Please critique headline, offline niche.
Crafting a headline to sit right above a video to soft sell offline business owners benefits of IM.
I've got the following--and would greatly appreciate any feedback:
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If you're worried diminishing sales will make your business fail
and think spending MORE on advertising is the solution - you may not
be positioning yourself to survive this economy.
Learn these proven strategies guaranteed to secure the leads to be able to rest,
knowing your business will endure difficult years ahead.
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I'm not seeing this with fresh eyes, but two words I fear to come off as too 'hyped up' to business owners are "proven" and "guaranteed" Hmm.. curious to get feedback. Thanks so much!
Consulting Tycoon
If you can read this.... thank a teacher.
If you can read this in English... thank a vet!