I've just read my copy..

[Intrepreneur]

I've just read my copy, and it has me on the edge of my seat, wanthing to hear more and more almost all of the way through, it's becoming pretty damn good and I think for anyone tha reads it and then doesnt buy, they'd have to be stupid.

Asides from that I said, almost all of the way trhough, there is once or twice in the cpy, where it just doesnt't flow as well as good English should, but the stuff leading up to and inbetween these 2 parts are very powerful on the reading mind.

What I wonder, are thse 2 small hiccups/disturbances a bad idea to keep, or are they fine for breaking up the mood a little, in between ?

Or are they fine and at those points I should add a Buy Now Line?

I hope this all makes sense, I'm sure it will to the trained copywritere, and hopefully you can decipher what I wonder.

[Scott Murdaugh]

Hard to say without seeing it man...

I say polish it until it's good... If you notice hiccups fix 'em.

Congrats on the smoking, and good luck. I've been there, it ain't easy.

-Scott

[Intrepreneur]

Originally Posted by scottspfd82

Hard to say without seeing it man...

I say polish it until it's good... If you notice hiccups fix 'em.

Congrats on the smoking, and good luck. I've been there, it ain't easy.

-Scott

Thank you, for your reply.

Not sure if you understood exactly what I fel the hiccups to be..

I felt them to be 2 parts where the copy just doesnt flow as well as it had been before.. so basically like this.

Very Nice Reading, Small Non Flowing Hiccup, Very Nice Reading, Small Non Flowing Hiccup.. Nic reading right to the end..

It's going to be very hard to make those parts flow as good as the rest of the copy.. bascially I'm pciking on the pro's here, wondering wht dod you do in these small gaps of flow.. add a buy button? add a call to action?

Or just leave it like that and continue back into full flow again?

As for the smoking, I think Deeprak Chopra will help me through it, he's done a good job already.. Thank god people like him exist. :-)

[Hugh Thyer]

To get rid of those hiccups read your copy outloud. You'll find that you'll instinctively want to say something else where your hiccups are. Just change your copy to what your mind WANTED to say.

Keep it conversational. Keep it simple. If your prospect was right in front of you, what would you actually SAY to them?

[briancassingena]

Anything you're not sure about, read aloud to a stranger, an aquaintance or a friend you know won't be 'kind' to you. If they ask you to explain more about areas you thought you'd covered, this means you weren't clear enough.