Please critique my squeeze page

[Uncle Dimitry]

Hello Copy Warriors,

Please take a look at my squeeze page:
Blog automated with Blogomator

Thanks for your comments.

[marioxiao]

hi Dimitry.

your squeeze page is awesome, nice combination with blue and orange color. I am just have one suggestion : I think the checkmark graphic (v) is better if it's not too close with the red border line in the left side. (I am opening your site using Firefox3)

Just giving a space a little bit like in the right side, and everything will be look professional.

[Uncle Dimitry]

Originally Posted by marioxiao

hi Dimitry.

your squeeze page is awesome, nice combination with blue and orange color. I am just have one suggestion : I think the checkmark graphic (v) is better if it's not too close with the red border line in the left side. (I am opening your site using Firefox3)

Just giving a space a little bit like in the right side, and everything will be look professional.

thanks for heads up about firefox. My bad, i've tested only in IE

[benne13]

I really like this page. It has a nice color scheme and is not too wordy. So many squeeze pages are full of too much content that requires visitors to skip down several screen to finally get to the bottom of the document to see how much it costs. But your page is really clean and straightforward.

[Alexa Smith]

I like this very much; I think you've done a great job with it. I bet the opt-in rate will be pretty successful.

The only little thing I might change, for myself, is that in the list of points made down the left-hand side, I might start off each of the black text bits, below the orange sub-headings, with a Capital Letter as for the start of a new sentence. Optional only, just style preference, I think - it might look better(?).

Well done with it, Uncle.

[jukeboxhero]

Just my humble opinion but there is a sizeable disconnect between what your offering and what your buyers are looking for....

I'm guessing that your buyers will be looking for and easy way to automate their money making system...Or, a way to easily make extra money online using your automation software....

Bottom line people want money....they don't want a "Blog Empire" what the heck is a "Blog empire" going to do for the average joe?

Try to get into your prospects head just a bit more....Do you think prospects are sitting at home scratching their heads saying silently too themselves "Life would be perfect if I only had a blog empire"?

I do like the colors...

If you want to check your site on every browser you can use BrowserShots.org

[Uncle Dimitry]

Originally Posted by jukeboxhero

Just my humble opinion but there is a sizeable disconnect between what your offering and what your buyers are looking for....

I'm guessing that your buyers will be looking for and easy way to automate their money making system...Or, a way to easily make extra money online using your automation software....

Bottom line people want money....they don't want a "Blog Empire" what the heck is a "Blog empire" going to do for the average joe?

Try to get into your prospects head just a bit more....Do you think prospects are sitting at home scratching their heads saying silently too themselves "Life would be perfect if I only had a blog empire"?

I do like the colors...

If you want to check your site on every browser you can use BrowserShots.org

I had different headlines rotating in split test, but for some reason this one works best. Maybe it converts better because Blogomator is especially useful if you have more than one blog and would like to control everything in one place: all blogs, all categories, all twitters and so on.

Strange thing though, one evil headline converted real good too. It said: "Go Away, I Don't Need You Here!" and small text below "....unless you are a smart blogger" Who knows why? Maybe curiosity....

[JP Wilson]

Nice page brother. You might want to experiment with the text on the opt-in button, however. In split tests conducted by two of the top guys in the business (Deiss & Kern), these two phrases out-pulled everything else:

-Click Here to Continue (yellow/orange button w/ blue text)
-Submit (red button w/ red cirlce around it & white tex)

You also might see a bump in conversions by ditching the password field --possibly even the name field as well. I have pages that convert very well that just use the email field only. Obviously, these are just suggestions and you will always want to do your own testing to confirm what performs best for your particular offer.

Best of luck my friend.

[amitcor]

great looking page.

i would put an explination of why they are getting it free while others paid for it.
also i don't really like the number spots left. looks cheezy.
just my opinion

[Uncle Dimitry]

Originally Posted by amitcor

great looking page.
i would put an explination of why they are getting it free while others paid for it.

I made that for a reason to make visitors curious about valuable stuff that I have inside. And make them greedy, thinking about possibility of getting free access

Originally Posted by amitcor

great looking page.
also i don't really like the number spots left. looks cheezy.
just my opinion

that's to create urgency, visitors will understand this is not going to last forever and can end every minute. So, better hurry up and reserve a spot.

