My first attempt at a video "only" squeeze page.

[Do-My-Research]

Hi guys

I just made my first attempt at a video "only" squeeze page. An suggestions or feedback?

Laulas

Thanks!

[Loren Woirhaye]

You've got hosting problems. Nobody will hang around
waiting for your video to load - which is what one is
apparently supposed to do here.

[Do-My-Research]

Hi I just checked and it loads really quickly for me (might be that my computer chached it or something though) are all of you guys having that problem or was it just a fluke?

Thanks!

[David Raybould]

Hi there,

It loads fine for me.

One problem though.

That's not a squeeze page.

It's just a youtube video with a buy
link under it.

A squeeze page is a page used to
get the visitor to opt in to your
email list.

Good luck with it though.

-David Raybould

[Do-My-Research]

Hi David

Sorry my Copywriting lingo seems to not be too great yet.

Do you think it will be fairly good converting as is? What can I do to improve it?

Thanks!

Stephan

[David Raybould]

As it is, I doubt it will convert.

I can definitely help, but let me
ask you this-

Are you the product owner, or are
you an affiliate?

It makes a huge difference
with how you want to go
about it.

[EmpoweredCreator]

It seems kind of plain. You could make your Headline bigger and your title should catch their eye and invoke some kind of emotion.

Something like:

Never have the embarrassment of that nasty sweat stain on your Shirt again! Watch the video below to find out how you can keep your embarrassment low and your confidence High.

Under the video you can have something like this:

Order Yours Today and Never get caught in that awkward moment again!

You could also include a bonus to a newsletter that helps them with other body odor problems if they just submit their name and e-mail address they'll be taken to order page where they can solve all the sweat stain needs!

[Do-My-Research]

Originally Posted by David Raybould

As it is, I doubt it will convert.

I can definitely help, but let me
ask you this-

Are you the product owner, or are
you an affiliate?

It makes a huge difference
with how you want to go
about it.

I'm the son of the owner and am doing most of the IM.

[Do-My-Research]

Originally Posted by EmpoweredCreator

It seems kind of plain. You could make your Headline bigger and your title should catch their eye and invoke some kind of emotion.

Something like:


Under the video you can have something like this:



You could also include a bonus to a newsletter that helps them with other body odor problems if they just submit their name and e-mail address they'll be taken to order page where they can solve all the sweat stain needs!

Awesome, thanks I like it!

[TheCren]

Looks not-too-bad. Use the "autoplay" feature of YouTube embedding. I think that was what the first reply was talking about. Also, squeeze pages have opt-in forms. This isn't a squeeze page so much as a really, really, really, really small presell page.

[Do-My-Research]

How do I activate the autoplay? Do I have to do it on youtube or does my webmaster have to do that?

Thanks!

[Clyde Dennis]

To have it autoplay add this to the end of the URL in the embed code:
&autoplay=1

[BrianMcLeod]

If you're going to embed YouTube videos, check out fellow Warrior Lon Naylor's youtube embedding pimper:

YouTube Embed Code Customizer - High Quality-Search Box and related videos options

Pretty bad-ass...

Brian

[Tony M.]

You should make the page more professional. Just pick a free template from a good designer firm (lots of them give templates away for free), edit it a little so it matches your niche, and slap it on the existing page.

You'll convert much more.