Techniques! (See Page 170)

after:
5 Competition Killing Techniques! Find The Quickest Way To Succeed Doing What Your Competitors Don't. (See Page 170)

before:
3 Clever Tricks That Make It Easier For Your Prospects to Buy, Enjoy and Recommend Your Product or Service! (See Page 88)

after:
3 Clever Tricks To Empower The Prospects Buying Decision, while decreasing buyers remorse! (See Page 88)

Good luck,

Paul

[ejunkie]

Nice bullets. You write well.

A few of them might be a bit long. You may want to shorten them.

You can do it like this, for instance.

ORIGINAL BULLET

"Find Out Why The Quickest Way To Succeed Is To Do What Your Competitors Don't Do. Here's 5 Competition Killing Techniques! (See Page 170)"

SHORTENED BULLET VERSION 1

5 Competition Killing Techniques: Quickest Ways To Succeed By Doing What Your Competitors Don't. (See Page 170)"

SHORTENED BULLET VERSION 2

Outwit Your Competitors By Doing What They Aren't. 5 Quickest Competition Beating Techniques. (See Page 170)"

Just my thoughts.

[WinstonTian]

Well, here are some things you *can* do....

1. Rank your bullets strategically. Place the hard-hitters
right at the start, but reserve one strong one for the last
to give a jolt at the back.

2. Use the language in your market over sensationalism.
When you do it right, the buzz words act like a personal
trance trigger... And they can't help but slide down the
greased slope...

3. So you've done a kind of 1-2 punch in your bullets, and
I can definitely see characteristics of Carlton's influence.
But there's still something missing...

You Need IMAGERY!

Rip the air out of your reader's lungs, and send those
phantom copywriter hands pressing down on his
shoulders... That silent voice whispering him on...

He can't pause, because he needs to read on.

And as he reads on, it becomes more natural for him to
continue to read. And that means that as the momentum
builds, the bullets develop a kind of "flow", that makes it
a piece of cake to read.

Besides that ease, you also tend to automatically tie down
the benefits into one central idea (your eventual offer).

One last note is that most of your bullets are "blind".

Try to use "golden nuggets" in between your blind bullets.

Pace - pace - lead
Pace - pace - lead
Pace - lead - lead
Lead - Lead -Lead

There I go off rattling again. Hope it was useful.

You could also take a leaf out of the tabloid factory. Those
writers are masters of emotional alchemy. Especially swipe
those that use guilt, embarrassment or even envy.

Pretty ingenious.

Winston Tian

[Saluki Guy]

Here's the BEST bullet system you'll ever find, imho.

[The Niche Man]

Originally Posted by Saluki Guy

Here's the BEST bullet system you'll ever find, imho.

I agree, it is one of the best.

[The Niche Man]

Originally Posted by WinstonTian

Try to use "golden nuggets" in between your blind bullets.

Pace - pace - lead
Pace - pace - lead
Pace - lead - lead
Lead - Lead -Lead

Winston Tian

Ha, Ha. Sounds like you're teaching me to dance. But then again I guess there is a sort of rhythm to writing good bullets, right?