Free Headline Rewriting

Chris Ramsey · 06-25-2009, 05:17 PM

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Originally Posted by barakos9

Don't Let Disaster Hijack Your Wedding Day
My wedding planner left me twisting in the wind! Don't let it happen to you..

The Quick & Easy Way To A Perfect Wedding - Even If Your Wedding Planner Up-and-Leaves Like Mine Did!

Does Planning Your Wedding Leave You With A Headache?

How To Quickly & Easily Plan Your Wedding!

barakos9 · 06-26-2009, 01:27 AM

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Originally Posted by scheda

The Quick & Easy Way To A Perfect Wedding - Even If Your Wedding Planner Up-and-Leaves Like Mine Did!

Does Planning Your Wedding Leave You With A Headache?

How To Quickly & Easily Plan Your Wedding!

Thank you!
But I'm not sure if that fits with the whole page Welcome to The Bible of the Bride | Free Yourself from Wedding Jitters
Let me know what you think.

Kelpsi Media · 06-26-2009, 04:13 AM

Its a very good job being done dude. soon i would like to come up with my idea. I need your help.

RentItNow · 06-28-2009, 09:54 AM

"Property Rental Expert reveals easy to apply 'house for rent' secrets guaranteed to help rent your property FAST...and with competition-killing confidence!"

HowToRentYourHouseNow.com

love2Code · 06-28-2009, 01:49 PM

Thanks for helping people with your generous offer. Would you please help me with following heading. Thanks

"Do You Want a Digital Product Delivery System that Fully Automates & Protects Sales and Downloads for Google and PayPal Transactions?"

Chris Ramsey · 06-28-2009, 02:14 PM

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Originally Posted by love2Code

Thanks for helping people with your generous offer. Would you please help me with following heading. Thanks

"Do You Want a Digital Product Delivery System that Fully Automates & Protects Sales and Downloads for Google and PayPal Transactions?"

Finally... The easy way to protect your downloadable products!

Now Introducing... The Easiest Way To Deliver Digital Products While Keeping The Download Link Secure!

Discover How To Effortlessly Protect, Automate, and Deliver All Your Digital Products!

These should get you off to a good start. Take the time to analyze what's important to your customers, then write a headline that focus's on that.

Chris Ramsey · 06-28-2009, 02:22 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by RentItNow

"Property Rental Expert reveals easy to apply 'house for rent' secrets guaranteed to help rent your property FAST... and with competition-killing confidence!"

Discover How Property Rental Expert's Fill Their Homes With Ideal Tenants In Less Than 30 Days!

Having Trouble Renting Our Your Home?

Rent Your Home The Easy Way With These Expert's House Rental Secrets!

love2Code · 06-28-2009, 09:13 PM

Hello Chris,
Thanks for helping me out with the headline. Would you be able to help me out with my sales copy found in my signature website? I have a small budget, not sure how much I will be able to pay. But please take a look and PM me if you could. Thanks

redfc · 06-29-2009, 01:49 AM

Hello Chris,

Would you help me out on this please,

Sub headlines on top:

Tired of commuting to work everyday, boring daily routine, meeting deadline and attending endless meeting

Lead capture here:

"Who Else Wants A Proven System To Help You Quit Your Day Job For Good?"

my site is at moneynsense

Thanks

Chris Ramsey · 06-29-2009, 08:18 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by redfc

Hello Chris,

Would you help me out on this please,

Sub headlines on top:

Tired of commuting to work everyday, boring daily routine, meeting deadline and attending endless meeting

Lead capture here:

"Who Else Wants A Proven System To Help You Quit Your Day Job For Good?"

my site is at moneynsense

Thanks

I just took a look at your squeeze page... and it's going to need more than just a new headline to make it work.

For starters...

The headline needs to be AT THE TOP of the page, not below the fold like it is now
The headline needs to be smaller and not take up the entire screen for those with small screens
Your sales page and squeeze page need to be completely separated
Your button to subscribe should look like a button - As saavy as I am, I was confused about what to click

There's a lot of work to be done, but you obviously have a knack for writing, so you'll get it where it needs to be. You may just need someone to show you the way.

redfc · 06-29-2009, 09:03 AM

Hi Chris,

Really appreciate your advise, I'll work on page again.

