Need feedback on my sales page

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heres the link:

YourMusicMarketer.com

I basically sold one of my diablo packages using email marketing. A guy emailed me saying hes going to be purchasing on the 20th, but you know how that goes....

Anyways i discovered through analytics that the average time on page is 7-10 seconds, so i want to optimize for those numbers..

what do you think?
#feedback #page #sales
  • Profile picture of the author 37Bodie
    Your 'pop-up' box 'hit' me way too quick.

    That would put me off immediately.

    Click on to next site....
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  • Profile picture of the author TjarkHartmann
    So I checked it out real quick and figured I'd help you out with the headline, since it's the most important and right now, it can easily be improved.

    Anyway, here you go:

    "How This Simple, 3-Step System Gets You On The Fast-Track To A Successful (And Famous) Career In Music... In Less Than 30 Days."
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    • Profile picture of the author ewenmack
      Clearly state who this is for first,
      so the right crowd know it's for them...

      then...

      Name their greatest desired outcome
      so that they know they will be rewarded quickly,
      all within the headline without empty promises.

      So here how it would look...

      For the musician, singer, songwriter who wants fame and fortune...

      Secret To Getting Your Music Seen, Heard And Touched By Industry Power Players
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  • Profile picture of the author Kherk Roldan
    Sorry but your sales page is not catchy and don't get people attention to scroll down, i guess that is the reason why people leave your site instantly.

    Try adding some Call to action
    welcome optin box
    add popup when someone leave your website
    try using infographic sales page


    hope it helps
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  • Profile picture of the author gjabiz
    and maybe get noticed from the pack...or you could use
    Diablo and get noticed today.

    I like Ewen's headline, now a little story.

    This past Saturday I was at Queen's College to audition for America's Got Talent. I made it a point to talk to as many performers as I could, and since I was there about 7 hours before I got to audition, I talked to scores.

    The waiting room held about 500 people, the line to get into that was a couple of hundred yards. Thousands were there, and they get tens of thousands from all over the country during this phase of the search.

    Hey, I probably could have sold dozens of your product in person...but anyhow...

    Let me cut to the chase...what did scores of musicians tell me they wanted?
    Why were they there?

    To win a million dollars? Come on, even stoned musicians have a grasp of reality (sometimes) ...NO.

    To a person, from the one man band, to the groups, from acoustic to electronic, every single musician there WANTED....drum roll...

    EXACTLY what you are selling...


    EXPOSURE.

    The dream wasn't to win, but to get on the show and be seen. Even one episode or one pass through from the judges gave them time to leverage that
    exposure

    to get more gigs, to find an audience, to have something for producers and others to look at...

    EXPOSURE.

    Ewen hit the nail on the head.

    Get rid of that gray background. Lose the photos you have. If anything, do a where's Waldo type pic, like a musician at Times Square, because that is the crowd the artist has to rise above.

    I listened to musicians from around the world, one was from Russia, and New York is the largest audition site for all the Talent shows.

    There are many fabulous musicians, but, the majority will never be known, because they don't know how to market themselves, and since you provide what appears to be a push button solution to them...

    So, use Ewen's headline, or something similar and have a pic, and in that 7 seconds, give them the big benefit of your product. Cut down the verbiage, get to the "hook" of your offer, create a chorus (Exposure, Exposure, Exposure) and make sure you acknowledge their art...and let them know yours is

    marketing musicians.

    gjabiz




    Originally Posted by cjsparacino123 View Post

    heres the link:

    YourMusicMarketer.com

    I basically sold one of my diablo packages using email marketing. A guy emailed me saying hes going to be purchasing on the 20th, but you know how that goes....

    Anyways i discovered through analytics that the average time on page is 7-10 seconds, so i want to optimize for those numbers..

    what do you think?
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