My Very First Sales Copy < PLEASE GIVE ME FEEDBACK!!!!

Anyone got any comments on this PLEASE?

My comment is that you should take a look at other salesletters and see why they might be successful then start by trying to make adjustments to your own copy based on that.

Best of Luck!

You could point out that Video traffic could be something that's missing from the reader's marketing efforts.

People are more likely to act when something is missing from their lives rather getting more of what they already have.

I's also recommend having links to your videos with major hits on them to boost your credibility.

It's "P.P.S" and "P.P.P.S" not "P.S.S.".

Try this headline:

I know the imagery is quite vivid, but that's the point. This is meant to peak the reader's interest and take the risk of reading. This makes your product much more exclusive and people will want to be part of it even if it is illegal, but they'll find out it's not and it will put their mind at ease. Take this idea and run with it.

The sales copy will look much better with color, font style and images. So no point saying anything else at this point. I see there's going to be a lot of lists. You're borderline for having too much.

Anyway, that's what I've got at this point. I don't have the time to actually read the whole thing. Just make sure you get some testimonials to back yourself up and perhaps even provide a preview of your videos or pictures of the video chapters to show what they'd learn for that chapter, etc.

Good luck now.

Thanks guys for the great tips, very interesting angles.

Anyone else got anything, please share.