Need KickButt Headline For My WSO

Dennis Cheesman · 04-06-2009, 08:00 PM

Hey copy dudes and dudettes..

I need a kickbutt headline for my WSO located here:
http://www.warriorforum.com/warrior-...-must-see.html

This is the headline to get people to click and look at the WSO.

I will give a free copy to the best headline for my WSO..

If interested please post here

Best regards,
Dennis

Adaptive · 04-06-2009, 10:29 PM

Hi Dennis,

It looks like a killer offer. So I'm happy to take a crack at coming up with some headlines to capture the zing:

Clickbank money machine gives you a new review site every month

Affiliate marketing monster automates everything for you but cashing your ever-growing commission checks

Totally turnkey online profit-maker: minisite with niche, product, reviews, articles, autoresponder, and killer graphics all built in

Reading this headline is the hardest thing you'll ever do in the rest of your IM career

Minisite magic increases your income every month

Research, writing, graphics, code: all done for you. Spending your profits: up to you.

Get a new hands-off IM cash machine in your lap every month

Regards,
Allen

Kevin Lam · 04-06-2009, 10:47 PM

Allen, I've seen you give good tips on copywriting, so I think you can press out better ones than these.

The Copy Nazi · 04-06-2009, 11:54 PM

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This'll work Dennis BUT your Landing Page is a Horror Show. Bring it into my shop for this month's Special WSO $97 tune-up - includes FREE Oil-Change & Grease.

dave147 · 04-06-2009, 11:59 PM

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Adaptive · 04-07-2009, 07:48 AM

Quote:

Allen, I've seen you give good tips on copywriting, so I think you can press out better ones than these.

Thanks for the kind words, Kevin. I wanted to get something out there fast... and as you noticed, I was too much in a rush to bring along my bag of tricks!

I'll take some time to try again.

Regards,
Allen

Kevin Lam · 04-07-2009, 10:47 AM

You're welcome, Allen.

I've been holding on to it since I emailed Dennis yesterday evening with it, but I might as well drop my version here. It's more of a re-write of the previous one by Dennis, because I think it points out some of the important elements:

Quote:

Discover How ClickBank Review Sites Are Instantly And Perfectly Built To Make YOU Money! Hundreds of People Have Paid A Regular Price of $37 A Month. Take Advantage of Our Warrior's "Save-Money-Make-Money" Opportunity.

Limited To 50 Warriors ONLY. PLUS You'll Get The "INSANE" bonuses!

Kevin Lam · 04-07-2009, 10:53 AM

Oh cool, so Dennis is pretty much using my headline.

Just fyi, I used "hundreds" because I assumed that many people already purchased. Otherwise, I'd also use "Others...". Good job, Dennis.

Dennis Cheesman · 04-07-2009, 11:20 AM

Yes, I was really looking for the thread headline...

That is what I need to get the people to click to read..

I tried this one:

►► Explode Your ClickBank Profits With These Proven KickButt Review Sites - LIMITED OFFER! ◄◄

I want something that is going to get them to open and read...

Kevin Lam · 04-07-2009, 12:24 PM

Dennis,

Just use this: The Warrior's "Save-Money-Make-Money" ClickBank Review Site System.

Adaptive · 04-07-2009, 05:44 PM

I haven't posted a WSO, is there a particular length limit for the headline?

Kevin Lam · 04-08-2009, 10:17 AM

Thanks for the free product, Dennis!

Dean Dhuli · 04-08-2009, 11:26 AM

Stunning New "Plug-n-Profit" Clickbank Review Sites -- Making Money From Clickbank Cannot Get Any Easier Than This!

maxdog · 04-08-2009, 11:33 AM

Never Pay $37 Dollars for information!

AlanCarr · 04-08-2009, 12:19 PM

Ack! The irony!

"I want something that is going to get them to open and read... "

Exactly - the prospect has a better idea of what a headline is than the copywriters advising him...

Lemme go check the WSO.. Needs to be short enough for a thread heading..

Why is this guy giving away complete profit-pulling websites for $15?

I'd read it

B.

04-06-2009, 08:00 PM	#1
Dennis Cheesman Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Kaufman, Texas, USA. Posts: 1,563 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 26 Thanked 48 Times in 31 Posts	Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! Hey copy dudes and dudettes.. I need a kickbutt headline for my WSO located here: http://www.warriorforum.com/warrior-...-must-see.html This is the headline to get people to click and look at the WSO. I will give a free copy to the best headline for my WSO.. If interested please post here Best regards, Dennis
	HUGE high quality content package of 87 ClickBank reviews, 42 - 10 page reports, 360 related articles, and 399 related autoresponders... AND As a HUGE bonus I'm going to give YOU 24 - 20 page pet reports and 720 related pet articles.. (VERY LIMITED WARRIOR SPECIAL OFFER!)"

