Please Critique My Copy
I have written Copy for my very first Client.
(I say "Client" however he hasn't actually paid me yet.
All I was charging was $19 ... ) I'm not complaining
though: It's all part of the process: I'm bound to make
some mistakes. : )
Anyway I would really appreciate it if you would critique
the following Copy. (Note: They're images so may take
an extra couple of seconds to load ...)
Original Copy:
http://www.instant-headlines.com/copy1.html
My Copy:
http://www.instant-headlines.com/copy2.html
(If the goal was to increase his conversion, then I'm
considering this Copy a success. : )
However I would really appreciate your feedback. Please
note, however, it's equally important to know what I
did right (and what you liked) as well as what can be
improved.
Thank You,
Jonathan
P.S. How much do you think I should be charging for
Copy of this "standard?"
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