How is this for my first squeeze page? Advice for a newbie please.

While it is good ..... try putting a copy of the form above the fold, with something like "In a hurry ? Opt in immediately" ..... Also, try increasing the content with testimonials.... Lengthy sales pages convert better than their short counterparts.

Thanks, I will try that. What about the quality of the courses I am giving away?

Bert,

For some reason, the page took about 6 seconds to load and when it did, the opt-in form didn't show up until I refreshed the page. Could have been a freak coincidence.

I also agree to have another opt-in form above the fold. Place it right after the post-headline:

"Yes, there is no catch! You get $520 worth of Money Making Resources for FREE!"

A matter of fact, just REMOVE "Yes, there is no catch!" entirely. You're already making people skeptical with that comment.

As an attention grabber, I would just get right to the point and say:

or

Add some numbers to your headline:

Pick one. You can even say 21 days. It's all still very believable depending on how you pitch your USP.

Make sure your opt-in boxes are centered. Just add margin:0 auto; for your opt-in box table tags in line 232 within the "style" command.

I can get really anal about a lot of other details, but it's good enough. Not bad.

Correct: "Yes, there is no catch!" needs to go. Opt-in above the fold. How 'bout some testimonials? These are really great suggestions for you, man. I'm so impressed with this forum! :-)

The graphic with all the pictures needs a border or it needs to be positioned to "flow" better visually. The white space is a bit goofy and alignment builds trust. Maybe your face on the left and the books on the right...not sure, but tops of things need to line up with other tops of things as do left and right edges.

White space is like a river. It needs to flow.

Edges need to be aligned.

These are very simple quick graphical changes.

Center the opt-in at the bottom, it's left aligned in my browser.

also, figure out how to pre-sell them. Mention things like "my clients" or something like that in the copy. Subtle things that create an in for you for future purchases.

Hey, a couple of things:

First off, you obviously put some effort into this, and it shows. I think a bit of polishing and you're good to go.

-The top of the site is very cluttered - I'd clean it up because my eyes are going crazy trying to decide what I should read/look at first.

-I think your sub-head is a better headline, because it's very specific:

"Absolutely NO catch! Receive over $520 in money making resources TODAY for FREE!"

That's more intriguing to me. Only I'd put the "absolutely no catch" at the end instead of the beginning.

And then I'd put each e-book on top of the description, because my eyes keep wandering to the pictures and I'm having trouble reading the text.

Best of luck,
David

I'm not surprised your opt-in rate is so low... this is WAAAY too long.

Here's the secret I've found with squeeze pages... you need to keep them short, sharp, and snappy ("zippy", as Vin would say).

A short but powerful headline... optin-box above the fold... and 3 - 6 killer bullets.

That's really all you need.

I've seen some sexy looking ones that have had custom graphics for optin boxes etc... but I'm not sure if that improves conversions or not.

With squeeze pages... less is often more. Keep it brief, simple, and to-the-point... and you'll get far better response rates.

-Dan

There's too much stuff on that page. If you're thinking video - stick it above the fold in the middle with the opt-in box to the right with just a few lines of copy below. The way you've done it, you're giving away the farm before you're getting them to opt-in. K.I.S.S. - keep it simple stupid. Like this one of mine - Killer Sales Video- Top Quality Custom Marketing Video, Promotional Video, Video Trailers, Video Tours, Video Testimonials and how's this for a video squeeze -

And Bertus...get rid of the word "ebook" from all your copy. Why? Read this - http://www.warriorforum.com/war-room...ll-ebooks.html

(Just saw you're not a "War Room" member. You should be) It reads -

Bertuseng-

This page is WAY to long and
involved to be an effective
squeeze page.

Sorry to disappoint.

But look on the bright side,
it's going to be pretty easy
to fix.

First up, rethink your headline
and subhead. They need to be
a lot snappier, and they need
to make the reader excited
about what's on offer. Also,
asking the reader to "sign up"
is going to be a mistake. Sounds
too much like a commitment.

Second, definitely remove "no
catch." it makes it sound like
yes, there definitely is a catch.

Third, if you're going to have
graphics, make them high quality.

The images you have, especially
the ecovers above the fold are
terrible. People won't know what
they are... and who wants to
"sign up" for something if they
don't even know what it is?

Fourth - make the whole thing fit
above the fold. Do like Daniel says:
a handful of bullets, a compelling
call to action and a snappy headline,
and you're golden.

There's more, but that should be
enough to get you some much
improved results.

Good luck with it.

-David Raybould

Thanks a lot for all this invaluable advice. I made a few changes, but I am still going to make a few more. Still thinking of the headlines, I got the current headlines form a friend that is a very good copywriter, so I thought it would do for now, but I will rethink it a bit. And I will probably lower the amount of guides, to about 3 and then maybe try and sell the rest as a once off offer when they sign up. Could that work?