04-06-2009, 10:29 PM	#2
Adaptive HyperActive Warrior Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 417 Blog Entries: 9 Thanks: 61 Thanked 77 Times in 64 Posts	Re: Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! Hi Dennis, It looks like a killer offer. So I'm happy to take a crack at coming up with some headlines to capture the zing: Clickbank money machine gives you a new review site every month Affiliate marketing monster automates everything for you but cashing your ever-growing commission checks Totally turnkey online profit-maker: minisite with niche, product, reviews, articles, autoresponder, and killer graphics all built in Reading this headline is the hardest thing you'll ever do in the rest of your IM career Minisite magic increases your income every month Research, writing, graphics, code: all done for you. Spending your profits: up to you. Get a new hands-off IM cash machine in your lap every month Regards, Allen
	Success only requires four words. http://www.warriorforum.com/blogs/ad...our-words.html

04-06-2009, 10:47 PM	#3
Kevin Lam Dare To Dream War Room Member Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 986 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 185 Thanked 231 Times in 156 Posts	Re: Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! Allen, I've seen you give good tips on copywriting, so I think you can press out better ones than these.

04-06-2009, 11:54 PM	#4
The Copy Nazi Mal Lambe War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: The Bunker, Paris Posts: 2,490 Blog Entries: 2 Thanks: 791 Thanked 1,481 Times in 701 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! ♛ Sensational Clickbank REVIEW SITES going OFF THE RICHTER!! Ker-Ching. Jump on this one campers! This'll work Dennis BUT your Landing Page is a Horror Show. Bring it into my shop for this month's Special WSO $97 tune-up - includes FREE Oil-Change & Grease.

04-06-2009, 11:59 PM	#5
dave147 Platinum Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: AU Posts: 2,824 Thanks: 506 Thanked 335 Times in 271 Posts	Re: Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! At Last! Your Simple Solution to Clickbank Review Sites That Are Designed to Make You More Money! Only $37 a Month But Warriors Can Take Advantage of Our Save Money-Make Money Opportunity Right Now! This Is Limited The First 50 Warriors Only PLUS the INSANE bonuses! So Get it Right Now!
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04-07-2009, 10:53 AM	#8
Kevin Lam Dare To Dream War Room Member Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 986 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 185 Thanked 231 Times in 156 Posts	Re: Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! Oh cool, so Dennis is pretty much using my headline. Just fyi, I used "hundreds" because I assumed that many people already purchased. Otherwise, I'd also use "Others...". Good job, Dennis.

04-07-2009, 11:20 AM	#9
Dennis Cheesman Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Kaufman, Texas, USA. Posts: 1,563 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 26 Thanked 48 Times in 31 Posts	Re: Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! Yes, I was really looking for the thread headline... That is what I need to get the people to click to read.. I tried this one: ►► Explode Your ClickBank Profits With These Proven KickButt Review Sites - LIMITED OFFER! ◄◄ I want something that is going to get them to open and read...
	HUGE high quality content package of 87 ClickBank reviews, 42 - 10 page reports, 360 related articles, and 399 related autoresponders... AND As a HUGE bonus I'm going to give YOU 24 - 20 page pet reports and 720 related pet articles.. (VERY LIMITED WARRIOR SPECIAL OFFER!)"

04-07-2009, 12:24 PM	#10
Kevin Lam Dare To Dream War Room Member Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 986 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 185 Thanked 231 Times in 156 Posts	Re: Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! Dennis, Just use this: The Warrior's "Save-Money-Make-Money" ClickBank Review Site System.

04-07-2009, 05:44 PM	#11
Adaptive HyperActive Warrior Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 417 Blog Entries: 9 Thanks: 61 Thanked 77 Times in 64 Posts	Re: Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! I haven't posted a WSO, is there a particular length limit for the headline?
	Success only requires four words. http://www.warriorforum.com/blogs/ad...our-words.html

04-08-2009, 10:17 AM	#12
Kevin Lam Dare To Dream War Room Member Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 986 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 185 Thanked 231 Times in 156 Posts	Re: Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! Thanks for the free product, Dennis!

04-08-2009, 11:26 AM	#13
Dean Dhuli SaidLikeItIs.com War Room Member Join Date: Dec 2007 Posts: 426 Thanks: 20 Thanked 42 Times in 33 Posts Contact Info	Re: Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! Stunning New "Plug-n-Profit" Clickbank Review Sites -- Making Money From Clickbank Cannot Get Any Easier Than This!
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04-08-2009, 11:33 AM	#14
maxdog Active Warrior Join Date: Aug 2008 Posts: 91 Thanks: 9 Thanked 8 Times in 5 Posts Contact Info	Re: Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! Never Pay $37 Dollars for information!

04-08-2009, 12:19 PM	#15
AlanCarr Ace Copywriter War Room Member Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Tropical Island... Posts: 382 Thanks: 36 Thanked 49 Times in 38 Posts Contact Info	Re: Need KickButt Headline For My WSO - Will Give Product! Ack! The irony! "I want something that is going to get them to open and read... " Exactly - the prospect has a better idea of what a headline is than the copywriters advising him... Lemme go check the WSO.. Needs to be short enough for a thread heading.. Why is this guy giving away complete profit-pulling websites for $15? I'd read it B.