Free Headline Rewriting

BrianMcLeod · 06-25-2009, 10:17 AM

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Originally Posted by Mr McDonald

Hi,

Your headlines have been working great thank you!
If you have some time could you jazz these 2 up for me?

"Here It Is My Massive Birthday Giveaway Has Gone Live"

"Last Few Massive Birthday Giveaway Gifts Are Yours Today"

Regards
Gavin

Gavin (and everyone else by proxy),

Here's a novel idea, since his last headlines are "working great" for you...

How about you HIRE Chris?

Worried that you can't afford him? Make him an offer!

The worst that can happen is he can't do it and says, "Sorry, but no thanks..."

On the other hand, you might gain a new business partner with the marketing skill you need to succeed.

At least bring something back to the table for the guy besides an empty plate asking for seconds... Sheesh.

Best,

Brian

Chris Ramsey · 06-25-2009, 01:02 PM

Hey Brian,

Thanks for the post. I'll gladly have someone else pimping my services

If you're worried about cost, I am open to percentage deals. Just depends on the project, the owner, and a million other things. PM me if you want info.

My internet's been down for the past few days, so I've got a lot of catching up to do. I'll try to find some time to work on some of these headlines.

Chris Ramsey · 06-25-2009, 05:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by barakos9

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Does Planning Your Wedding Leave You With A Headache?

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barakos9 · 06-26-2009, 01:27 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by scheda

The Quick & Easy Way To A Perfect Wedding - Even If Your Wedding Planner Up-and-Leaves Like Mine Did!

Does Planning Your Wedding Leave You With A Headache?

How To Quickly & Easily Plan Your Wedding!

Thank you!
But I'm not sure if that fits with the whole page Welcome to The Bible of the Bride | Free Yourself from Wedding Jitters
Let me know what you think.

Kelpsi Media · 06-26-2009, 04:13 AM

Its a very good job being done dude. soon i would like to come up with my idea. I need your help.

RentItNow · 06-28-2009, 09:54 AM

"Property Rental Expert reveals easy to apply 'house for rent' secrets guaranteed to help rent your property FAST...and with competition-killing confidence!"

HowToRentYourHouseNow.com

love2Code · 06-28-2009, 01:49 PM

Thanks for helping people with your generous offer. Would you please help me with following heading. Thanks

"Do You Want a Digital Product Delivery System that Fully Automates & Protects Sales and Downloads for Google and PayPal Transactions?"

Chris Ramsey · 06-28-2009, 02:14 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by love2Code

Thanks for helping people with your generous offer. Would you please help me with following heading. Thanks

"Do You Want a Digital Product Delivery System that Fully Automates & Protects Sales and Downloads for Google and PayPal Transactions?"

Finally... The easy way to protect your downloadable products!

Now Introducing... The Easiest Way To Deliver Digital Products While Keeping The Download Link Secure!

Discover How To Effortlessly Protect, Automate, and Deliver All Your Digital Products!

These should get you off to a good start. Take the time to analyze what's important to your customers, then write a headline that focus's on that.

Chris Ramsey · 06-28-2009, 02:22 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by RentItNow

"Property Rental Expert reveals easy to apply 'house for rent' secrets guaranteed to help rent your property FAST... and with competition-killing confidence!"

Discover How Property Rental Expert's Fill Their Homes With Ideal Tenants In Less Than 30 Days!

Having Trouble Renting Our Your Home?

Rent Your Home The Easy Way With These Expert's House Rental Secrets!

love2Code · 06-28-2009, 09:13 PM

Hello Chris,
Thanks for helping me out with the headline. Would you be able to help me out with my sales copy found in my signature website? I have a small budget, not sure how much I will be able to pay. But please take a look and PM me if you could. Thanks

redfc · 06-29-2009, 01:49 AM

Hello Chris,

Would you help me out on this please,

Sub headlines on top:

Tired of commuting to work everyday, boring daily routine, meeting deadline and attending endless meeting

Lead capture here:

"Who Else Wants A Proven System To Help You Quit Your Day Job For Good?"

my site is at moneynsense

Thanks

Chris Ramsey · 06-29-2009, 08:18 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by redfc

Hello Chris,

Would you help me out on this please,

Sub headlines on top:

Tired of commuting to work everyday, boring daily routine, meeting deadline and attending endless meeting

Lead capture here:

"Who Else Wants A Proven System To Help You Quit Your Day Job For Good?"

my site is at moneynsense

Thanks

I just took a look at your squeeze page... and it's going to need more than just a new headline to make it work.

For starters...

The headline needs to be AT THE TOP of the page, not below the fold like it is now
The headline needs to be smaller and not take up the entire screen for those with small screens
Your sales page and squeeze page need to be completely separated
Your button to subscribe should look like a button - As saavy as I am, I was confused about what to click

There's a lot of work to be done, but you obviously have a knack for writing, so you'll get it where it needs to be. You may just need someone to show you the way.

redfc · 06-29-2009, 09:03 AM

Hi Chris,

Really appreciate your advise, I'll work on page again.