And thank you.

cheers

smithy100 · 06-29-2009, 09:17 AM

Hi can you suggest something to replace this

"Getting Nowhere With Your eBay Business? Discover How Simple Changes And The Right Tools Can Be The Difference Between Success and Failure"

Kevin Birch · 06-29-2009, 03:54 PM

hiya- if this offer is still open:

"The Ultimate Lazy Man's Backlink Machine - How To Get 1488 Backlinks In 180 Days, With Hardly Lifting a Finger"

Many thanks

thegoddessofeleven · 07-02-2009, 02:48 PM

Oh, what fun! I LOVE posts like this....!!! How 'bout this one:

You're About to Learn The Secrets Of Harnessing Solar and Wind Energy That Most People Will Never Know!

doc_web · 07-02-2009, 03:57 PM

Hey Chris

You are doing a great job here, helping out or free.

Can I request you to take a look at my squeeze page and critique its headline.

its located it Successful Gurus

or the headline is as follows

"Free Video
uncovers the ultra secret strategy that helped Gurus make Millions Last Year..."

Thanks in advance Chris

Deepak

06-26-2009, 04:13 AM	#53
Kelpsi Media Idiotic Marketer War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Malaysia Posts: 187 Thanks: 5 Thanked 7 Times in 7 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Its a very good job being done dude. soon i would like to come up with my idea. I need your help.

06-28-2009, 09:54 AM	#54
RentItNow Aka: John J. Adams War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Windsor, ON Posts: 915 Thanks: 171 Thanked 183 Times in 157 Posts Social Networking	Re: Free Headline Rewriting *"Property Rental Expert reveals easy to apply 'house for rent' secrets guaranteed to help rent your property FAST...and with competition-killing confidence!"* HowToRentYourHouseNow.com

06-28-2009, 01:49 PM	#55
love2Code HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: US Posts: 181 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 26 Thanked 165 Times in 15 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Thanks for helping people with your generous offer. Would you please help me with following heading. Thanks "Do You Want a Digital Product Delivery System that Fully Automates & Protects Sales and Downloads for Google and PayPal Transactions?"
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06-28-2009, 09:13 PM	#58
love2Code HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: US Posts: 181 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 26 Thanked 165 Times in 15 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Hello Chris, Thanks for helping me out with the headline. Would you be able to help me out with my sales copy found in my signature website? I have a small budget, not sure how much I will be able to pay. But please take a look and PM me if you could. Thanks
	Submit to any classified websites using SubmissionChamp. Classified website submission software - WSO. Automatically Create accounts, submit advertisements , spin contents , Decaptchar support all in one shot. Life time updates. Save hours of your valuable time. Supports craigslist, usfreeads,classifiedads, kijiji, domesticsale, backpage, Oodle, olx, pennysaverusa,gumtree,inetgiant,freebizadsweb,claz ,american-classifieds. Adding new sites everyday

06-29-2009, 01:49 AM	#59
redfc Active Warrior Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 85 Thanks: 6 Thanked 11 Times in 11 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Hello Chris, Would you help me out on this please, Sub headlines on top: Tired of commuting to work everyday, boring daily routine, meeting deadline and attending endless meeting Lead capture here: "Who Else Wants A Proven System To Help You Quit Your Day Job For Good?" my site is at moneynsense Thanks

06-29-2009, 09:03 AM	#61
redfc Active Warrior Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 85 Thanks: 6 Thanked 11 Times in 11 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Hi Chris, Really appreciate your advise, I'll work on page again. And thank you. cheers

06-29-2009, 09:17 AM	#62
smithy100 Banned Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 12 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Hi can you suggest something to replace this "Getting Nowhere With Your eBay Business? Discover How Simple Changes And The Right Tools Can Be The Difference Between Success and Failure"

06-29-2009, 03:54 PM	#63
Kevin Birch Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Manchester, UK . . .but I would rather be elsewhere! Posts: 1,449 Thanks: 34 Thanked 35 Times in 28 Posts Contact Info	Re: Free Headline Rewriting hiya- if this offer is still open: "The Ultimate Lazy Man's Backlink Machine - How To Get 1488 Backlinks In 180 Days, With Hardly Lifting a Finger" Many thanks
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07-02-2009, 02:48 PM	#64
thegoddessofeleven ~* Warrior Fabulous *~ Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Texas, USA. Posts: 335 Thanks: 8 Thanked 9 Times in 8 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Oh, what fun! I LOVE posts like this....!!! How 'bout this one: You're About to Learn The Secrets Of Harnessing Solar and Wind Energy That Most People Will Never Know!
	Do not meddle in the affairs of dragons, for you are crunchy, and good with ketchup.

07-02-2009, 03:57 PM	#65
doc_web Active Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: United Kingdom. Posts: 67 Thanks: 23 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Hey Chris You are doing a great job here, helping out or free. Can I request you to take a look at my squeeze page and critique its headline. its located it Successful Gurus or the headline is as follows "Free Video uncovers the ultra secret strategy that helped Gurus make Millions Last Year..." Thanks in advance Chris Deepak