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Critique My Site

by Freddie Worrall
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Hey Guys,

I've been working on this site recently and wanted to get some different opinions on it.

What's your reaction to it?

My site

Would love to hear what you guys think of it and if there are any suggestions or improvements that may come to mind.

Thanks for your time,

Fred
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  • Profile picture of the author Steve B
    Freddie,

    To be honest, my first thought was click away to something else.

    Easy money?

    No Risk?

    You've helped thousands with your system?

    Care to share your list of thousands of people that have made money with this?

    I have no idea what you're selling . . . but what is presented on the page makes me think of yet another scam.

    Mind you - I'm not saying you are selling a scam - it's just that the "blind" nature of what you're selling (no clue for the prospect as to what it is) and the language you've used remind me of so many other similar scammy sites.

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    • Profile picture of the author Freddie Worrall
      Originally Posted by Steve B View Post

      Freddie,

      To be honest, my first thought was click away to something else.

      Easy money?

      No Risk?

      You've helped thousands with your system?

      Care to share your list of thousands of people that have made money with this?

      I have no idea what you're selling . . . but what is presented on the page makes me think of yet another scam.

      Mind you - I'm not saying you are selling a scam - it's just that the "blind" nature of what you're selling (no clue for the prospect as to what it is) and the language you've used remind me of so many other similar scammy sites.

      Steve
      No, I do see what you're saying. This is good feedback, thank you. I'm just not quite sure how to put it across in a believable way because the system is one of those that just sound too good to be true, although all of the claims are legitimate, it's just difficult, as you say, to convey the reality of the system in a marketplace (failry) swamped in fear of scams.

      By the way, incase you didn't pick up, this is a betting type loophole which teaches people to cash out bookie bonuses.

      My copywriting skills are pretty much non-existent so these titles are just my guesses as to what may be effective, not a well crafted, proffesional headline, as i'm sure you're well aware!

      I'd love to be able to put this system across more effectively because it's an awesome system, that if people really understand, they will want to be involved with.

      Anyway, thanks for the feedback, it's much appreciated.

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  • Profile picture of the author blueclcl
    Hi Freddie

    I have just had a look at your site and I'm not certain that you have enough persuasive content for me to enter my email details.

    I also think the 'Love Easy Money,' title seems to be a problem as it simply doesn't make me feel that I want to see what you have to say.

    If it was 5 years ago then maybe yes, but now, with so much spam and trashy products about on optin pages, then this won't persuade me.

    As for the rest of the site, I think you need to explain a bit more on what the site actually does.

    This is just my opinion.

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    • Profile picture of the author Freddie Worrall
      Originally Posted by blueclcl View Post

      Hi Freddie

      I have just had a look at your site and I'm not certain that you have enough persuasive content for me to enter my email details.

      I also think the 'Love Easy Money,' title seems to be a problem as it simply doesn't make me feel that I want to see what you have to say.

      If it was 5 years ago then maybe yes, but now, with so much spam and trashy products about on optin pages, then this won't persuade me.

      As for the rest of the site, I think you need to explain a bit more on what the site actually does.

      This is just my opinion.

      bluclcl
      Awesome, thanks for sharing your opinion, it's very valuable.

      I agree about the title, it needs work. Trouble is, i'm terrible at copywriting!

      As for the explaining what the site does more effectively, if you just enter something like someone@something.com and submit you'll see it re-directs to a "explained" section with video explainations, FAQ, highlights, reviews etc.

      Thanks again for the feedback
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      • Profile picture of the author blueclcl
        Originally Posted by Freddie Worrall View Post

        Awesome, thanks for sharing your opinion, it's very valuable.

        I agree about the title, it needs work. Trouble is, i'm terrible at copywriting!

        As for the explaining what the site does more effectively, if you just enter something like someone@something.com and submit you'll see it re-directs to a "explained" section with video explainations, FAQ, highlights, reviews etc.

        Thanks again for the feedback
        Redirecting to the section that explains what the site is all about is a good move and your subscribers will benefit from that.

        Like I said its just the title and lack of basic content on homepage.

        The thread below may help you with copyrighting:

        http://www.warriorforum.com/main-int...wipe-file.html

        Good luck
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  • Profile picture of the author Black Belt Marketing
    I think you should explain a little bit about what you're offering here.

    Right now the page is way too vague, and although it may convert traffic the list you build is not going to be targeted at all.

    Many people will opt in out of curiosity on your current blind page, but when they find out you're offering a bookie betting system they'll unsubscribe.

    However, if you told people you had a new and unique bookie betting system upfront you'd get fewer subscribers but they'd be more targeted and more likely to take action with you.
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  • Profile picture of the author skyro
    What is it your offering? Maybe you should try placing whatever it is your offering on your landing page.
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  • Profile picture of the author msabihj
    OK, let's talk about the solution.

    Re-design your page. Make it professional and catchy. Maybe you should try using any plugin or tool that let's you build marketing pages quickly.

    Presell your product on the landing page (or squeeze page). Tell people about your product/service.

    Headline is missing. Create one - a powerful one.

    If you are into selling, why not add copyright page, contact us and about us page at the footer? Buyers will love it.

    Product description is missing. Enlist the benefits of buying your product or tell your audience clearly about what need this product will fulfill.

    I hope it will help.


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  • Profile picture of the author Freddie Worrall
    Great feedback guys, thank you very much.

    I think I will try a marketing page plugin, I hadn't thought of this yet simply because I like the responsive themes (the sites current theme) front page, but I see now that it's important to let the customer know more straight away, as Black Belt Marketing says, less will subsribe but it will be a more concentrated, high quality list.

    Thanks again for the feedback, if anyone has more, please, hit me!
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  • Profile picture of the author Freddie Worrall
    Talking of landing page plugins (wordpress, of course) does anyone know of a good one?
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    • Profile picture of the author msabihj
      Originally Posted by Freddie Worrall View Post

      Talking of landing page plugins (wordpress, of course) does anyone know of a good one?
      WP profit builder or funnelkit.
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