Please Review Site

blalock61 · 05-11-2009, 03:59 AM

Hello to all. I am new to the forum. If possible, could you take a second to review my site listed below. I do not have all of the graphics for it yet (header, footer, buy now buttons, etc.; still need to fix some links) but could you still take a look at it and review it for me. Especially my sales copy. I still have not finished putting everything together for it yet. Any and all comments are more than welcome. Thank you for your help in this matter.

Here is the site:

affiliatesguidetooutsourcing Dot com

Scott Murdaugh · 05-11-2009, 06:55 AM

First tip... It's probably a smart move to contribute to the forum before signing up and asking for a critique.

I'll give you a pointer or two though.

HEADLINE: "Internet Marketers! Discover How To Quickly and Easily Create More And Earn More Within The Deadlines You Are Given!"

Affiliates aren't generally given deadlines. This could be better summed up with something like...

Quote:

Here's How I Quadrupled My Productivity And Doubled My Income By Working A Fraction Of The Time Just By Making A Few Simple Changes To My Business Model...

Now I'm Willing To Share The Same Secrets That Skyrocketed My Productivity And Allow Me To Spend More Time Focusing On The Important Things In Life While Increasing My Income At The Same Time....

I've only been awake for about 10 minutes and I'm waiting for my coffee, but I think that's an improvement over what you've got.

I may come back later and offer more advice if you don't turn out to be a one post wonder.

Thanks,

-Scott

magic456 · 05-11-2009, 09:42 AM

God job!

I agree with Scott that "deadline" needs to be replaced. I also think you might want to tell me how I will make more money as oppose telling me how my bussiness will grow. Making more money cretes emotions that leads to response. That's just my opinion though but really good job with design and layout.

Good Luck!

blalock61 · 05-11-2009, 03:27 PM

Thank you both for your replies. I have been lurking and reading the forum for nearly 2 weeks and have bought a WSO so I will stay around. Just havent posted. Thanks again.

05-11-2009, 03:59 AM	#1
blalock61 HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: GA,USA Posts: 152 Thanks: 152 Thanked 42 Times in 28 Posts Contact Info	Please Review Site Hello to all. I am new to the forum. If possible, could you take a second to review my site listed below. I do not have all of the graphics for it yet (header, footer, buy now buttons, etc.; still need to fix some links) but could you still take a look at it and review it for me. Especially my sales copy. I still have not finished putting everything together for it yet. Any and all comments are more than welcome. Thank you for your help in this matter. Here is the site: affiliatesguidetooutsourcing Dot com

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05-11-2009, 03:27 PM	#4
blalock61 HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: GA,USA Posts: 152 Thanks: 152 Thanked 42 Times in 28 Posts Contact Info	Re: Please Review Site Thank you both for your replies. I have been lurking and reading the forum for nearly 2 weeks and have bought a WSO so I will stay around. Just havent posted. Thanks again.