Detailed breakdown of a highly converting VSL in the weight-loss niche

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So I was browsing the forum a couple of weeks back and I stumbled on a thread where the VSLs of a number of products were being discussed.

Some of you noticed how these products were converting like mad on ClickBank. The best part was that these guys are more or less using the same formula for all their VSLs, only adapting the story to fit the product.

I broke down and did a detailed analysis of the mechanics and the more subtler persuasion tricks that were on display in this VSL for the weight-loss niche.

This is LONG.

But it's so, so worth it....

For copy addicts like me, this is heroin.

Don't let it go to waste.

Also before the moral/copyright police break down my door, I believe this qualifies as fair use. These are comments only and you can find the text transcript on the product's page. Don't just blatantly steal this. For best results, apply your own ingenuity.

Enjoy.

*edit: To keep this thread to a manageable length and save you from scrolling induced carpal tunnel, I've put up only the first 10 pages. If you want the remaining 14, you can get them here.












Get the whole PDF here.
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  • Well done Mr Silvestru (a lot of work went into that).

    But no need to stop...

    We could have ongoing threads doing this.

    Lets "guarantee" at least 5 "thanks" for each one.

    Because it will enhance the forum with some exceptional material.

    A detailed analysis of the copywriting techniques - on high converting pieces (let's avoid any "scams" - they might make some cash but are never worth bothering with).

    Be very helpful for the new writers.

    And a useful prompt for the not so new ones.


    Steve
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  • Profile picture of the author scribeforvibes
    This is really helpful! Thanks for this.

    Love, scribeforvibes
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  • Profile picture of the author JamesBarefield
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    I am literally going to include this in my swipe collection, thanks man
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  • Profile picture of the author HowardLynch
    Thank you for the share!
    I see this model being used for pretty much every vertical, only the wording changes.
    It works very well indeed
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  • Profile picture of the author Bradtastic
    Great writing. Though as somebody that's been around the fitness niche for a long time, some of the content is tired. I've seen so many BS stories about an "ancient technique" that's superior to everything else. More times than not, it's just calisthenics repackaged. Also, some of the info is factually wrong or just opinion - weight lifting is only destructive if you use bad form, etc. etc.

    I know that's more about the content than the quality of the writing. I've just seen a lot of this stuff aimed at getting people to buy, not necessarily aimed at getting them to achieve their goals. Which is fine, it's just a shorter term strategy, and won't create repeat customers as often. I don't mean to come across as critical, just my thoughts as a slightly jaded person very involved in that niche.
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    • Profile picture of the author Silvestru
      Originally Posted by GlenH View Post

      When you go to 'The Spartan Protocol' sales page (The Spartan Protocol Home - Get your Discount Today! $39.95!) there's no VSL, only a pretty short and sharp 'sales letter'.

      Is there another site for the product?
      http://spartanfatmelting.com/

      Originally Posted by Bradtastic View Post

      Great writing. Though as somebody that's been around the fitness niche for a long time, some of the content is tired. I've seen so many BS stories about an "ancient technique" that's superior to everything else. More times than not, it's just calisthenics repackaged. Also, some of the info is factually wrong or just opinion - weight lifting is only destructive if you use bad form, etc. etc.

      I know that's more about the content than the quality of the writing. I've just seen a lot of this stuff aimed at getting people to buy, not necessarily aimed at getting them to achieve their goals. Which is fine, it's just a shorter term strategy, and won't create repeat customers as often. I don't mean to come across as critical, just my thoughts as a slightly jaded person very involved in that niche.
      You're right and that's why I focused only on the tactics rather than the "science" behind it. Some of the stuff is pretty sketchy but I know that this VSL converted pretty well when it was released. Goes to show that you can get the sale without having celebrities or high-production values.

      Curious to know what's a product/sales letter in this space that you think is doing pretty well and is great at addressing the high level of skepticism that health & fitness prospects have.
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