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08-28-2008, 11:18 PM
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| HyperActive Warrior War Room Member  Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: , , USA.
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|  What do you think of this?
I took a crack at creating a sales page. What do you guys think? How can i make this better? Does the page sound convincing? |
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08-29-2008, 08:45 AM
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|  Re: What do you think of this?
I would rewrite your headline. “Discover Easy Tactics That Will Get Rid Of Your Clutter From Top Organization Experts... Never Be Overrun With Clutter Again!” The word tactics IMHO does not fit your market. It sounds to technical. You might want to replace "Easy Tactics" with "Simple But Incredibly Effective Methods" |
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08-29-2008, 10:57 PM
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| Re: What do you think of this?
Interesting i would have never thought of that. Thanks |
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