New Writer Wants Baptism by Fire
Relative newb here, though no stranger to word-weaving. I figured I'd go the 'baptism-by-fire' route and introduce myself with a little piece of copy I just wrote. It's a brief project description for the portfolio page of an (amazing!) Italian web agency: terrificly talented trio, spitting out one striking website after another... but, they can't speak English. I can, and would really like to know what you think of my copywriting skills. In my (preemptive) defense, please understand that said skills are in a completely embryonic stage. So, I expect you to be harsh and unforgiving, as well as full of good advice and constructive criticism. Here goes...
We've just completed our project for Antico Setificio Fiorentino, one of the most fascinating businesses we've ever had the pleasure to work with. This silk weaving workshop has been operating in Florence since 1786, and today is producing luxury fabrics for some of the most exclusive customers in the world... on the same looms they were using back then! Our goal was to create a website that could elegantly convey the lure of such a unique place, and pair it with all the best tools of today, like responsive design and dynamic templates, for a web experience that is engaging and rewarding, strikingly sophisticated yet efficient and user-friendly. We feel like we did a decent job... what do you think?
Andrew Gould