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Old 02-18-2013, 12:45 PM   #1
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You guys wanna see a funny John Carlton bullet?

*Wrestlers the size of Jabba the Hut get tossed into walls like puppies by women!

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Old 02-18-2013, 05:33 PM   #2
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Funny? That's awesome! For a muscle building product?

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Great imagery...But maybe I'm looking at this wrong.

Because what I see in my mind is women hurling puppies against the wall. Ouch. Is that what I'm supposed to be seeing?

Or women hurling Jabba The Hutt against the wall as if he were only the size and temperament of a small puppy?

My gut tells me it's the latter.

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Funny? That's awesome! For a muscle building product?
It was for a self defense course.

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Old 02-19-2013, 06:56 AM   #5
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It was for a self defense course.

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That's cool. I've never seen the online version of that letter.

The one I pulled the bullet from was the direct mail version, which had a nickel glued to the top of the page.

There's no headline.

It's similar to the penny letter/dollar letter... except it was with a nickel and he tied in that nickel into the story.

See subhead: His Life Wasn't Worth Much More Than That Nickel In His Pocket!

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Old 02-20-2013, 02:08 PM   #6
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Because what I see in my mind is women hurling puppies against the wall. Ouch. Is that what I'm supposed to be seeing?
This is exactly what I read on my first read.

I had to go back and read it again because it didn't make sense. Well, it did, but not in the sense I thought it should be making.

It took another read or two to short out the imagery.

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Immediately after reading that bullet I thought:

"Yeah right."
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Old 02-22-2013, 11:18 AM   #8
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Immediately after reading that bullet I thought:

"Yeah right."
You have to keep in mind that this bullet was placed after logically building up to it.

It wouldn't be even 1% believable just reading it outright like in a headline.

And besides that... John Carlton is like the king of acknowledging disbelief.

Once you have a full-on "yeah right moment" you better believe he's going to acknowledge it with something like, "You think it's too good to be true?" Then he'll back it up with testimonials, proof, reasons why, or whatever.

And sometimes he seems to actually be looking for the "yeah right" reaction to a degree.

He toes the line of believability.

He likes to screw with your mind like that lol...

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You have to keep in mind that this bullet was placed after logically building up to it.

It wouldn't be even 1% believable just reading it outright like in a headline.

And besides that... John Carlton is like the king of acknowledging disbelief.

Once you have a full-on "yeah right moment" you better believe he's going to acknowledge it with something like, "You think it's too good to be true?" Then he'll back it up with testimonials, proof, reasons why, or whatever.

And sometimes he seems to actually be looking for the "yeah right" reaction to a degree.

He toes the line of believability.

He likes to screw with your mind like that lol...
I don't know man. Mind you, I haven't seen the whole sales letter, but this bullet seems both absurd and poorly written.

Also, I'm a bit put off by Star Wars references and the image of puppies being thrown into walls.

Plus, it's an improper use of passive voice.

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Old 02-26-2013, 05:41 AM   #10
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I don't know man. Mind you, I haven't seen the whole sales letter, but this bullet seems both absurd and poorly written.

Also, I'm a bit put off by Star Wars references and the image of puppies being thrown into walls.

Plus, it's an improper use of passive voice.
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