headline feedback needed for graphic design website

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I am trying to come up with some ideas for my design portfolio website and need some feedback and or ideas, direction, rephrasing suggestions and feedback. I'm not a copywriter so need some help to come up with something compelling that will sell to both hiring design firms and freelance clients.- help greatly appreciated!!!

Design- because my career in porn did not work out so well

PUTTING IT ALL TOGETHER THROUGH DESIGN

BRING DA BLING
Creative ideas that will polish your image

Its not the size ,
its how you use it.

Design- because my career in porn did not work out so well.

ye,s, i went there.
its not how big it is, its how you use it.

yes, i went there.

IDEAS- its not big they are, its how you use them!
unique, creative visual solution

Solutions That Sizzle

Ideas- big, bad and ready to please

Think work, think work- thinking

Great ideas results from thinking outside and inside the box

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  • Profile picture of the author Phil
    I don't think any of these work: you're trying to be clever. Contrary to
    a lot you might hear - cleverness and good copy don't necessarily go
    together.

    Think about two things: what is your USP (what is unique about your
    service that no one else provides, or what can you offer in a unique way).
    And think about why someone coming to your website might be looking
    for a designer, or might use you.

    Try a headline with each of those ideas. Next, try and put those two
    thoughts together and see what you have. Either way, you will have
    something which would work better than your current suggestions -
    because however however good or bad, it will at least be of interest to
    someone looking for a designer.

    Perhaps you might think about why past clients have decided to use
    your services - quite often, the reason why one comes to you is the
    reason another comes to you, so you could simply use that.

    Alternatively, take a look at some classic headlines and see if any would
    fit your design service.
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    • Profile picture of the author graphicboy1976
      Thanks of your feedback. Here are some new ideas taking some suggestion from your reply

      SDCS- Making complicated things simple.

      being good, not just looking good!- secs

      No design without discipline. No discipline without intelligence

      Forms to complement performance

      its about making other designers feel like idiots because that idea wasnt theirs.

      SD Designs- the difference between shooting a bullet and throwing it.

      Ideas that keep you happy, the manufacturer in the black and the aesthete unoffended.

      Design is easy. All you do is stare at the screen until drops of blood form on your forehead.
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      • Profile picture of the author Phil
        Originally Posted by graphicboy1976 View Post

        Thanks of your feedback. Here are some new ideas taking some suggestion from your reply

        SDCS- Making complicated things simple.

        being good, not just looking good!- secs

        No design without discipline. No discipline without intelligence

        Forms to complement performance

        its about making other designers feel like idiots because that idea wasnt theirs.

        SD Designs- the difference between shooting a bullet and throwing it.

        Ideas that keep you happy, the manufacturer in the black and the aesthete unoffended.

        Design is easy. All you do is stare at the screen until drops of blood form on your forehead.
        You're still trying to write a clever headline and failing. And I still don't
        see any USP in these.

        Try this:

        Stop trying to write a headline. Forget about it. Just answer these questions
        in as simple a way as possible - but be specific:

        What do you do? Answer in one or two sentences
        What makes your service different? Answer in one or two sentences.
        Who do you provide your services to? Answer in one or two sentences
        What problem do your clients have, which your service solves? Answer in one or two sentences

        Don't try to be clever, just answer the questions in as specific a way
        as you can.
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  • Profile picture of the author angiecolee
    Do you really have two different threads in the same subforum asking for the same advice?
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    Aspiring copywriters: if you need 1:1 advice from an experienced copy chief, head over to my Phone a Friend page.

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    • Profile picture of the author graphicboy1976
      error in entry. I dont know how to delet the duplicate
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  • Profile picture of the author Tim R
    Originally Posted by graphicboy1976 View Post

    Design- because my career in porn did not work out so well.
    Are you 12? Why the f@#k would you want to put this on your professional site?
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    • Profile picture of the author graphicboy1976
      Originally Posted by Tim R View Post

      Are you 12? Why the f@#k would you want to put this on your professional site?
      Im throwing ideas against the wall- see what sticks. That means throwing first thing that pops out. See if it might lead to a better solution. Part of the creative process - Should respect that. I invite the critique and agree with you, even though the tone and delivery of your comment might be a bit inappropriate.
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      • Profile picture of the author Tim R
        Originally Posted by graphicboy1976 View Post

        ...even though the tone and delivery of your comment might be a bit inappropriate.
        Kinda like how some of your headlines (they're more like taglines) might be perceived by your potential clients, right?
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