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9 years ago

Let us know how it goes.

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joe golfer

9 years ago

It seems to me on first glance you rebranded calisthenics but not much more than that. I think you need a better twist or differentiator to make it stand out in a tough market.

Make the bullets more compelling. One bullet says "The deal with cardio." I doubt people are sitting around saying to themselves, "What's the deal with cardio?" If they are or not, this is where you should be building desire, making them ache to want the product. Create more curiosity. And use at least one bullet to give away one of your best techniques. Give them some takeaway value right in the pitch.

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ewenmack

9 years ago

Originally Posted by joe golfer

It seems to me on first glance you rebranded calisthenics but not much more than that. I think you need a better twist or differentiator to make it stand out in a tough market.

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I told him words to that effect in the first round
and has ignored it.

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Doctor E. Vile

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Tim R 9 years ago

Originally Posted by ewenmack

I told him words to that effect in the first round
and has ignored it.

Yep. Lots of people have told him the same thing and he's ignored it every time.

With all the threads he's starting seems he's more interested in link-dropping than getting actual feedback.
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- RichBeck 9 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by Tim R
  
  With all the threads he's starting seems he's more interested in link-dropping than getting actual feedback.
  
  Tim,
  
  You nailed it.... That is why I chose not to opine.
  
  All The Best,
  
  Rich Beck
  
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joe golfer

9 years ago

Originally Posted by ewenmack

I told him words to that effect in the first round
and has ignored it.

Best,
Doctor E. Vile

Oops, been super busy so I missed their first 10 posts asking the same thing.

I might as well take the opportunity to announce my new copywriting training product called "CopyCramps." I'm branding the method of writing out copy longhand.

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RickDuris

9 years ago

Originally Posted by joe golfer

Oops, been super busy so I missed their first 10 posts asking the same thing.

I might as well take the opportunity to announce my new copywriting training product called "CopyCramps." I'm branding the method of writing out copy longhand.

Sounds intriguing. Is it a "done for you" program?

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joe golfer

9 years ago

Originally Posted by RickDuris

Sounds intriguing. Is it a "done for you" program?

That's the OTO. My team will write it out for you and send you the pages. You also get an official bill from our in-house physical therapist in case anyone doubts you did the work.

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RickDuris

9 years ago

Originally Posted by joe golfer

That's the OTO. My team will write it out for you and send you the pages. You also get an official bill from our in-house physical therapist in case anyone doubts you did the work.

You're gonna be rich! I wish I'd thought of it. You can do an app and everything!

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RickDuris

9 years ago

Sorry, didn't mean to hijack your thread.

As you've probably discovered, your offer isn't converting. You have to put some muscle into it, especially in this market. Good luck.

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sethczerepak

9 years ago

Originally Posted by RickDuris

Sorry, didn't mean to hijack your thread.

As you've probably discovered, your offer isn't converting. You have to put some muscle into it, especially in this market. Good luck.

Dude, sales letter or no sales letter, if this ^ cat ever releases a workout ebook, I'll buy it.

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RickDuris 9 years ago

Originally Posted by sethczerepak

Dude, sales letter or no sales letter, if this ^ cat ever releases a workout ebook, I'll buy it.

Exactly. In this market, the brand and/or the right picture is worth 1000 words.
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Andrew Gould 9 years ago

Originally Posted by sethczerepak

Dude, sales letter or no sales letter, if this ^ cat ever releases a workout ebook, I'll buy it.

That cat's Danny Kavadlo. Here's his ebook.
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shawnlebrun

9 years ago

Originally Posted by RickDuris

Sorry, didn't mean to hijack your thread.

As you've probably discovered, your offer isn't converting. You have to put some muscle into it, especially in this market. Good luck.

Looks like typical Friday night foreplay at my house.

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shawnlebrun

9 years ago

Originally Posted by Glacierice

Going to start an ad campaign tomorrow and make bank

Yeah.... afraid not.

I've been selling in the fitness/fat loss/muscle building market for 14 years... never heard anyone ever wanting to become "vigorous"?

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pewpewpewmonkeys

9 years ago

Going to start an ad campaign tomorrow and make bank

Or learn some valuable lessons.

How many of these threads about your sales page do you plan to make?

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FuNwiThChRiS

9 years ago

"Another" weight loss / fitness product page that nobody will ever see!