Help. My best tagline is also the meanest!

tomcam · 05-20-2009, 06:45 PM

I've finished an ecourse on using WordPress to create great websites fast. My guiding light has always been this tagline:

Improve your bottom line. Fire your webmaster.

I think it's strong and evocative. It's appropriate to my initial target market, which is small biz/organization stakeholders who are tired of getting ripped off for websites, or who have tried to use WordPress before. It's also a bit cruel in these hard times. Plus, I actually think it's going to be a great product for webmaster because they can get more billable work done in less time. So I need to drop that tagline.

My others just feel blah after that one. Would you expert mind telling me which one you think would pull the best?

Build great sites in minutes. Let the world find them in hours.
Build 3 websites. Launch your marketing campaign. Then have lunch.
Create real business websites in minutes. Let the world find them in hours.
Learn it. Do it. Sell it.
Build great sites in minutes. Watch them make money in hours.

Or maybe it's back to the drawing board?

Thanks.

Tom Campbell

Jon Steel · 05-21-2009, 05:35 AM

You are right...they fall way behind your other line -

tomcam · 05-21-2009, 05:38 AM

@Tina, @Jon, thanks. I think it's back to the drawing board (or maybe just be mean).

Alexa Smith · 05-21-2009, 07:11 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by tomcam

Build 3 websites. Launch your marketing campaign. Then have lunch.

I don't like this one the best, but I'll be very surprised if it doesn't pull the best out of the five you've listed. (And I think it's pretty good, too!). But, as they say, there's only one way to find out ...

dadeon · 05-22-2009, 07:42 AM

I would pick the first one, but take away the first sentence.

"Fire your webmaster." works because it's emotional and creates curiosity.

As for the rest, I would say it's back to the drawing board. You have to think a) emotion and b)specifics - general statements just fall on death ears.

Jon Steel · 05-22-2009, 07:55 AM

What about something simple - yet provoking. Emotional - curiosity building...

How about...

"Build Powerful Minisites in Minutes - That Will Ignite Profits from Around the World..."

Ricky Allen · 05-22-2009, 08:21 AM

Hm, as always I cant resist this.

The one I prefer is:

WordPress Secrets Revealed That Will Let You Fire Your Webmaster, Spectacularly Increase Your Profits And Create Real Money Making Business Websites In Minutes.

Ricky "The Ebook Generator" Allen

CreativelyScrappy100 · 06-01-2009, 08:39 AM

Great headline, Ricky Allen!

Would love to learn the outcome of any test conducted in the near future...

05-20-2009, 06:45 PM	#1
tomcam Tom Campbell War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Seattle, WA Posts: 396 Blog Entries: 13 Thanks: 294 Thanked 122 Times in 65 Posts Social Networking	Help. My best tagline is also the meanest! I've finished an ecourse on using WordPress to create great websites fast. My guiding light has always been this tagline: Improve your bottom line. Fire your webmaster. I think it's strong and evocative. It's appropriate to my initial target market, which is small biz/organization stakeholders who are tired of getting ripped off for websites, or who have tried to use WordPress before. It's also a bit cruel in these hard times. Plus, I actually think it's going to be a great product for webmaster because they can get more billable work done in less time. So I need to drop that tagline. My others just feel blah after that one. Would you expert mind telling me which one you think would pull the best? Build great sites in minutes. Let the world find them in hours. Build 3 websites. Launch your marketing campaign. Then have lunch. Create real business websites in minutes. Let the world find them in hours. Learn it. Do it. Sell it. Build great sites in minutes. Watch them make money in hours. Or maybe it's back to the drawing board? Thanks. Tom Campbell

05-21-2009, 05:35 AM	#2
Jon Steel HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: May 2009 Location: Okinawa, Japan Posts: 440 Thanks: 68 Thanked 33 Times in 33 Posts	Re: Help. My best tagline is also the meanest! You are right...they fall way behind your other line -

05-21-2009, 05:38 AM	#3
tomcam Tom Campbell War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Seattle, WA Posts: 396 Blog Entries: 13 Thanks: 294 Thanked 122 Times in 65 Posts Social Networking	Re: Help. My best tagline is also the meanest! @Tina, @Jon, thanks. I think it's back to the drawing board (or maybe just be mean).

05-22-2009, 07:42 AM	#5
dadeon Active Warrior Join Date: May 2009 Posts: 32 Thanks: 0 Thanked 4 Times in 3 Posts	Re: Help. My best tagline is also the meanest! I would pick the first one, but take away the first sentence. "Fire your webmaster." works because it's emotional and creates curiosity. As for the rest, I would say it's back to the drawing board. You have to think a) emotion and b)specifics - general statements just fall on death ears.
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05-22-2009, 07:55 AM	#6
Jon Steel HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: May 2009 Location: Okinawa, Japan Posts: 440 Thanks: 68 Thanked 33 Times in 33 Posts	Re: Help. My best tagline is also the meanest! What about something simple - yet provoking. Emotional - curiosity building... How about... "Build Powerful Minisites in Minutes - That Will Ignite Profits from Around the World..."

05-22-2009, 08:21 AM	#7
Ricky Allen Advanced Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: , , United Kingdom. Posts: 739 Thanks: 1 Thanked 158 Times in 19 Posts	Re: Help. My best tagline is also the meanest! Hm, as always I cant resist this. The one I prefer is: WordPress Secrets Revealed That Will Let You Fire Your Webmaster, Spectacularly Increase Your Profits And Create Real Money Making Business Websites In Minutes. Ricky "The Ebook Generator" Allen
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06-01-2009, 08:39 AM	#8
CreativelyScrappy100 Internet Marketer\|OPM Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 11 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Social Networking	Re: Help. My best tagline is also the meanest! Great headline, Ricky Allen! Would love to learn the outcome of any test conducted in the near future...