And thank you.

cheers

smithy100 · 06-29-2009, 09:17 AM

Hi can you suggest something to replace this

"Getting Nowhere With Your eBay Business? Discover How Simple Changes And The Right Tools Can Be The Difference Between Success and Failure"

Kevin Birch · 06-29-2009, 03:54 PM

hiya- if this offer is still open:

"The Ultimate Lazy Man's Backlink Machine - How To Get 1488 Backlinks In 180 Days, With Hardly Lifting a Finger"

Many thanks

thegoddessofeleven · 07-02-2009, 02:48 PM

Oh, what fun! I LOVE posts like this....!!! How 'bout this one:

You're About to Learn The Secrets Of Harnessing Solar and Wind Energy That Most People Will Never Know!

doc_web · 07-02-2009, 03:57 PM

Hey Chris

You are doing a great job here, helping out or free.

Can I request you to take a look at my squeeze page and critique its headline.

its located it Successful Gurus

or the headline is as follows

"Free Video
uncovers the ultra secret strategy that helped Gurus make Millions Last Year..."

Thanks in advance Chris

Deepak

06-25-2009, 01:02 PM	#52
Chris Ramsey TheHypnoticCopywriter.com War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Orlando, FL Posts: 505 Thanks: 74 Thanked 139 Times in 72 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Hey Brian, Thanks for the post. I'll gladly have someone else pimping my services If you're worried about cost, I am open to percentage deals. Just depends on the project, the owner, and a million other things. PM me if you want info. My internet's been down for the past few days, so I've got a lot of catching up to do. I'll try to find some time to work on some of these headlines.
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06-26-2009, 04:13 AM	#55
Kelpsi Media Idiotic Marketer War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Malaysia Posts: 182 Thanks: 5 Thanked 7 Times in 7 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Its a very good job being done dude. soon i would like to come up with my idea. I need your help.

06-28-2009, 09:54 AM	#56
RentItNow HyperActive Warrior Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 177 Thanks: 21 Thanked 38 Times in 35 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting *"Property Rental Expert reveals easy to apply 'house for rent' secrets guaranteed to help rent your property FAST...and with competition-killing confidence!"* HowToRentYourHouseNow.com

06-28-2009, 01:49 PM	#57
love2Code Active Warrior Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: US Posts: 43 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 11 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Thanks for helping people with your generous offer. Would you please help me with following heading. Thanks "Do You Want a Digital Product Delivery System that Fully Automates & Protects Sales and Downloads for Google and PayPal Transactions?"
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06-28-2009, 09:13 PM	#60
love2Code Active Warrior Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: US Posts: 43 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 11 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Hello Chris, Thanks for helping me out with the headline. Would you be able to help me out with my sales copy found in my signature website? I have a small budget, not sure how much I will be able to pay. But please take a look and PM me if you could. Thanks
	Are you a Kishore Kumar fan? Find Karaokes, Songs, Lyrics of Kishore kumar music. Write a blog, request a song, submit a song. Have fun.

06-29-2009, 01:49 AM	#61
redfc Active Warrior Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 51 Thanks: 3 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Hello Chris, Would you help me out on this please, Sub headlines on top: Tired of commuting to work everyday, boring daily routine, meeting deadline and attending endless meeting Lead capture here: "Who Else Wants A Proven System To Help You Quit Your Day Job For Good?" my site is at moneynsense Thanks

06-29-2009, 09:03 AM	#63
redfc Active Warrior Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 51 Thanks: 3 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Hi Chris, Really appreciate your advise, I'll work on page again. And thank you. cheers

06-29-2009, 09:17 AM	#64
smithy100 Banned Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 12 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Hi can you suggest something to replace this "Getting Nowhere With Your eBay Business? Discover How Simple Changes And The Right Tools Can Be The Difference Between Success and Failure"

06-29-2009, 03:54 PM	#65
Kevin Birch Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Manchester, UK . . .but I would rather be elsewhere! Posts: 1,271 Thanks: 3 Thanked 12 Times in 7 Posts Contact Info	Re: Free Headline Rewriting hiya- if this offer is still open: "The Ultimate Lazy Man's Backlink Machine - How To Get 1488 Backlinks In 180 Days, With Hardly Lifting a Finger" Many thanks
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07-02-2009, 02:48 PM	#66
thegoddessofeleven ~* Warrior Fabulous *~ Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Texas, USA. Posts: 335 Thanks: 8 Thanked 9 Times in 8 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Oh, what fun! I LOVE posts like this....!!! How 'bout this one: You're About to Learn The Secrets Of Harnessing Solar and Wind Energy That Most People Will Never Know!
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07-02-2009, 03:57 PM	#67
doc_web Spying on Gurus.... :) War Room Member Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Birmingham, United Kingdom. Posts: 61 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 21 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts	Re: Free Headline Rewriting Hey Chris You are doing a great job here, helping out or free. Can I request you to take a look at my squeeze page and critique its headline. its located it Successful Gurus or the headline is as follows "Free Video uncovers the ultra secret strategy that helped Gurus make Millions Last Year..." Thanks in advance Chris Deepak