[Uncle Dimitry]

Originally Posted by JP Wilson

Nice page brother. You might want to experiment with the text on the opt-in button, however. In split tests conducted by two of the top guys in the business (Deiss & Kern), these two phrases out-pulled everything else:

-Click Here to Continue (yellow/orange button w/ blue text)
-Submit (red button w/ red cirlce around it & white tex)

You also might see a bump in conversions by ditching the password field --possibly even the name field as well. I have pages that convert very well that just use the email field only. Obviously, these are just suggestions and you will always want to do your own testing to confirm what performs best for your particular offer.

Best of luck my friend.

Thanks. I've tried to remove password field in the past, but had
pain in the ass from users, who didn't receive emails with generated
passwords.

Looks like ditching name field ( I saw that video ) won't help much
with membership sites, where users are used to fill tons of fields. If it has
only one field, maybe it looks not serious, who knows.... In any case,
on this site the trick didn't work. We saw absolutely no difference
in conversions.

[JP Wilson]

Looks like you've already done your fair share of testing my friend. That's great to hear!

One other thing that you may want to consider is placing a video on the right-hand side of the page directly above the opt-in form. Because the use of video is so widespread within this particular niche, I'd say that many of our prospects are almost expecting us to be using it these days. Depending on the quality of your video, you very well may see a significant bump in conversions. If nothing else, it's worth testing out.

Cheers

[Darrel Hawes]

Put this in quotes:

"I actually feel sorry for those who do not know about Blogomator.

They are struggling, frustrated and angry at the amount of work it takes not using this incredible software."

And reword the last sentence to say something like:

Get access to Blogomator today and avoid the frustration and anger from the mind-numbing boredom of doing it all manually.

[CDarklock]

Originally Posted by Uncle Dimitry

Please take a look at my squeeze page

I signed up. I was somewhat concerned about it, because it really wasn't clear what I was getting for free, but I'm a marketing slut and generally happy with the opportunity to look at someone else's marketing anyway.

Your service upsells excellently. I'm constantly confronted by cool stuff I can't have until I upgrade. I think the 15 minute discount is a little low... I wasn't convinced I could use this until it was already expired, and I'm still thinking about whether I want to upgrade or not. It will probably be a couple days before I make up my mind. Of course, I'm sure you've tested that already, and it probably converts pretty well.

[Uncle Dimitry]

Originally Posted by JP Wilson

Looks like you've already done your fair share of testing my friend. That's great to hear!

One other thing that you may want to consider is placing a video on the right-hand side of the page directly above the opt-in form. Because the use of video is so widespread within this particular niche, I'd say that many of our prospects are almost expecting us to be using it these days. Depending on the quality of your video, you very well may see a significant bump in conversions. If nothing else, it's worth testing out.

Cheers

thanks for a tip. Now I have to find somebody, who can create a good video

[Uncle Dimitry]

Originally Posted by Darrel Hawes

Put this in quotes:

"I actually feel sorry for those who do not know about Blogomator.

They are struggling, frustrated and angry at the amount of work it takes not using this incredible software."

And reword the last sentence to say something like:

Get access to Blogomator today and avoid the frustration and anger from the mind-numbing boredom of doing it all manually.

thanks, I'll test that

[JP Wilson]

Looks like you've got a date with the ol' camstudio my friend. If you'd rather not go that route, I know a guy who does excellent work --simply incredible things with video. My business relies quite heavily on him for a myriad of tech-related services. If you want his info, just send me a PM and I'd be happy to pass it along. Take it easy brother.

All the best.

[S.Miles]

I would change your color scheme. The bright blue around the white causes my eyes have to adjust when I read it and after. That doesn’t leave me with the highest professional opinion of your site. I heard that sky blue works well.

Your headline isn’t benefit laden enough. Neither is the rest of your copy. You are giving more features than benefits. Tell the visitor why “Become the Ruler of Your Own Cash Producing Blog Empire” is so great. Will they make more money? How much? How soon? What will that money do for them? Give them more freedom? I don’t know if I really want to rule my own blog empire. Sounds like a lot of managing of my subjects, which takes too much time.

“Use Your Only Chance to Get FREE Access to Automated System, While Others Pay $140 all in one: content, traffic, money and social stuff. One time setup and long lasting results” – This is not quite a good enough “What’s in it for me?” You need more benefits.

Arrows work well on opt in pages. The direct they eye to where you want them to go which is to opt in.

Just a few suggestions. I think your page could be stronger.